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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2012-05-14 11:29:39 |
Let's have shower together |
Yeah i was about to say that too. I was 6ft at 16 |
| 2012-04-28 22:59:41 |
my sisters.... |
Wow i meant to say dusk was the other guy. My bad Some story didnt mean to call you out. |
| 2012-04-28 22:57:54 |
3 Evil Sister- Part 8 |
Im literally about to continue this story. Ill start writing right now and if its not up by the first im posting it. |
| 2012-04-27 21:43:49 |
my sisters.... |
Well some story took it from another guy. |
| 2012-02-12 11:35:53 |
My Mom and My Dream Girl |
This story is very intriguing. I like it A+ |
| 2012-02-09 13:05:35 |
3 Evil Sisters-Part 6 |
I love this story. That is all i have to say. |
| 2012-02-08 21:21:28 |
My Aunt. The spoiled housewife's story. Ch. IX |
I have to say i loved this. it was a great addition to a hopefully continuing series. |
| 2012-01-26 11:13:22 |
I love my little brother |
I agree it was well written but thats about it. There was no build up, no anticipation, and worst of all a bad story. |
| 2012-01-25 09:56:45 |
Blizzard Blues: Chapter Two |
Great story. I love it.Keep up the good work. |
| 2012-01-24 23:18:33 |
3 Evil Sisters-Part 4 |
I think you should slowly work back in the sisters. I would start with riley. Oh and i love this story by the way. |
| 2012-01-16 21:08:55 |
Lost control in Library and Fucked her brains out |
I have to give you some props on this. I liked it and that is more than most people receive from me. I would just go into my detail on the sex aspect of the story. 8/10 from me. |
| 2011-12-17 03:08:10 |
Merry Christmas and A Happy New Year - Part 1 |
It was Ight but i would suggest slowing down just a tad. |
| 2011-12-05 22:26:07 |
Bait and Switch Ch. 11 |
I usually never comment on stories but you have me coming back just to look for the next addition to this story. It is purely amazing. |
| 2011-11-23 13:05:32 |
Happy Thanksgiving Aunt Amy |
I loved it but i would recommend spacing you paragraphs. |
| 2011-10-16 06:24:31 |
My Cousin Joan |
OK fine i will elaborate. Your story was very difficult to read due to the fact in one of the main plot points you kept saying she instead of the persons name which made it very difficult to follow.
"The new woman had two children, a son, the same age as Joan, and a younger daughter. She was offered a job as an Au Pair in Sweden but soon said she leaving as she had a fixation for the son and all was revealed when he gave his mother a letter Joan had sent telling him how she wanted to have his baby. "
That little segment destroyed your story for me.
And dont give me your criticism if you have no idea what you are talking about. How can you get confused by my simple plot structure. All that happened was the kids mother died he moved to canada to start over meets a woman falls in love with her then eventually gets with her. Not that hard to get confused by the simple dialog and insignificant details. Or were you confused by the soft core writing. |
| 2011-10-15 22:10:39 |
My Cousin Joan |
Im sorry but damn. Most of the story didnt make sense at all. |
| 2011-08-26 00:52:06 |
My life (reboot) Part 1 |
UMMM ok i dont get it cause both girls came before he did. |
| 2011-07-27 01:48:33 |
Everything for my Sister Chp. 4 |
the only thing i would say is wrong is the whole winking thing no one winks anymore lol |
| 2011-07-09 18:07:51 |
The Troublemaker |
The story was far to short needs to be at least 3x longer |
| 2011-05-25 02:29:28 |
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next time write more then post because IMO this sucks the way it is |
| 2011-05-21 22:49:17 |
Moms Sleepmask Secrets |
I gave this a positive rating because it was well written but my only downside was that the story was kinda dull. |
| 2011-05-21 22:48:11 |
My 25 year old boyfriend |
I gave a negative vote because of A the format and B the story didnt do it for me, |
| 2011-05-21 13:37:39 |
My True Love |
There are a number of things you need to do.
1. Format better.
2. Make your stories longer.
and 3. Do not have a character say something you already did. |
| 2011-05-21 13:32:38 |
My True Love |
There are a number of things you need to do.
1. Format better.
2. Make your stories longer.
and 3. Do not have a character say something you already did. |
| 2011-05-12 10:45:09 |
My Lovely twin Part 2 |
I know I need to work on my grammar. and Anon your are right i do not care much about my work, but I am going to change that, and as for the format i am going to fix it. |
| 2011-05-09 23:44:59 |
My Lovely twin. |
The mother had a already fertilized egg implanted in her so it wasnt her egg or anything she was not blood related to Kelly |
| 2011-04-18 02:38:32 |
I Raped my mom |
I do apologize to Blue Heart for extending his idea
and i here by give credit to the idea of a blind mother to Blue Heart. |
| 2011-04-17 20:02:28 |
I Raped my mom |
yes this is my version of that story because i liked the first so i am planning on continuing it |
| 2011-04-11 20:28:38 |
My new bride. Part 3 |
Please any comments at all. |
| 2011-04-11 13:06:53 |
MOM WANTS TO BE MY CUM BUCKET! - CHAPTER 5 |
I am sorry to say this but learn some human anatomy because women do not pee from there cunt. and also rick did not take Bec's cherry she already lost it to her mother, so do not lose track of your stories. Other then that its ok. |
| 2011-04-05 14:29:42 |
My new bride part 2 |
There will be more you can count on it. |
| 2011-04-04 23:39:17 |
My sisters freinds... |
yeah man dont stop there it was just getting good |
| 2011-04-01 02:37:28 |
One Sick Brother |
well even if it wasnt the boys kid it could still in some way look like him |
| 2011-03-29 02:52:54 |
My new bride |
thank you for giving me some constructive criticism. |
| 2011-03-29 01:48:21 |
My new bride |
Well it was better spaced and everything in word |
| 2011-03-17 01:47:52 |
Last Will and Testament |
I liked this story. Good job. |
| 2011-03-08 17:50:15 |
After school incest |
@ Efamite you might be surprised in the next iteration |
| 2011-02-23 12:09:12 |
My Life Pt 4 (The Big Game |
I am not a writer i failed English. I just had an idea.And started writing. |
| 2011-02-20 20:05:02 |
My Life Pt 2 |
who is alvin greene |
| 2011-02-20 02:43:31 |
My life Pt 1 |
anyone i would like some feedback even if bad |