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| 2012-06-25 09:24:19 |
MIchelle Part 1 |
NO Kik messaging. I have skype or yahoo. Other wise you can send me an e-mail from your account here and I can give you a direct e-mail. |
| 2012-06-17 23:47:02 |
Michelle Part 6 Punishment |
Okay, what part of "bisexual" did you not understand? I warned my readers some time back that this series was taking some directions I didn't expect, and was upfront with what was coming in this episode. If your sexuality bothers you, I'd suggest therapy. If you were really "fans" you'd be logged in.
'nuff said. |
| 2012-06-01 12:12:59 |
Blizzard Blues: Chapter Four |
Fabulous combination of lust and incest. Loved the way you worked the daughter into the sex life of the older man and his young lover. This should get interesting. |
| 2012-05-31 12:10:40 |
Roses are Red (or, "The Red Girl"). |
Absolutely amazing. You're correct about the original Little Red story. All our "Fairy Tales" were first intended as cautionary tales about the hazards of the real world, and were VERY dark. I always look froward to your stories, as they go places few of us dare. |
| 2012-05-30 16:10:03 |
Blizzard Blues: Chapter Three |
Maybe not as good as the first episode, but well worth the wait. Writer's block sucks, but you've come through it well. Thanks |
| 2012-04-30 10:05:13 |
forced fuck fun at home with babysitter |
This has to be one of the worst I've read on here - and that's saying something. If you're serious - take it down and re-write, then post a version that makes some sense. |
| 2012-04-02 02:35:28 |
Jail Bait |
Better than many on here from people for whom English is their primary language. I agree that there are some issues, but you can work on them. Spell out your words, this isn't cell phone texting and few like to read that, especially in an erotic story. Make sure you keep names straight. Work on your paragraphs and especially conversation and quotation. Overall pretty good. Give us an improved chapter 2, show some progress and you may well make a good writer. Read some of the really great writers on here to see how it's done. eljs, darkbrother, fbailey, etc. What's most important, if you want to be accepted is to keep getting better. |
| 2012-01-26 14:04:23 |
Blizzard Blues: Chapter Two |
Loved the first part, and really like this. You've set it up to go so many fun ways that I'm really looking forward to what happens next. |
| 2012-01-04 08:34:00 |
Bait and Switch Ch. 20 |
Beautifully done! Perfect set-up for a real kick-ass finale, a couple of great plot twists, clearly setting up for something big at the end. Can't wait to read that last chapter, and will be waiting impatiently for the next series when you get back. |
| 2012-01-02 11:37:39 |
Bait and Switch Ch. 19 |
I guess the reply about leaving the country answers a LOT of questions. Hopefully you'll only be gone about a year, and can return with new stories following. At least when I do that thing my personal hard-drive isn't subject to search. Be careful, be safe. Semper Fi. |
| 2012-01-01 23:21:49 |
Bait and Switch Ch. 19 |
Not sure what you were apologizing for, as usual the story line is excellent, a little light on sex, but for a series as long and complex as this, the occasional chapter with a bit less sex is inevitable. Not sure why you're going to stop writing these, but if there's a way we can band together to convince you to reconsider, I'll gladly volunteer to head up the committee. This could easily be an erotic novel in it's own right, it's really that good. |
| 2011-12-23 23:54:51 |
Bait and Switch Ch. 16 |
As always, some terrific writing, a delight to read. We can only hope that when you finish this you come back with more. Your style and technique are second to none here. |
| 2011-11-29 18:34:24 |
Jessica Part 10 Showing Tim |
Author's note:
This will be the last story I allow anonymous voting on. It seems there are a couple of trolls who follow me, and indiscriminately give me negative votes, just for spite. Maybe you don't like my life, maybe you don't like my stories. At least you'll have to sign in to vote from now on. |
| 2011-11-21 21:58:00 |
Bait and Switch Ch. 06 |
This is a great series. A terrific storyline and real characters. You've managed to develop a set of fun, well developed people and created opportunities to have lots of sex while keeping the characters and dialogue believable in context. This is what all the real writers on here strive for. I welcome every new chapter. |
| 2011-05-09 21:56:18 |
MIchelle Part 1 |
I will apologize for posting my stories in blocks like this, but it turns out that since I'm working somewhere that I can't access this website, I can only write while I'm working there, that means I have to post when I'm home. Since I've come down with a "writer's block" on part 5, look for another group later this summer when I'm home again. Expect this series to take some interesting twists, I hope you enjoy the reading as much as I enjoy the writing - but it's for me.
Oldsoldier |