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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2012-12-02 03:19:02 |
Celestial Nirvana: Part 2 - Influence Is Always Real |
The A's are still there? SON OF A BITCH! |
| 2012-11-29 00:02:18 |
Celestial Nirvana: Part 1 - The Wise One |
Oh jeez, sorry about the format! I really hope that wasn't my fault... |
| 2012-05-23 21:38:42 |
Light Of Hellfire Part 10: The Third Apostle |
Guys, seriously, cut it out. |
| 2012-05-11 17:12:28 |
The Crabwalk |
Great story! The dialogue was a been corny, but it was sexy as hell. |
| 2011-11-15 15:20:00 |
DADDY.. MAKE IT ALL GO IN |
I love a good father/daughter story and this was great. But please, work on your grammar before you do another story.
I can't stand those haters, they're nothing but a bunch of whiny cunts. |
| 2011-11-07 06:43:09 |
My Daughter's Slumber Party |
Thanks horny teenager, I really appreciate the support and voice of reason. |
| 2011-09-24 20:17:09 |
Tiffany's Bad Night of Poker |
Very well written, though I'm not sure if I liked it or not. I was turned on at first, but halfway, I just started getting angrier and angrier. I must admit that I am filled more with the urge to kill than sexual arousal. But don't let me ruin your story, you are a great writer. |
| 2011-09-24 17:01:52 |
Family of Whores |
It was ok, but it has a lot of room for improvement. It could use a lot more build-up with emotional development; Rebecca becoming horny for the dog so quickly could use more explanation, their youngest daughter suddenly willing to fuck her parents and her dog needs explanation, and the fact that the father is so willing to molest his daughter needs a lot of explanation. It was good, but it needed a lot more development for every character and there needed to be modesty during the sex. |
| 2011-09-22 06:48:52 |
My Daughter's Slumber Party |
IF YOU DON'T LIKE IT THEN DON'T COMMENT! |
| 2011-09-21 15:54:07 |
My Daughter's Slumber Party |
I hope everyone enjoys the story! |
| 2011-09-11 13:15:07 |
The Farm |
Pretty good, but what the hell is a dog's "knot"? |
| 2011-08-02 21:21:08 |
Daughter's Friend |
This is officially my favorite story, seriously, this was breathtaking. I knew it was going to end in an orgy or at least a threeway, but after the first half, I couldn't imagine how you would keep me entertained until the second, but you did! That was one of the greatest stories I have ever read, I loved the sex, the story, and the comedy. It was the perfect blend and I would like to thank you for posting this online so that we could read it. Thank you, this was a fantastic story. |
| 2011-08-02 19:13:20 |
Airport |
It needed to be a lot longer, a LOT longer. There was no buildup. |
| 2011-08-02 19:09:10 |
Pizza with Jade |
Really good, I loved it. Though if I can give some constructive criticism, I thought that the transition between being outside and actually inside her was too short. For example, you say that he just forced his dick into her asshole and pussy, without any real buildup. You should have described pressing the head against the ring, pushing the head in, and the tightness as you forced it in all the way. You did the same thing with her pussy. Also, you should have had him lick her pussy between fondling her breasts and actually raping her. It's kind of gross to lick a girl's pussy after she's already been ejaculated into, and you didn't give enough detail. But all that aside, good story. |
| 2011-07-14 12:18:35 |
Sailing with my daughter and friend pt2 |
I love this story, really well done. |
| 2011-07-12 14:40:55 |
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It could use a lot of work. There wasn't nearly enough build-up, the girl who was supposedly 14 talked like she was 9 years old, and never EVER give the main character an 8 inch dick. Saying it's big is fine, but actually saying it's 8 inches is an amateur and stupid move. It was ok, but like I said, it needed work. |
| 2011-06-10 17:20:10 |
My loving daughter and my wife. |
Along with a sense of grammar... |
| 2011-05-15 11:54:16 |
Laurie shares her daughter with me |
Pretty good, but your grammar and background description need work. |
| 2011-04-19 12:55:42 |
The slut my daughter rooms with |
Pretty good, but it was way too short. You needed more time between when Cindy is introduced and when he just decides to rape her. There have been a few girls that pissed me off, but I don't just drag them into the nearest room and violate them. You also needed to spend more time with the sex itself. You basically just jumped past fucking her pussy and only took a quick look into anal. it was pretty good, but it needs work.
I also love what Anonymous reader said about modern day society. |
| 2011-02-20 18:57:59 |
Fucking my sister during the holidays (reposted) |
I would like to apologize to anyone who sees this story. I reposted my work because I was just arrogant and desperate for feedback, and I didn't even bother to make it better. I'm sorry, and I hope this won't give you a negative view of the rest of my work. Again, I apologize for my careless immaturity. |
| 2011-02-13 19:42:55 |
Insanity, Incest, and Intimacy (Edited) |
Please keep comments positive. Enjoy! |
| 2011-01-20 12:08:30 |
Love And Lust: Sibling Complications |
Please leave only constructive comments. |
| 2011-01-20 12:08:23 |
Love And Lust: Sibling Complications |
Please leave only constructive comments. |
| 2010-11-15 15:06:25 |
Mother and Daughter Unite w/ boyfriend...what? |
thanks for the compliment, I\'m glad you enjoyed it |
| 2010-11-15 15:05:44 |
Mother and Daughter Unite w/ boyfriend...what? |
thanks for the compliment, I\'m glad you enjoyed it |
| 2010-09-19 14:46:00 |
Me, My Girlfriend, And Her Mom |
This is the Sage of the Forlorn Path saying that the sequel is out: 'Me, My Girlfriend, And Her Mom Part 2: Dominance'
I hope you enjoy |
| 2010-09-03 06:39:26 |
Me, My Girlfriend, And Her Mom Part 2: Domination |
This is the Sage of the Forlorn Path saying enjoy the story! |
| 2010-08-23 10:59:40 |
Holiday of Sin |
awesome story, I loved it |
| 2010-08-19 21:54:21 |
Me, My Girlfriend, And Her Mom |
This is the Sage Of The Forlorn Path saying enjoy the story! |