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| 2013-02-27 01:36:24 |
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You had better get a move on and write your puerile comments on more of the stories here because I have asked XNXX to remove all my stories.
I will no longer post here because of you nor will I read any of the crap you choose to inflict on anyone unfortunate to glance at what you have written.
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| 2013-02-24 05:10:16 |
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Why do you bother? You have left comments on five or so of my stories and no one has told you they like what you've put. I just ignore them now, they're all the same with some pitiful play on the non de plume I use and an obsession with shit.
And who's a loser? Someone like me with 63 stories posted, a Recommended Writer and a respected voice on both the story site and the forum. One who's opinions on other writers' work are listened to and followed or you, an anonymous writer of childishly abusive comments on my stories.
Go work that one out you winner you. |
| 2013-02-12 01:58:33 |
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Thanks for the kind thoughts (comment One) and good luck to you (comment Two)
I wrote this as a personal self discovery/ love story first and a sex story second.
Glad you like it. |
| 2013-02-07 01:45:40 |
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Thank you so much for your carefully considered opinion now go and fuck yourself .
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| 2012-12-08 16:19:47 |
THE WILLING SLAVE 2: FAMILY AFFAIRS (Revised) |
Outstanding. BTW I've put you up for Recommended Writer List so you might need to amend that signature. You are a real talent. |
| 2012-10-18 14:16:01 |
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Work on my commas? Why ?
What is this obsession with commas and, more to the point, show me a sentence that has been punctuated incorrectly.
And who are you calling Dickwad, shit for brains?
What the fuck have you written? Possibly nothing?
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| 2012-10-18 06:57:14 |
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Go fuck yourself cunt face |
| 2012-10-18 06:56:16 |
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Did you read the tags bozo?
Why read it if this type of story upsets your pea sized brain so much? |
| 2012-10-17 14:02:56 |
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Yes, why don't they?
This is my fucking story dip shit.
I wrote the thing, it is mine to do with as I want. |
| 2012-10-17 00:57:22 |
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5 negatives already, I don't know why I bother.
Yes, this is a story I posted before as The Swimming Hole and I had all my stories pulled and as I want to I post them again so people can vote them into fucking oblivion.
And as for Mr Watch your commas, go fuck yourself. |
| 2012-10-10 03:53:42 |
my nine year old neighbor |
First off let this be the last story you write about 9 year olds This rates as a pedo story and you stand a good chance of being banned for it- not a certainty but not worth taking a chance on.
Your writing is disorganized and you need to work through things step by step so that your spelling and grammar are correct and the story is coherent, makes sense and is plausible.
When you write your second story put the hard yards in before you post and also remember you want the tags (young, incest, romance etc) because once it slides from the new stories area there is no way anyone could find it.
Don't give up but don't write any more of these. |
| 2012-09-29 04:23:59 |
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You have an aversion to the word savories? So much so that you couldn't continue with the story?
You are serious; aren't you?
To the poster below the idiot; its not confusing if you understand you have to see it from the perspectives of a 13 year old older brother and an 11 year old younger ( obviously) sister and understand they do not see the world through the same eyes.
Once you get your head around that, or rather if because obviously a lot of readers can't then you will understand and, I hope, enjoy the story.
I love it, doing the male/ female perspective is a real challenge, for amateurs like me and published writers as well and ,to me at least, this works. |
| 2012-09-26 05:31:08 |
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Dizzy , are you aware of just how many of your sentences start with 'I'?
The first three do and from there on it looks to run at around 80%. |
| 2012-09-18 19:55:31 |
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Linda had stood up and I saw her pussy wasn't just wet it was contracting.
You really are terminally stupid- aren't you?
She wears a strap on in a scene, a few strap ons get worn.
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| 2012-09-08 22:20:20 |
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Thanks Jade. I see the thing is getting smashed as per usual for my stories. It is so heartening, it really is. Must find somewhere else to post. |
| 2012-09-05 05:10:58 |
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Well I'm sorry you didn't like this one but flattered that you've read the others to make the comparison. This and six other of the last eight stories posted are ones I had posted earlier and pulled.
My current stuff, which I think is reasonably good is just getting smashed and its a little disheartening to put as much thought and effort into writing what I think is a good story only to have it voted into the 70s and 80s and therefore to oblivion.
I know we aren't supposed to care but news flash we do and I do as much as anyone. |
| 2012-09-05 02:07:55 |
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No one mentioned she was a female.? You are serious, right?
What do the tags say? any mention of guys in there?
Her name is Georgie?
She says "I was a right bitch"
She takes her bikini top off
She has her pussy on show
She gets licked out
Don't you think that, subtle as they are, these clues might lead the astute reader to conclude there's a really good chance Georgie might be a girl?
And as for the 60 year olds; why shouldn't they have a sex life? And why shouldn't it involve teens?
You need to do some serious self examination young man.
And lighten up for fuck's sake.
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| 2012-08-25 20:12:55 |
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Why did you read it? I put the flags up, I even put "if you are squeamish its not for you". So why .with all that warning did you read it?
Is it a case of terminal stupidity? What?
And it sounds like it was disgusting because it was old people, so if it was young people getting chopped up to provide a hearty meal for the students of Fish Memorial College that would have been OK?
Very ageist approach I'm afraid.
And Cynthia? Hmm- who knows when she may get the call. |
| 2012-08-24 21:21:56 |
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Thanks for the comments. With 5 negative votes the story is dead in the water. No,I won't continue; I've done sequels in the past and every time its been a mistake. |
| 2012-08-22 23:42:37 |
Controlling Desires |
Peaches the last thing you want to know is why someone has voted negatively on your stories. The reasons, if they give any will simply do your head in. You got 2 anonymous negatives, logged in votes count as 4 each. All in all you've done pretty well. Firs |
| 2012-08-21 06:59:18 |
Controlling Desires |
Um, wow! Outstanding story. |
| 2012-08-14 06:57:12 |
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Most of my readers have not complained about the stories being confusing. If you find it confusing then perhaps you are just stupid. |
| 2012-07-06 22:50:19 |
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Thanks Ghost. Hate to say it old boy but I was born in Christchurch, St Helen's Hospital and we moved to Auckland when I was twelve. We lived in Hadlow Place in Christchurch.
But glad you liked the story. |
| 2012-06-15 02:21:59 |
Hinata's love for Naruto pt. 1 |
English really is a challenge for you ,isn't it dear. You persist in writing plurals as possessives.
You didn't put one negative on my story; you voted logged in and that is worth four votes.
Your own writing is quite simply mediocre. I have no interest in the world to which you refer and absolutely no chance of finding out about it by trying to wade through your offering.
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| 2012-06-15 02:16:21 |
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Its called Worshipping Daddy's Penis. You'd have to think incest would be something of a prerequisite for that wouldn't you? |
| 2012-06-15 00:35:51 |
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I put a vote on this to offset a negative put on by another writer. |
| 2012-06-15 00:26:06 |
Hinata's love for Naruto pt. 1 |
Well this is top quality writing
Late afternoon in the village hidden in the leaf, Konoha's Hokage need's our two hero's for an important mission.
Heroes is a plural, not a possessive , how is the village hidden in one leaf and what is a "Hokage'
And thanks for the four fucking negatives on my story- favor returned. |
| 2012-06-02 17:30:31 |
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Glad you liked it guys.
To Anonymous reader, there has to be enough religious sounding things in it for her to be a good girl doing the "Lord's" bidding rather than just being an easy lay for dad.
And Ghostrider, thanks, glad you got it. This is at most a mild parody on some religious groups but t is just meant as a light hearted read. |
| 2012-06-02 06:25:04 |
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Interesting comment. No its not particularly anti- religious but there are religious groups where things are set up so the young females can get rooted by the older men and this is a take on that.Not as a protest but as a setting for the story.
As for the sequence you propose, well that has me puzzled. She has her period so she does a blow job and anal - because her cunt is out of bounds.
The father is absent? Well no, not really and its her mother who is running things. So she does most of the talking he does the moaning.
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| 2012-05-30 21:34:18 |
My Fathers Boss |
My God! You researched all this Ivy? Such dedication.
hey, great story, well done :) |
| 2012-05-19 22:32:15 |
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Go fuck yourself Anonymous. Write as well as this and get bombed to fuck and see how you like it,Then deliver your sermons fuck wit. |
| 2012-05-19 06:46:38 |
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Well that's very kind but with ten fucking negatives already why the fuck should I bother?
And I couldn't give a shit about it from the daughter's point of view, why would that be interesting? She knows what's going on; the mother is in denial and that's what the story is about. |
| 2012-05-10 05:10:17 |
Two Left Feet Pt.2 |
You're on the right path Chuck. This is a well organized story, heading for the popular brother sister incest category, a tried and true favorite on this forum let me tell ya.
The rate of progress is fine and in any case the tease is usually more fun than the description of the sex.
Keep it going, don't rush it to please anyone else; its your story , so write it at the pace that feels right to you. Be confident in your ability, you can write and you do have talent.
PP |
| 2012-05-08 18:41:18 |
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sorry, didn't check very well there, what I am is fond of this story. |
| 2012-05-08 18:40:09 |
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Well we write 'em an post 'em but this one I have to say I'm really quite pf this story so its a bit of a disappointment to me that it has been ignored so comprehensively. I wanted to deal with things in a woman's life that lesbianism hinders (having kids for one) or supposedly hinders as well as the relationship after the newness has gone and other things come on the scene. |
| 2012-05-05 04:17:06 |
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Well thanks. glad you liked it. |
| 2012-05-04 21:43:04 |
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Thanks for the thought, its at 76% now with fuck all reads, hardly any point really. |
| 2012-04-20 18:36:02 |
YURIKO LEARNS HER PLACE |
Would you please stop writing stories this good.
I'm finding it terribly disheartening to have to come up with something of my own.
Seriously Lesley, just superb and so fucking hot! |
| 2012-04-13 03:38:13 |
PERFORMANCE REVIEW |
Ohh Sweetie! You are just the Queen of Lesbian seduction you are. Great story and a big fat positive from me.
PP |
| 2012-04-10 02:40:40 |
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The story works but you have to understand its being written from both Janet and Scott's perspective. She asks him what he thinks of these girls because she wants to be sure he doesn't want to ask them out because she wants him herself.
The How we kissed line? She wants him to say it again, she's a girl so she wants to hear him say iyt again.
And she isn't turned on by unwashed hands and stinky feet. How on earth did you figure that? She chastises him for not washing his hands or flushing the toilet and she is repelled by the smell of his feet but is tactful in how she treats him changing from a comment on his feet to a suggestion he eat the savories before they get cold.
Its a new role for her in her relationship with him. Did you not see that.
Try reading it properly and remember its from multiple view points, if you read it all the way through the Mom bit will become clear.
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| 2012-04-09 23:04:54 |
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Well at least you got to the middle. I've written over sixty stories on this site (39 which I pulled plus 27 on show) and I have never had anyone say he found one of my stories confusing.
It does require some concentration and the viewpoint changes so that at times its from hers and at others from his but its hardly Virginia Woolf like in it's complexity.
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| 2012-04-09 18:39:15 |
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Note, the question mark where the apostrophe should be in "sister s" is a product of the XNXX Site and I have no idea why it happens. |
| 2012-04-09 18:36:06 |
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Scott held his younger sisters hand as he walked her to school. They had been walking to school for years and had always held hands. Now he was thirteen and she was eleven and in the first year of Intermediate he had asked her if she still wanted him to hold her hand but instead of the sensible answer a boy might give, like yes or no she got upset and looked at him as though he had asked something terrible. Then when he had said sorry she had gone all mushy on him and said she was sorry too.
OK Mister 45 Years Of Reading experience Anonymous Poster, that is the first paragraph; which sentence can't you understand?
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| 2012-04-09 15:34:18 |
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How could that be too hard to follow?
Try working on your reading skills . |
| 2012-04-06 17:12:13 |
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Yes, it was one of the stories I pulled when the age limit came on.
It was one of my favorites but its not doing very well at the moment. |
| 2012-04-05 05:50:19 |
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First off the posts you refer to aren't comments they are offensive comments aimed at me . Your comment has me assuming two things:
1) You are male and of limited intelligence
2) You skim read the story looking for the good bits.
If you want to get something out of my stories,and there's plenty in them, you have to read them and think about what's going on in them |
| 2012-04-02 06:34:27 |
Auntie Courtney the Cougar Mamma |
Sorry Amy , thought I'd logged in before commenting- and voting (positive of course) |
| 2012-04-01 07:28:49 |
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Well at least you read it. And ,no, I'm not a freak . If this isn't your thing why read it? Maybe it is and you're in denial.
There's food for though ,huh? |
| 2012-03-25 02:49:43 |
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I don't need help. I write on a wide range of themes, this is just one of them.
Can't agree with you on the creeping out - Dark Fantasy thinking though.
If it doesn't make you feel uneasy at least then how can it be Dark?
Cannibalism is about a total end, death. That is creepy and we are all aware of our own mortality but the ones you mention, they're not dark fantasy.
Any way, enjoy what you read and given cannibalism isn't to your liking no doubt you'll give it a wide berth.
I mean it, enjoy what you read , that's why you come here, its why we all come here.
Peace.
PP |
| 2012-03-23 06:03:17 |
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Sorry there was no warning, as you might have guessed this is a cannibalism story, and the reason the tag wasn't there is I forgot to save it when I posted the story and yes its hard to be dark fantasy if you don't get a bit creeped out. |
| 2012-02-29 21:19:54 |
Andrew - CAW 10 |
This is authentic Vicki, very well written indeed. |
| 2012-01-11 06:05:00 |
Festival. |
4041 reads for a story as good as this. Truly BR there is no justice |
| 2012-01-05 01:33:58 |
Full Moon Rising: Part 2 |
and on what basis have you stuck the cannibalism tag on this?
They both appear to be vegetarian |
| 2011-10-16 05:04:13 |
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well you certainly have pushing the button repeatedly nailed you little rocket scientist you. Did you enjoy Hairy Girls Part 2? I wrote it just to piss you off.
Why don't you join our happy community and become a member?
Oh,yes, you're a gutless wonder, sorry I forgot.
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| 2011-10-15 02:06:44 |
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Because I can sweet heart, because I can. |
| 2011-09-20 19:38:33 |
Sir, please may I cum? |
This is exceptional, I cannot believe the rating 76%, hopefully I've pushed it up a bit. It deserves to be at least in the nineties; it truly is a little gem. |
| 2011-09-19 19:50:17 |
Rachael and the Neighborhood Roast |
This is very much a Dolcett story and there are some conventions in Dolcett which have to do with how long the victim lives after being gutted or spitted; namely much longer than you might think possible. |
| 2011-09-19 04:33:26 |
Rachael and the Neighborhood Roast |
Positive from me, very much in the Dolcett theme and not too short at all.
The form of "there" you wanted was the possessive "their" but otherwise punctuation and grammar were pretty good.
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| 2011-09-14 20:43:29 |
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What I would really like to know is why those of you who bother to be obsessed with a story that has had so few reads hate it so much.
Its really pretty mild; there's no piss drinking or golden showers, there's no scat and regardless of whether you like it or not the activities I describe do happen. So, if one of you could put away the obscenities, just this once , and try to answer the question I would be very grateful.
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| 2011-09-14 20:35:46 |
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Goodness me! What an insightful post that was but its time for you to crawl back under your rock now, bye see ya. |
| 2011-09-14 05:47:20 |
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"Big whoop 39yo and your 150 scores : I'm 26 and I've had over 30 girls when I was in high school and well over 100 @ GSU....so what, still no Casanova but I'm curious who in their right mind also born after 1960 likes girls with hairy armpits and hairy asses and pussies YOU SICK FUCK TURDIENT SHITVOYEUR fucking kill yourself already!
Die shithair nigger faggot"
You sad little cunt. |
| 2011-09-14 03:41:14 |
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"You like?" she asked and we shared a smile as she brought her arm over so her armpit was on my face. I licked and sucked on her armpit hair relishing her scent.Odd as it must sound I was intoxicated by the aroma and lay breathing in the smell of her armpit and then sliding over her and licking on the other one.
When Martie and Jules got back they stripped off and came out back to join us. They weren't as gamey as us so they did a frantic Zumba style work out to get as sweaty as they could. We got up partway through and did it with them so by the time we finished all four of us were dripping with sweat and both Martie and Jules wanted my face in their armpits and I got to know the different scent each of them had. It all made me wish my armpit hair would grow but even so I lay with my arms up and they kissed my two day old stubble for me.
Don't you like that? Tough. It happens and the women who do it love it
Think of those pungent armpit odours in your nostrils boys. Mmmm |
| 2011-09-14 00:18:07 |
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What a spineless bunch of wankers you children really are. Can't you stand the thought of real bodies?
I wait with baited breath for the next pitiful, immature comment from one of you. Hey the liar who claims to be 39 and had 150 women in his life didn't you go down on any of them? Were they all on your Computer screen?
Keep 'em coming boys and don't forget my invitation to write something yourself. Its easy criticize, much harder to -I suppose that's a bit too much of a challenge for you given, from what I've seen in your posts, that you are barely literate.
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| 2011-09-13 03:45:31 |
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I started this story with this
Hopefully the title gives it away but just to be doubly sure this is a story in which the characters , all female, have hairy bodies. If that is creepy for you it would pay to stop here and find something else to read.
If not, well hope you like it.
I named it hairy Girls. I did everything I could to warn people who might find women with hairy bodies objectionable not to read it but you did.
How you can compare what goes on in this story with scat I have no idea. Armpit licking is a genre you will find on every porn site, it is no big deal.
Now I have Cretins Are Us with another surge of fatuous drivel. Its not to your taste? Wonderful, find something that is and leave this one for the grown ups. |
| 2011-09-12 15:39:39 |
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All of you, anonymous. Nice to see the ever present fuck wit has company. Why the fuck shouldn't I object to abusive comments, you cretin.
And as for the 2/10 wanker, write something shit for brains, go on fucking write something and show me how fucking good you are you little snot brain.
And yes, from now on, I will fucking ban anonymous comments on my stories so ignorant opinionated air heads like you can't put stupid comments on something I put a lot of thought and effort into creating. |
| 2011-09-12 04:17:07 |
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Work on my subject matter, what does that mean? You didn't like it. Tough shit. Women are hairy, you might be used to them shaving but some don't. Their choice, this was a story about them. I should have put a tag on it "immature little male virgins please don't read." |
| 2011-09-11 18:33:02 |
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its just you dipstick. |
| 2011-09-10 16:24:52 |
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Two more comments by the same retard. Who are you trying to kid wanker? |
| 2011-09-10 04:31:12 |
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You are the only one writing the abusive comments fuck face.
Can you smell the armpits sunshine.? Fuck I hope so you miserable piece of shit.
Are you seventeen yet, you pox faced little virgin?
And stop trying to pretend you are more than one person you devious little cunt. |
| 2011-09-09 07:02:39 |
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Go fuck yourself arsehole |
| 2011-08-30 17:49:29 |
Dinner And A GOOD Pregnant Fuck |
It is really hard to write cannibalism stories and I think you are on the right track with this so Positive vote from me.
I'm not sure what the deal with the names at the start of each paragraph, it looks like a script style of approach and I assume the system put all those horizontal triangles- it does some bizarre things sometimes.
Keep going and remember there is nothing more erotic than the woman being killed at the moment of orgasm- especially if that's what she wants and remembering this is just a fantasy and doesn't reflect what you or I would ever want happen to a real person. |
| 2011-08-30 04:17:14 |
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Yes you are virgins, yes you are young and yes you have had no romantic involvement with a female.
You ask for an address and yet you write anonymous comments.
How brave is that?
Noddy. |
| 2011-08-28 18:47:22 |
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Even more anonymous readers having their two cents worth.
This site caters to a range of erotic interests and the tags give you the chance to avoid topics you may find offensive or unsettling.
You chose to read this and now you try to deny any interest by your childish rants. Every one of you is a young male, you are all virgins and your sex life involves ladies on your computer screen and your hand.
Who likes smelly women? Well Napoleon did, true, look it up?
Also, grow up. Please |
| 2011-08-27 06:20:51 |
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So show me how its done you brave anonymous wanker |
| 2011-08-27 02:33:15 |
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You are so frantic in your insults, from the style I suspect its just one double digit IQ tosser who's written the last few insults, that I suspect you are secretly drawn to the world of the "natural woman " and wants, through strenuous denial, to reassure yourself that you are not.
Just admit it, embrace your fetish and move on to write your puerile anonymous comments on some other unfortunate author's work.
Or write yourself and show me how talented you are.
And by the way I am very happy with this story so why don't we work as a team: I'll find the dead bear and you can stick your head up its bum. |
| 2011-08-26 05:30:08 |
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Thanks for your input you Moron. I put as much warning as I could before you got to the fucking story you Bozo.
And what the fuck is amp#58401 supposed to mean anyway Shit For Brains |
| 2011-08-26 00:31:33 |
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How can I put this nicely?
Fuck off you pitiful little wanker. |
| 2011-07-06 17:03:47 |
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More convincing Lesley? Thanks. So you didn't think much of it.
I thought it was quite good but obviously I was wrong.
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| 2011-07-05 08:37:58 |
OFFICE SURPRISE |
My God you are so good at these. |
| 2011-06-27 18:50:36 |
Charity Starts At Home:Chapter 5: A Bonding Experience |
This is terrific, I loved it. |
| 2011-06-21 19:41:58 |
TAKEN BY SURPRISE |
Lesley, that was just so good. You actually write real characters with real emotions . A great read.
I loved it. |
| 2011-06-21 07:20:31 |
The King in Yellow. |
Along the shore the cloud waves break,
The twin suns sink beneath the lake,
The shadows lengthen
In Carcosa.
Strange is the night where black stars rise,
And strange moons circle through the skies
But stranger still is
Lost Carcosa.
Songs that the Hyades shall sing,
Where flap the tatters of the King,
Must die unheard in
Dim Carcosa.
Song of my soul, my voice is dead;
Die thou, unsung, as tears unshed
Shall dry and die in
Lost Carcosa.
Just googled the King in Yellow, I'm confused, this is a play from a book of short horror stories by Robert Chambers, it certainly wasn't the most censored book of all time nor does it appear to be excessively dark, I would have to rank this as long and pretentious. |
| 2011-06-13 06:43:18 |
Sunny's First BBQ |
You see this type of comment is what you have to put up with when you write cannibalism stories.
You put the tag "cannibalism" on the story so you might expect that those who don't have an interest in the subject would stay away. But no, they ignore the tag, get offended and write witless comments like anonymous here. |
| 2011-06-11 17:40:16 |
Sunny's First BBQ |
Yes it is too short but its a first attempt and it can be hard to judge what's enough. You have the skeleton of a good story here but it needs to be filled out.
Just read through it again and imagine the scenes you need to bring them alive as real scenes not just a narrative.
Poor old Sunny's gone now but I'll bet one of her friends might want to know what's happened to her friend.... |
| 2011-06-07 06:57:20 |
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Well you might be straight as an arrow but you're about as perceptive as a sack of potatoes. Only a male can't see how the relationship built. If you can't visualize the scene then you are no writer.
As for the other writers thing, every other story in that contest was crap. Not one could do opposite viewpoint anywhere near as good as this one and none had anywhere near the power of this story.
Not that it matters, I have ordered that my stories be with drawn,. Six out of fucking ten you fucking pull through, I ve read your stuff it is no where near as good as this. |
| 2011-05-29 02:56:02 |
Nuns and sex |
That was really good, There isn't enough really edgy stuff being posted here anymore.
I think you write well and you did a good job conveying the sexual hunger of the two. |
| 2011-05-23 07:42:50 |
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To Hardrive, Holly doesn't come out of nowhere with fully developed feelings for Beth at all. She's looking for a seat in a crowded cafe and sees one by Beth and she must have liked the look of her and went to sit at her table. They spend sometime together and who knows how the mind works but she decides this lady has something she likes. She's a much more assertive personality than Beth, like Maxine? Don't know, she died before I could meet her.
But my characters fall in love. You do, if you're lucky enough to meet that special someone, most of us don't and make do, checking the horizon for possibilities before going for best on offer. None of that crap for my girls, they fall in love, might take a while to find Miss Right but when they do, head over heels. Only way to be.
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| 2011-05-04 04:18:23 |
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Mother daughter masturbating together is way too unrealistic for you huh?
There are 5846 incest stories stories on this story site and I bet you're right, there won't be another one with a mother and daughter masturbating together.
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| 2011-05-03 05:31:21 |
FORBIDDEN ROOM |
Oh and I voted for this before I had logged in but I don't leave anonymous comments. |
| 2011-05-03 05:29:42 |
FORBIDDEN ROOM |
As always Anonymous reader we writers urge you to look at the tags. If there is one or more there you don't approve of or find to your taste,little cannibalism pun there for you, then, how can I put this, um don't fucking read it.
Most things on this story site are perverted, that's why there here.
Outstanding story my dear. I have written 4 cannibalism stories so I know the subject .You have made this a chilling story from start to finish, its exciting all the way through.
Sadly the prospects of high ratings is negligible but you will have a loyal following .
I look forward to your next one. |
| 2011-05-01 04:43:39 |
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to Anonymous Reader 2011-04-26, what on earth are you talking about? |
| 2011-04-01 02:30:39 |
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I don't see a Part 2 here because the last scene completes the story. She starts out insecure and frightened and ends confident and assured.
The story is about her and I can't see any further I could go with it. Yes, opportunities for more sex scenes but that's about all.
But thanks for your comments and I'm glad you enjoyed it. |
| 2011-04-01 02:27:02 |
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I love this story, I know, I wrote it but of all my stories this is the one I come back to the most.
It isn't a sex story its an erotic love story and I think the better for it.
Oh and I love the ending too . |
| 2011-03-02 05:01:24 |
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Well I guess its just you and me that like it. |
| 2010-12-25 03:06:20 |
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One of the things we writers want to do is create a visual picture for the reader. We don't always succeed because its not as easy as it may sound but Alex has managed brilliantly. Not a pleasant subject but exceptionally well written, in my opinion. |
| 2010-12-19 21:25:45 |
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Crawled out from under your rock for another try nhawk700,hmm?
I am still waiting for you to either substantiate your assertion or write something that shows me how to write a really good story.
I'm waiting Oh nhawk700, any time you like sunshine? Nows good...
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| 2010-12-18 04:33:38 |
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How exactly is " this story left a lot to be desired" nice?
It is at best an arrogant and gratuitous insult and fully deserved the PM (not email) I sent you.
If you want to show me how well you can write then go ahead, if you wish to point any technical issues then also go ahead but if you decide on a capricious little whim that you don't like the story but don't know why then by all means say you didn't like it - although why you should bother, other than just to be nasty, I wouldn't know.
Just don't make insulting remarks you can't substantiate. |
| 2010-12-17 05:56:05 |
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I wrote it and I think its actually pretty good. Perhaps nhawk700s could use one of his extensive list of stories to show how it should be done.
opps, sorry, he hasn't actually written anything, he's just a self appointed expert. |
| 2010-12-02 03:40:25 |
Eat Me |
Its cannibalism, which is the they eat her part and vore which is her wanting to be eaten- not gore, vore.
dinner and kaosangel have taken this theme to a whole new level. These stories are just so bloody hot.
Well done and keep writing! |
| 2010-12-02 03:16:11 |
Eat Me |
Good to see you posting another story Dinner. Outstanding as usual. Hope to see more from you. |
| 2010-11-18 23:53:40 |
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In reply to the what the fuck posters. No I didn't put the slashes on the story it appears to have come from the hack on the site and this and other stories put out after OCt 3 are affected.
Pisses me off more than I can say but I guess at least the story is up so that's something. |
| 2010-09-09 21:03:02 |
Beginning of a good holiday |
Very hot, pleasantly authentic. |
| 2010-09-09 04:24:03 |
A long Naughty Session |
This is hot and racey from start to finish.
It is so good to get the female perspective on this type of sex other than just the mechanics of what went on. |
| 2010-09-09 04:19:30 |
The Planned Rape |
This is really hot. Exceptionally well written and authentic on the detail. |
| 2010-09-08 01:44:02 |
VAGINAFEST - Chapter 1 |
This is stunningly good. I've got this on my favourites list now.So there. |
| 2010-08-07 16:51:08 |
Sophie's Summer Holiday |
Superb story Janey. You held me from start to finish. |
| 2010-07-06 17:02:59 |
The day I learned to masturbate! part 1 |
very sexy, well told.
Some work on grammar , using capitals and breaking it up into paragraphs or even just chunks of print would really help make the nexrt one easier to read.
ignore the idiot above , you have talent, keep going. |
| 2010-06-22 03:19:39 |
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Actually it doesn't. I rather liked Karen but I sadly the poor girl has done her dash.
But fear not, more works are in the pipeline.
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| 2010-06-20 07:05:41 |
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Thank you , nice to know someone has enjoyed it. |
| 2010-05-18 04:26:48 |
ELLEN |
Nice work, well told. |