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| 2013-01-23 18:54:12 |
The babysitter teaches us about sex Pt3 |
A great mixture of hot sex and hilarity. Excellent. |
| 2013-01-22 19:57:18 |
Dad's Porno Magazines: Chapter 1? Finding the Magazines |
Nice tale of sexual awakening, although I was a little dubious about 36C's on a 14 year old. Still, it's your story so I'm not complaining. Anyway, big sister has 40D's at 19, so maybe big boobs run in the family. Believable, well-written and well described, and I like the way you built up the sex scenes. A great start to a series, with a cliff-hanger ending. |
| 2013-01-10 17:44:18 |
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Hot, horny and well written. |
| 2012-09-24 20:18:17 |
Chapter 01 - My Step Sister Cindy |
A sweet and sexy little story, my friend, nicely paced and beautifully described. Even better if it's all true. Although, I was a little surprised that you didn't need to take matters in hand after you put Cindy to bed and went back to your own room. :-) No need to apoligise for the dialogue either. It adds to the realism. |
| 2012-08-28 20:50:54 |
How I fucked my neighbors' incredibly hot 16-year-old gymnast daughter. - Pt. 1 |
This story is cute and very hot. I like the way you wove a real story line around it, and didn't have them fucking madly by the second paragaph. Very well described, too. One constructive criticism, though: You let a few typo's through and her age changed from 16 to 15 half way through. Keep up the good work! |
| 2012-07-08 21:55:13 |
Love Her Like a Daughter, Ch. 1 |
Kinkybelle, this is brilliant. Funny, sexy and delightfully written. The hillbilly grammar makes it perfect. |
| 2012-07-05 21:02:50 |
Experimentation and Exploration the beginning |
Cute story, very sexy and well written, with a touch of wit. Well done. |
| 2012-03-02 22:26:31 |
The Girls Next Door |
For a first attempt at story writing, this is great. Your visual descriptions are excellent, and your dialogue works, too. The story is sexy but realistic, and well put together. I normally like a bit of buildup, but in the context of the setting you have created, I disagree with those who said the sex was too sudden. I do agree your proof reading let you down a little, but overall it is a hot little story that deserves some further chapters. |
| 2011-11-21 18:19:55 |
My Sister In Law Beth |
A very sexy but also kind of sweet story. I look forward to the rest of the series. Personally, I would have liked you to give us a better description of Beth, but the story is so well-written it makes up for that. Excellent work. |
| 2011-09-09 10:24:34 |
My sis is irresistible! |
Good story line. I like the slightly unusual way you have approached it, with the guy lusting for his sister but fucking her friend, but you do need to work on your spelling. Keep it up, and bring on Chapter 2. |
| 2011-08-15 08:44:14 |
My sister Lauren in the bathroom |
This a good story and generally well told, but it would be better if you made the dialogue a little more realistic and less formal.
Nice descriptions, though. Part 2? |
| 2011-05-02 07:27:27 |
I Give My Niece A Ride |
A cute and sexy story. You should write a sequel. |
| 2010-12-20 22:00:20 |
My First Time-Age 16 |
Don't worry about the purist. This story is excellent. So hot, and so descriptive, and you write with your own unique style.
I hope to read more from you. |
| 2010-12-20 21:57:00 |
My First Time-Age 16 |
Don't worry about the purists. This story is excellent. So hot, and so descriptive, and you write with a unique charm of your own.
I hope to read more from you. |
| 2010-11-22 04:15:45 |
My Little Sister Sophie (Part 3) |
Great story. Keep going with it. I love the way you make it so sexy, but so far there's been no real sex, just flirting and kissing. Brilliant! |
| 2010-09-19 21:54:49 |
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Arizona,
I had to stop half way through to tell you that this story is amazing. |
| 2010-08-17 03:45:56 |
If only I could travel back in time |
This story is fuckin' hot. That's all I've got to say. Can't wait for the next part. |
| 2010-08-10 07:12:56 |
Forget Harper Valley PTA |
This story is hot. I don't think I need to add anything else. |
| 2010-05-14 08:59:18 |
Mutual Attraction |
For the people who have asked for a sequel, if you go to my profile page on this site, you will find that this story is Part 1 of a four-part series. I hope you like the rest.
Taverner |
| 2010-05-13 04:10:10 |
A Sleepover With Aunt Stephanie |
For the people who have asked if there is a sequel, if you go to my profile on this site, you will find A Sleepover With Aunt Stephanie - Part 2, and also Part 3, which is subtitled, Glen and Casey - Doing it the Hard Way.
Taverner |
| 2010-04-29 23:36:06 |
A Sleepover With Aunt Stephanie |
I'd like to draw everyone's attention to the tool below who accused me of using bad grammar. Not only did the tool confuse "your" with "you're," but he started a sentence with the word "And." He finished by calling me a bozo. I'm assuming that was meant to be an insult, but if anyone wants me to feel properly insuted, they'll have to do better than that. Thanks for the laugh, wantsomefun. |
| 2010-04-28 21:58:24 |
Mutual Attraction |
This was actually the first erotic story I ever wrote, and I submitted it to another site a year ago, and then expanded it into a four-part series, until I ran out of ideas for the characters. I have tidied up a few things, and posted it here. In a way, it was a prototype story for some of my later ones. Of the stories I have posted on this site, my personal favourites are the "Two Fridays" series, but I am glad that the readers seem to be enjoying them. |