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| 2012-01-26 22:44:53 |
A Kind Stranger (The Whole Story) |
Thank you for the beautiful story. It's a good reminder to us all that things can get better and we can each be a small part of the world we live in becoming a better place. Thank you again. |
| 2011-04-12 23:05:28 |
The Captive part 1. |
Wow. I feel like I'm in bed dreading his return too. Well written. |
| 2011-04-06 19:58:43 |
Slingshot Bill-part two |
I enjoyed it a lot, thank you. |
| 2011-04-06 18:01:48 |
Slingshot Bill-part one |
Exellent story, thank you for sharing your talent and effort. I like the story very much so far. |
| 2011-04-06 15:21:03 |
My sisters freinds...Part II |
It might be fun if Sara discovered that she's a bit oversexed and due to lack of experience has trouble understanding why overworked Bill sometimes takes forever to cum. |
| 2011-04-04 23:58:02 |
My sisters freinds... |
I like it a lot. Please continue. |
| 2011-03-30 12:36:10 |
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One of your best, both what is says and how it says it. |
| 2011-03-27 14:12:30 |
MY beautiful Angels of Sex part 2!!!!! |
I can't honestly say that I like superpowers a lot but that's just me. I think this is your best story yet. I only noticed a few small mistakes and I like the way you're telling the story. It's interesting and heartwarming. |
| 2011-03-25 16:25:52 |
Left without a kiss |
I was too screwed up in the head by my ex leaving when we met. I could have and should have married her. I always hoped to get in touch and talk and laugh together in our old age. I googled her name in November. One of the nicest & most intelligent people I've ever known died of ovarian cancer four years ago at the age of 48. She left me with three years of wonderful memories that I'll cherish until the day I die too.
One of your best poems for me. Thank you. |
| 2011-03-25 16:16:13 |
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Nameless, gutless moron that wrote "Your a suck cunt": Send me a PM and I'll be happy to try to enlighten you in a friendly way. If you would prefer unfriendly, I can provide that to. |
| 2011-03-25 16:10:00 |
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Perfect descriptions of best & worst for me. I hope die is the end of all worries. |
| 2011-03-21 14:40:53 |
Last Chance....Chapter 4 |
Thank you for your thoughtful comments:
AR 19:54:23-
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AR 19:55:49-
BITCH WHICH what? Call me an idiot but I can't figure out what you're trying to say, help me out here. Please?
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| 2011-03-21 03:59:23 |
Willie the Dog and the Parrot |
I absolutely love your Willie the dog stories, I laugh so hard I can barely read. Thank you again. |
| 2011-03-21 03:42:48 |
Visiting order. |
You're a good writer, I echo the first commenter's words. Thank you. |
| 2011-03-20 16:49:03 |
alone |
Not really stoic, more spiritual. No crew hassles and no other fisherman hassles. Just me, the old boat, enough crabs to survive, and the sea. Everyone should be as fortunate. They were satisfying times and are some of my favorite memories. |
| 2011-03-19 18:59:45 |
Fucking the Porn Reader Girl |
Is this the start of a series? Will Willie the dog be in some chapters? I hope so & I hope so! |
| 2011-03-19 18:44:59 |
MY beautiful Angels of Sex(Edited) |
You can't please all the people all the time, but you pleased me this time. Much improved. |
| 2011-03-18 00:46:08 |
The Minister's Daughters |
My apologies for forgetting to warn readers at the start that this story wasn't really anything but a long joke. I'll probably post more junk like this (it's fun) but I won't do it without a warning at the start again. I'm sorry I let you waste you time. Under the circumstances, I'm surprised anyone's giving it a positive vote. |
| 2011-03-18 00:37:17 |
Best of Both World's |
It reminds me of Blizzard's work, a very high quality story. Thank you for sharing it. |
| 2011-03-18 00:23:39 |
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This is way too good of a story for me to give any feedback on other than to say that it's the best version of a fairly common theme that I've ever read. Thank you for sharing it. |
| 2011-03-17 23:35:19 |
The Next Story of Squirt and Wit |
I REALLY hope you continue this story, I'm loving it. |
| 2011-03-17 23:29:58 |
My Wife wants to Cheat |
Perfect ending, I loved it. |
| 2011-03-17 01:48:54 |
Last Will and Testament |
Really, really good. I'm not surprised. Thank you WSF. |
| 2011-03-16 07:28:52 |
Cybergasm. |
I like this story as a prelude or first chapter, it's the beginning of an old story well told, if you decide to or have continued it, it's open to a wide range of interesting possibilities. If this is it, it's still well written but I hate being teased. I might be biased being a lifelong SF fan. |
| 2011-03-16 07:06:19 |
Angels of sex |
Exellent story, it could be even better with just a little more work on the little things, a few grammer and spelling mistakes. (I don't mean I think I could do better, I couldn't, but I did notice a few. |
| 2011-03-15 15:23:00 |
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My apologizes for voting positive when I was timed out. I forgot to check. |
| 2011-03-15 15:19:37 |
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I like a lot of loving father daughter incest FANTASY stories but this might be the first one that I could like when I considered it as a possible reality.
His shock, pain meds w/wine & love for his dead wife, her age, and her resemblance of her mom resulting in his confusion of the two of them make his POV okay in my mind.
Her shock, love for her father and only parent, understanding of his pain over his long dead wife, the wine, and his expression of his love for them both through talking about losing her mom while gaining her together with saying how they resembled each other make her POV okay as reality in my mind.
On the other hand, although I am not able to write a sex scene, I still have to agree with Goodfather, you are weak in that respect too. More expression of tenderness and less trying to use unusual terms would have helped there. Without the weak sex scene, your story would have made my contest vote decision one story harder to make. Amazing story. |
| 2011-03-15 15:18:47 |
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I like a lot of loving father daughter incest FANTASY stories but this might be the first one that I could like when I considered it as a possible reality.
His shock, pain meds w/wine & love for his dead wife, her age, and her resemblance of her mom resulting in his confusion of the two of them make his POV okay in my mind.
Her shock, love for her father and only parent, understanding of his pain over his long dead wife, the wine, and his expression of his love for them both through talking about losing her mom while gaining her together with saying how they resembled each other make her POV okay as reality in my mind.
On the other hand, although I am not able to write a sex scene, I still have to agree with Goodfather, you are weak in that respect too. More expression of tenderness and less trying to use unusual terms would have helped there. Without the weak sex scene, your story would have made my contest vote decision one story harder to make. Amazing story. |
| 2011-03-15 00:52:35 |
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This might be your best yet. I love both halves and how they balance each other perfectly as they pivot around the present, just a small mark where we spend our whole lives, between our painful pasts and our foreboding futures. |
| 2011-03-12 17:40:34 |
Swapping Girlfriends |
Exellent ending?
I pretty much like all of your stories but I'm hoping Willie the dog has more to tell us. |
| 2011-03-12 05:06:51 |
Last Chance....Chapter 4 |
Thank you all, the comments are way more important to me than the votes. Unfortunately, without the positive votes there will be no comments. I'm not a big fan of the voting system. |
| 2011-03-12 00:45:25 |
She doesn't, anymore |
It makes me think. It makes me wonder. It makes me want to ask questions that I don't want answered. |
| 2011-03-12 00:32:43 |
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I especially like the last third of this poem.
"And tells me.......That feelings shouldn't be felt." Perfect in my head where practice has perfected the art of denial. Thank you. |
| 2011-03-12 00:24:20 |
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Exellent love story but the sex seems like you tried too hard to be original in describing parts of it- carnal crevice is a good description but it made me stop reading the story for a second while I thought "Carnal crevice, that's different." Kind of like hesitating during sex when the dog barks, Better off not noticing the dog or the cool original way of saying vagina. Expert advice from a totally inexperienced sex scene writer, lol. |
| 2011-03-11 23:17:37 |
tears |
AR 18:55:56- Sounds good, I look forward to trying to be a help. |
| 2011-03-11 03:16:43 |
Last Chance....Chapter 1 |
Thank you both. SSB, you're one of my favorite authors, thanks for writing so many exellent stories. |
| 2011-03-11 03:11:32 |
Last Chance....Chapter 2 |
AR 18:45:46-
I'm surprised more people haven't made similiar comments, Thank you for telling me what you didn't like.
The kind words are very much appreciated, thank you all for taking the time to leave a comment.
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| 2011-03-11 02:59:07 |
Last Chance....Chapter 3 |
Thank you for letting me know my story meant something to you. That was my biggest hope and it means a lot to me. |
| 2011-03-11 01:26:23 |
Last Chance....Chapter 4 |
Anon 01:11:41- That's an amazing story. You might consider expanding it a little and posting it. It's a 10 for me right now. |
| 2011-03-11 01:18:39 |
Last Chance....Chapter 4 |
grig- You're right, I like reading the love stories with sex in them but writing a decent sex scene may be beyond me. |
| 2011-03-11 01:06:44 |
Disaster at Antonio's |
Thanks everyone.
WGF- That's exactly the problem I had on the forum and overcorrected for here.
OHT- Thanks for the support, it's always appreciated but I thought even the least tactful had something to say worth thinking about.
Cija-The story evolved like a shack turning into a mansion, my biggest regret was not making the POV changes read clearly. The choppiness was partly intentional and partly the best I could do. I just assumed most people's thoughts were choppy like mine. lol
horny-I think maintaining a rotation through the characters is a good idea and ID'ing each POV change would probabily been the biggest improvement. I think I tried for too much when I tried to make the seperate thoughts read like dialogue in the first part. I think I should have only changed POV's a couple of times there. Don't know about continuing. Don't much want the the stroker's votes. I'll try to write the sex if I can't avoid it. All of your comments are my big thing, thank you again. |
| 2011-03-10 15:07:24 |
tears |
PS- Use a pill dispenser, an alarm watch, and an alarm phone. Take care of your health every way you can, a lot of different things can make seizures happen more often and be worse. I hope I'm done now. I'm sure you do to.
Good luck;
Steve |
| 2011-03-10 15:01:33 |
tears |
I just lost what was my last comment: "YOUR COMMENT CONTAINS BAD WORDS" I never thought that would be a problem here. lol
Always be straight with your doc, if they don't know exactly what's going on, they can't help. If your doc doesn't trust you, you need a new doc. Always take notes to and during your appointments. PM me if there's any chance I can help.
For all the readers that are worse off than I am, I hope you get better or your suffering ends soon.
Sincerely;
Steve
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| 2011-03-10 14:36:25 |
tears |
I really wish you'd have left you're comment while signed, I doubt if you'll be checking back and I think I could help you feel a little better. Where you are now is a much worse place than where I am now. If your brain surgery works out, I'd really like to share your victory. In the meantime, I'd really like to try to help you deal with some troubles that I have some experience with. Sorry about the lack of proofreading, this isn't the kind of thing that I'm willing to read if I don't have to and I'm pretty sure you can figure out most of it anyway. Or PM me. I can't telly you how much I want to someday find out that you're doing better. I'm crying now it thats a hint. the first years were the worst years, My first wife leaving didn't help. My second wife was my "Last Chance" Ii's still rocky but we'ver managed for 18 years now. Learn more than your doc knows about your case, make notes before and during appointment, fire docs until you find a smart one that you can trust. |
| 2011-03-10 14:16:15 |
tears |
I'm 54 years old but I still grunt and swear for a living and not many people consider me a wimp yet. We've got about a dozen trophy's on the wall that my wifw shot I can't, I'm too soft hearted) Every one of them was killed with one shot. She's a little frail and insecure so she answers the door with a 38 in one hand behind her back so the I reccomend that you pay your med. and life insurance first. I need to tell you that about one out of ten counselors and groups are helpful but they're also worth finding. Regarding your not finding my joke funny, I apologize for that, after 15 or twenty years brain surgery hasn't fixxed you or fucked you up worse, you may figure out that laughing about bad things is sometimes possible and much preferable to crying about them. I apologize again for not being more sensitive, if I was a little less doped up I might hav considered how it might upset an inexperienced epileptic. Posting my joke here was inexcusable as you just showed me. |
| 2011-03-10 13:59:51 |
tears |
I know a little about performance anxiety, the right woman will understand and if you can treat her right, love her for real, and give her the orgasims (No dick needed) she needs, you will be fine regardless of how bad it is. Some AED's are worse than others. The anxiety is a bitch, logging worked wel when I was younger as it was extremely physical and it's easy to relax when you're exhausted. Oddly enought the danger doesn't cause me much stress, I think maybe because I'd rather be smashed by a log than die from cancer, I'm not really sure. It could just be that life often doesn't always seem all that precious. I know a wife tht needs you is a big help with sucidal urges. I know a little about post ictal. NEVER wait a few hours because it's not convient to take extra meds after a seizure. You'll find it hard to believe how many and long you'll get told your grand mals were. ALWAYS keep your spare/emergency meds with you. If you want to call me an idiot to my face PM me. |
| 2011-03-10 13:43:09 |
tears |
When I had my first seizure, it was immediately obvious to me that I could no longer concentrate effectively, (low dose Dialantin.) At that time. the requirements for getting a tug boat officer's licence was siezure free off of medication for four years so it took a few years to comtletely losr hope. At that point, my goal in life became to live a "normal" life and not think of myself as disabled. I've been able to be relatively successful although not having a drivers license a lot of the time has been the the hardest part. I reccomend that you marry a woman with medical problems. The odds of her not leaving you will be much better. I morphed my wife from medical problems to a tragic sexual history and emotional problems for my Last Chance story. Make sure that you get your brain surgery testing done at a hospital that has a very good neuro dept. my.epilepisy.com is a good place to look for advice on that I recommend phillis johnson as a person to talk to via the forum there. |
| 2011-03-10 13:19:12 |
tears |
It's obvious that you can understant what it's like to change your plans. I say plans and not dreams because I already had gotten part of the blueprints drawn up for a 53 foot motorsailor/ commercial fishing boat that I was going to buy the hull from Skookum Marine in Port Townsend, WA and finish myself during the thirty days off between thirty days on as a tug boat captain. I was still running motorlife boats in the Coast Guard and had qualified myself to take the test to get get my first mate's license. I had passed my E-5 service wide exam with a score of 99%, #one out of ~250. When I reported to Cape Disappointment (ironic name huh) motorlife boat station in July of 1977, I set a record by getting qualified to run the 44' MLB on search and rescue missions in six weeks. Very few others got qualified in less than six months. My career plan was to have the motor sailor finished by 1990 and raise a family while cruising the world and fishing when I wanted and/or needed to. |
| 2011-03-10 13:03:42 |
tears |
My fellow epileptic: I apologize for upseting you, last night I would have quad voted my rant off of here but I was out of votes for the day at the time. After midnight, the first comments made me change my mind as it appeared that my rant had made a few people feel a little better. You and I aren't the only two people on earth that have serious problems. I recommend posing as a visitor and walking the halls of a hospital until you have walkef by a dying child or cancer patient. It's helps put an end to most pity parties. I'm not even trying to make these comments orderly as 't's not necessary and I'm sure you know what it's like to have a poor memory and try to stay organized. You can understand how hard it was for me to write my Last Chance story. I probably reread it 200 times, even a comprehensive outline can't protect you from not finding contradictions. Unless you're lucky you can understand to lose a large part of your intelligence. |
| 2011-03-10 12:47:54 |
tears |
My fellow epileptic: I would be happy to help you in any way I can if you PM me. I have been an epileptic long enough that it's possible that I can offer you some help based on experience and a little understanding. It sounds like you're worse off than I am in some ways. You are right about being an idiot as I'm sure you already know, AED's are hard on our intelligence. I was lucky in that respect, I was literally a genius before I became an epileptic. I can still pass a mensa test and my IQ measured at 137 last summer when I had just been switched from ineffective tegretol with lamotrigenel to levetiracetam.and lamotrigene. It was like I could suddenly think again. I have JME so I don't have the hope and terrifying choice that brain surgery can offer. I just kill brain cells three times a day and am considering a VNS to try to lower the amount of AED's I have to take. |
| 2011-03-10 00:43:05 |
Willie the Dog, Fucks my Cat |
I haven't laughed so hard in a long time. If you ever need to get rid of Willie, send me a PM, I'm sure he'd enjoy spreading a little happiness in my neighborhood. Exellent story, thank you. |
| 2011-03-09 22:49:27 |
tears |
My apologies, I'd delete it if I could. |
| 2011-03-09 02:11:59 |
Peace |
tears................ |
| 2011-03-09 01:42:36 |
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tears........................................ |
| 2011-03-07 10:10:14 |
Annie's Angel |
I've already read all the contest stories and your story is strongly in the top five in my mind for my contest vote. There are a few writers that write without any expectation of winning (including me) but there are also several writers here that in my opinion are the cream of the crop. Your story proves that our voting system isn't accurate. It reads like a beautifully told true story. |
| 2011-03-05 22:50:50 |
Mistress Hazel |
Students enrolled in the Mon/Wed/Fri 9:00 AM Dom/Sub 101 class:
"Mistress Hazel" is your required reading prior to the first day of class.
Students will meet at the library reference desk on Monday at 9:00 AM sharp. Mistress CJ will take the class to the classroom/lab in Dungeon #3 for your first day of instruction.
NOTICE: Students arriving late will be punished.
Loved it. Thank you CJ. |
| 2011-03-05 14:22:43 |
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I like the guy leaving her and then trying to come back part. My first wife did exactly that (switching male for female obviously.) Pretty ballsy writing the whole story from the female point of view, a woman might be able to tell it was written by a man but I couldn't. |
| 2011-03-04 19:46:17 |
Disaster at Antonio's |
Thanks Debbie, that would have been much better. The next time I try to write a multiple POV story, I'll take your advice. |
| 2011-03-04 15:15:36 |
Disaster at Antonio's |
Anonymous 3-2:
Thanks for explaining what you didn't like about this story, not many people are willing to go to the trouble to do more than say, "This story sucks."
I totally agree about the screwed up formatting.
Without the paragraph seperators, it seemed even worse, I thought it was nearly impossible to keep track fo the points of view while reading. I think I should have just switched points of view a lot less often.
I'm not sure why you think word count should matter.
I agree regarding the resemblance to a children's book, I only posted it thinking some people might think it was funny. It definitely doesn't fit with the theme of this site.
To sum up my feelings about this story, the biggest lesson I learned is not to post a story I'm not happy with. I just hope I remember the lesson in the future.
Thanks again for the helpful criticism, I appreciate it. |
| 2011-03-04 00:54:48 |
Last Chance....Chapter 2 |
I'll try to get Chapter 3 posted soon.
ssalo |
| 2011-03-03 10:07:49 |
Last Chance....Chapter 1 |
I plan on posting Chapter 2 soon. Thank you for the comments, they mean a lot to me.
ssalo |
| 2011-03-02 14:49:53 |
Charity Starts At Home : Chapter 4 : Learning the Basics |
That last comment mine, it wasn't meant to be anonymous, I didn't realize I'd timed out.
ssalo |
| 2011-03-01 03:09:13 |
Cheating Bastard |
I love these contests. Another incredible story and I'm not surprised when I consider the source. Thank you for another wonderful story.
ssalo |
| 2011-02-12 00:42:58 |
Trapped in the Darkness |
Incredible story, I loved it. |
| 2011-02-11 11:26:26 |
Vindictus, The Dark Lord Part 5 |
I bought the book and recommend it. It was well worth it to me. |
| 2011-02-10 13:00:59 |
End Of Innocence |
An interesting story well told. Thank you. |
| 2011-02-10 12:40:36 |
Snow storm get's Mike laid part 1 |
The only part that bothered me was the description of yourself, it seemed a little awkward, like it might have read better by working little parts of it into several paragraphs or something.
Other than that, I liked it a lot. Well done. |
| 2011-02-04 01:58:08 |
Stranded |
I love how you ended it at the photo, I knew anywhere was okay but I totally drew a blank with anything other than starting at there. Perfect titles on both CAW stories. Undressing with a skirt and blouse woke me up with a "What the hell?" Nice. |
| 2011-02-04 01:41:08 |
Lost... |
I wasn't sure where you were going but when I got to the plane part, it suddenly make sense. I like it, it's painful and powerful and I like how you ended it. |
| 2011-01-26 00:15:33 |
My best mate Dan (Re-write chptrs 3 & 4 |
I liked the romance better but this was wonderful too, please continue. |
| 2011-01-23 23:46:39 |
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I enjoy your work, thanks for the time and effort.
ssalo |
| 2011-01-20 02:12:08 |
Brother and Sister |
It could use a little proofreading but other than that, I loved it.
ssalo |
| 2011-01-20 02:10:57 |
Brother and Sister |
It could use a little proofreading but other than that, I loved it.
ssalo |
| 2011-01-12 22:50:45 |
A Kind Stranger 3 |
Thank you again. I'm looking forward to KS 4 when it's done.
ssalo |
| 2011-01-12 22:48:23 |
A Kind Stranger 3 |
It's nice to know there's a KS 4 in the works. I'm looking forward to it already. Thank you for sharing your talent and effort.
ssalo |
| 2010-12-29 20:02:25 |
A Cruise with My Granddaughter, Final Part |
Thank you for the wonderful story, I loved it.
ssalo |
| 2010-12-28 02:41:52 |
The Rabbit Died - Chapter 1 |
I love this story. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-12-28 02:40:51 |
The Rabbit Died - Chapter 1 |
I love this story. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-12-28 02:39:28 |
The Rabbit Died - Chapter 1 |
I love this story. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-12-28 02:38:38 |
The Rabbit Died - Chapter 1 |
I love this story. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-12-27 17:10:46 |
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I just finished reading this story and about half of the comments. Wow and wow.
Wow #1: The captivating romanctic twist of a telepath and an empath sharing love and sex is incredible. The story would have had to have been completely different if the ages of the girls were raised into the low teens. I would have prefered it adjusted accordingly. It could still have been about young love, lust, learning, and risk.. And telepathy and (remote) empathy. Exellent idea, well organized, wonderful character development, scenes that felt real. Very well written writte
Wow #2: Very interesting comments. Pretty much all reruns with only a few exceptions after the first 100. The comments really demonstrate the diverse views, values, attitudes, personalities, and educational levels of the people that spend time on this website. Humanity would be diminished by the loss of any of them.
I thank the author, the poster, and the commenters. You have all made my day more interesting. |
| 2010-12-03 00:32:02 |
Terror in the Snowstorm Final Capter |
Primacy & Recency. It's hard to beat a good story that has a truly perfect ending. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-11-29 12:58:43 |
Daddy Doesn't Spare The Rod |
Your story got bumped on the forum and I just now read it there. I love it and am impressed by how well written it is. I like the ending most of all.. Thank you for sharing your wonderful imagination, talent, and effort.
ssalo |
| 2010-11-16 22:04:03 |
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SMC-
Thank you for telling Abi\'s story. Maybe someday you\'ll be able to write a happier story about how far Abi\'s small steps have taken her.
ssalo |
| 2010-11-11 21:06:39 |
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POSITIVE (vote) ssalo
Thank you, you\'re one of the best. |
| 2010-11-02 02:43:14 |
For the Love of Holly |
Every other word in the second half of this story could have been misspelled and I wouldn\'t have noticed it. Thank you for sharing your talent and your heart.
ssalo |
| 2010-09-30 22:46:17 |
What Are Best Friends For? |
I loved it. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-09-30 22:27:06 |
Walking Girl |
I love these contests. I think this will be a serious contender. Thank you for the warm & fuzzy feelings.
ssalo |
| 2010-09-30 21:08:44 |
Sibling Love |
I'm loving it. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-09-17 23:20:51 |
Lock up your women folk. |
You made my laugh muscles hurt so good. Thank you kindly.
ssalo |
| 2010-09-06 21:21:34 |
AN UNCLE AND HIS NIECE, FULL STORY |
I loved it. Thank you. When bittersweet ends with sweet, it's the best.
ssalo |
| 2010-08-12 23:25:53 |
I guess I really DID need a vacation! |
Thank you for proving me right again: The readers win the writing contest every time. I loved it.
ssalo |
| 2010-08-05 23:15:40 |
NIGHTS IN WHITE SATIN |
Exellent story, very hard to stop reading. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-08-04 23:24:41 |
A Good Kind Of Trouble |
Love, Justice, Healing, Sex, and a happy ending. People spending years as walking wounded (emotionally) are way too plentiful. It was the Coast Guard for me. I saved a few lives, but the memories that I can't forget are of when I failed and of the people that died. Thank you for the wonderful story.
ssalo |
| 2010-08-01 20:51:44 |
Contest entry: Bonds of youth |
I'm an incurable romantic and I love emotional roller coasters. You did a wonderful job of writing exactly my kind of story. I enjoyed it immensely and intensely. Thank you for sharing your talent and effort.
Sincerely;
ssalo |
| 2010-07-31 21:20:59 |
Vacation For Two - Friday |
Thanks DC-
I had a tough week and escaping into your exellent (as usual) story for a little while was just what I needed. I appreciate it.
ssalo |
| 2010-07-09 03:07:21 |
Injured Cousin |
Thank you for sharing the beautiful story. Unlikely love is hard to beat. It was a pleasure from beginning to end.
Sincerely;
ssalo |
| 2010-07-05 21:51:14 |
Cum, little Lauren |
Thank you for the exellent story. And for inspiring the very entertaining comments from the mentally disabled that can't differentiate between fantasy and reality. Great fun!
Sincerely;
ssalo |
| 2010-07-04 22:51:27 |
Stranded Daddies |
Wow! Sex, Love, Humor, Technical Exellence, Character Development, a Storyline, Suspense, Friendships, and a Happy Ending! And all in a story long enough to really enjoy it.
Thank you for sharing your talent and the fruits of your labor.
Sincerely;
ssalo
P.S.- I especially enjoyed the incest and pregnancies delivered with love too.
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| 2010-06-22 21:55:34 |
Fertile Valley - Reprise 3 |
I've loved the original Fertile Valley for years. Thank you for picking up the torch and adding to the classic. Very nicely done.
Sincerely;
ssalo |
| 2010-06-13 19:43:37 |
A Kind Stranger part 1 & 2 |
I just want to thank you for sharing your talent and effort. I appreciate your gift from the heart.
Sincerely;
ssalo |
| 2010-05-23 08:38:21 |
Gold digger wanted to get pregnant... against my will! |
My apologies for the poorly written rant. below, my excuse involves strong feelings and weak coffee. I once tried to become a step father of two with the best intentions and gave up with a broken heart but luckily no child support due to a vascectomy.
Your story is very well written and touching.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-23 08:26:34 |
Gold digger wanted to get pregnant... against my will! |
I live in far northern California and your story is a common one here. Everyone involved are victims of a co-dependent system of semi-poverty and bad government. A young man, especially one with a good man is sought out by a young woman. He's usually too drunk or too gullable and she knows that a pregnancy will give her fiancial independance between the government and child support. She can and usually does remain single to protect her income, access to health care, and personal independance. The man suffers the cost without the fulfillment and support of a family. The child is most often raised with less love, attention and guidance than a traditional family can offer. And the single mother gets caught in a trap that's more initially appealing than emotionally healthy. She needs to repeat the process every several years as the state won't support her when her as substantially when she's no longer caring for a young child. With few skills and child care, her options are few. |
| 2010-05-19 00:00:38 |
ELLEN |
Wow. I can hardly wait to read your other stories.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-16 20:52:50 |
love between siblings: part 3 |
Beautiful story. Thank you. |
| 2010-05-14 01:04:19 |
The Valedictorian Part Two |
You have a nice touch. I'm not sure where you're going with this but the ride has been a pleasure so far. Thank you.
Sincerely;
ssalo |
| 2010-05-14 00:43:42 |
The Valedictorian Part One |
Very nice, I like the social/sexual awakening side of your story.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-10 00:22:30 |
A Different Kind of Love |
LOL!!! LOL!!! LOL!!!! You have the funniest Trolls yet! Then I think about their real lives and it makes me sad. Like a good incest story, the fantasy is so entertaining but to consider the reality is so sad. If I knew the Trolls weren't really so pitiful in real life, I wouldn't have to feel so damned guilty for laughing so hard at them. Did you read that one's comment that was obviously trying to attack what was a completely different story? Or did I just miss the 10 y.o. the mixed up Troll tried to refer to?
I've got to tell you, this is one exellent love story. I just wish all your stories were romances. You have a magic touch in this genre. That's half of what makes your Trolls so hilarious, it's such a touching and sensitive love story and your pitiful Trolls can't even tell it from porn.
I haven't read all the contest stories yet but this is definitely a frontrunner. If you're not proud, you should be. And some of the best Trolls too! Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-08 18:42:08 |
Rough Justice |
Perfectly titled. Powerfully written. Thank you for the wild and terrifying ride. I need a valium.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-08 00:14:27 |
On a Moonlit Night, Wishes May Come True |
What he said: Wantsomefun's comment said it for me too.
"a wolf or mountain lion" brought back the yellow eyed animal and full moon. That combination created a strong suspicion of Christopher's part.
The wine's unusual effect on Lauren (as well as being Christopher's sister) made Audrey an enigma that I didn't figure out until the very end. Color me slow. I prefer to call it a mystery very well written.
Sofistikadedly yours;
ssalo |
| 2010-05-07 22:05:45 |
Love at Second Sight |
Wow. You've got some serious competition here but this story has all the romance, suspense, and happy ending that I could ask for. If you can figure out a way to continue it, I'm sure I'm not the only one that would love it.
You know you're on a roll when people who hate this (filth) read it anyway so that they can leave you (nasty) comments for your own good. Even wife doesn't care enough about me to suffer through this (filth) for my own good.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-07 03:01:40 |
Aftermath |
Short and very sweet. I love it and also hope it's the first of several chapters. You've created a very interesting future and two characters that I would enjoy reading much more about.
Sincerely;
ssalo |
| 2010-05-07 00:04:47 |
Stormy... |
I love the way your story dwells on the fear involved in taking the risk needed to approach a familiar stranger. And then the black and white of rejection followed by acceptance. Exellent work, I thank you.
This contest is a wonderful idea but I've still got seventeen more stories to read and I already want to vote for both of the two stories that I've read.
Thank you for the exellent story.
Sincerely;
ssalo |
| 2010-05-01 19:00:12 |
The Vertical Smile - part 2 |
There must be something wrong with your stories, I'm not finding the personal attack comments that can be so amusing. Thank you and please don't stop writing.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-01 18:47:30 |
Her Vertical Smile |
Love the title
I'm an incurable romantic and my favorite way for the intimacy to start is with someone just needing to be held. Thank you.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-01 18:36:47 |
Now it's my turn |
I love how the characters very slowly come into focus until the shock at the end brings perfect clarity. An exellent story well written.
ssalo |
| 2010-05-01 00:28:47 |
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A.P.-
For me, the last five words are the "cherry on top." I've never nursed a forlorn hope for so long. (Except once in high school.)
As it should be, I have no idea where you're going to take us with "Sublimated" but I sure don't want to miss the ride.
I've said before that I like long, wild roller coasters and this definitely qualifies in spades. I thank you again.
ssalo |
| 2010-04-30 22:45:24 |
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A.P.-
Whadda I want? I want you to LOL or chuckle or smile or just be amused, as I'm sure you understood. I just read word #986,000 and love where and how you ended this book. Well done.
Keep laughing;
ssalo
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| 2010-04-28 17:32:35 |
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A.P.- Vitriol amuses?
Okay. There are some of us here trying to read Beauty whose IQs are a few points below Jarvik's wife's. We hate multi-
syllable words. They're hard. We read slowly enough without spending half our time with our nose in that Webster guy's book. Not to mention that Wiki thing that most people laugh at and use anyway. Besides, it's not P.C. making us feel ignorant. I've got more complaints but I'm stopping here anyway because I'm getting a headache and I hate spending more than two hours writing a comment.
ssalo, looking for the aspirin |
| 2010-04-28 14:58:17 |
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A.P./reader:
Regarding answer #2 "to a few questions:"
I understood that they represent the two sides of love. I just thought that you might have a hidden meaning behind the exact spelling (or something) of the two names. It isn't the first time that I've suspected you of being subtle beyond my understanding. Maybe just the first time that I was mistaken about it.
Regarding patooties:
I like my patooties a little on the firm side. Please don't change the recipe. Or stop cooking. I'm a believer in "appetite makes the best sauce," so I'm not tempted to ask to be fed too often. Just don't let me starve completely. Please. Thank you for sharing such a large and enjoyable meal.
ssalo |
| 2010-04-27 21:16:15 |
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Just another chapter, the same as all the others, long and exellent.
If I may be so bold: Did you write these books to:
A. Amuse yourself?
B. Vent frustration?
C. Test yourself?
D. Say something that needed saying to those willing to listen?
E. Make people figure it out for themselves?
F. Some of the above?
G. None of the above?
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| 2010-04-27 20:48:22 |
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On a good day I can count to ten, but words aren't my best thing. I am still clueless as to why the names are similar.
On a more sober note: Does Jessica's last name refer to Turner's syndrome? I apologize for asking, my curiousity is often an uncontrollable curse. |
| 2010-04-26 23:12:52 |
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Okay, I'm a puppy. I love whoever I'm with. Greta or Jessica, it doesn't matter. Sigh. |
| 2010-04-25 21:47:39 |
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Awesome book. I can not help thinking of Greta a real person and hoping for her to recover as if she were. |
| 2010-04-12 11:21:21 |
The Chronicles of Amy |
I have an I.Q. of 137 and 2 testicles.
I also love a very sensitive and well written love story. In light of today's divorce rate, it's also an extremely relevant story.
For those readers who are offended by this story, for your peace of mind, I have to suggest that this may not be the best website to find stories you like. |
| 2010-04-04 21:21:37 |
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Thank you for expanding my vocabulary. And not making understanding the plot depend on understanding Jessica's math. I look forward to Book Two with expectations that are dangerously high. I can't imagine how much work you are putting into this trilogy. |
| 2010-04-04 18:12:14 |
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Nice change of focus, very exciting to a sailor that's afraid of heights. |
| 2010-04-04 13:40:31 |
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This chapter make's "Hell" worth the pain. Thank you. |
| 2010-04-04 13:33:29 |
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A perfectly named chapter. |
| 2010-04-04 13:11:17 |
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A cruel and exquisite portrayal of love and lust. But I am unworthy. I could not read every precious word. Please, I beg you, don't punish me for my weakness. I will do better next time, I promise. I'll never let you down again. I'm so afraid, it would kill me if you banished me from this perfect world you've so masterfully created. |
| 2010-04-04 10:34:45 |
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This chapter opens up some incredible possibilities. Very tantalizing. |
| 2010-04-03 19:55:35 |
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Thank you.. |
| 2010-04-02 02:16:14 |
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Thank you for not writing a chapter named Insanity. This one was a pretty small knothole to be pulled through. Awesome. |
| 2010-04-01 21:43:59 |
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If I only had a memory, maybe I could remember not to use quotation marks here. It's getting a little embarrassing. |
| 2010-04-01 21:39:39 |
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(1)This is by far the best Cinderella story I've ever read. I already dread the words: "The End."
(2)Thank you for the warning against reading all of your comment that may give something away.
(3)I really like the apparent fact that the length of the chapters thins out those who read stories that they don't like. I assume they do it in order to righteously berate the author after they torture themselves by reading every word. (Of the "filth.")
(4)I know "the details of my life don't matter." But, I'm the cat that curiosity killed. Would Jessica happen to be your alter ego in some small way? |
| 2010-03-31 23:51:25 |
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(1)The chapters are kind of short.
(2)I don't see how this book can stay this good at the way to the end, much less the next two.
(3)Thank you again says the broken record.
(4)I'm already afraid of the chapter named Hell. |
| 2010-03-31 20:25:16 |
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(1)Thank you for keeping the sodomy scene brief. It fits much more comfortably in this story than in my fantasies.
(2)First I read: "Another secret: not so hot at math, either." (In one of AP's comment replys.) Then a few chapters later I have to consult Wiki. to try to figure out what Calabi-Yau shapes are? It sure tastes like there's fiction hiding in here somewhere.
(3)Starting May 10th I will have drastically less time to read. I suppose it would be too much to ask you to try to write the third ~half million word book by the end of April?
(4)Thank you for a most exellent, twisted, and romantic story. |
| 2010-03-27 19:37:37 |
Backyard Princess, Chapter 5 |
Thank you for sharing the results of your time, effort, and talent. Your sensitive handling of first love was a beautiful trip through an alternate past. I thank you again. |