||Me and my 40+ Teacher
||What! By the time i got an interest in the story it was over. But it is a good start but you may want to may them a bit more longer.
||Fucking My Neighbors Part I
||What about your Mom and inoceint mother series. Are you going to update those? Those were hot.
||MOM... Chapter 3
||great stroy but I don;t think he is going to updating here anymore. look at the last posting. But please you got mommy pregant at 14? you are some of those scum bags here posting what you want.
||WP again you are a great writer here. Again it is always about the sex but different styles of sex. Even though I do not take part of some of those styles but you put it with class. But about those a things I noticed it is alway when you used a ' sign when you typed can't or another word with that.
||LONG WINTER WEEKEND WITH THE GIRLS Part 1
||good start here but write what you feel and not just these assholes who are to small that they have to make bad remarks
||I CAN'T RESIST MY NEIGHBOR-OR HER TEENAGE GIRLS-6
||WOW! This is all i can say here. an aboustly fantatic story from the begiining to finish. You are a very talented wirter and i can't wait to see what the mind of yours will give us. Please in the immotral words of Oliver "Sir can i have more"
||Helenes daughters part two
||HOT! Can't wait to see what is next
||Massaging Sister and Mother Part 2
||I agree here here more background here and maybe mother and sister would be good. Or a new story would also be good
||A MOTHER'S DARKEST DESIRES - CHAPTER 4
||great story but you went from chapter 2 to 4. where is 3? i hoe that this was a typo for you chapter title.
||Harry Potter: Hermione's Good Fortune
||Good start here with harry and i would like t see more. but you also have a wizards of waverly place that looks like chapter two and from what i read it is hot. Any chance of posting more of that here or can you tell me where you a have it posted at. i am at firstname.lastname@example.org if you want to send me the sites
||Visit to Aunt April's House (ch.1-5)
||again great story but please put the next chapter alone so we don't have to scroll to the new chapter. and please if you include other family members as some of thes idiots here suggest i like getting mom pregreant do it with class like your stories are
||Best Winter every with my wife's relative's
||but i would love to see the next chapter soon
||Best Winter every with my wife's relative's
||IslanDream dont worry you are good but you do need to have a little more detail to your story. about your wirting we all are not english lits like these anonymous jerks that the only thing that they can be negative about is writing. let them write their own stories and see what they replies they get back. i'm sure that they would get back the same repsonse back that they gave
||Happy Thanksgiving Aunt Amy
||Good start and i agreee with some of the comments. one is yes have sex with the aunt at least. two is establish more of a background of the characters to prolong the series. three everyone here says to get them pregnant don't listen to them but if that is the way you want to go then go for it
||School day continues
||still a good start but to suggestions. spell check and make them a bit longer with a little bit more detail to the sex action
||Home on Leave, The Sequel, Part 1
||keep writing. i love your stories
||Home on Leave, Chapter 9
||YOU ARE A GREAT WRITER SO DON'T STOP. ABOUT THIS TROLL HE CAN JUST GO AND BLOW HIMSELF. DON'T WORRY ABOUT HIM
||My Hottie Aunt Sujatha Part-II
||PLEASE CONTINUE ON WITH THIS STORY. IT IS HOT AND SO MUCH POSSIBILITIES
||Sis and I Chapter 2 It runs in the family
||Just let your own creative mind go with the story. Everyone here wants threesomes which is could be an awesome stroy but lay off the pregnant aspect yet. Just feel what you want to write and say to us. You have the gift to do it.
||Thunder in Hell - A Dirty Western - The Complete Novella
||Great story. I can't wait to see what you will write abount next.
||I asked our son to fuck his mother
||Defintely need more action details and less excess background details.
||My Sister's Friends Part VII
||Great story all hte way through. Along with all the other stories that you posted. Just keep wirting.
||New Harry Potter Adventures: Chapter 7 - part 1 of 2 - Harry's Recovery
||Why not to both. Just because you close one story. That does need to mean another one can not start. But keep writing! This has been a great run on the Harry Potter stories.
||An incest birthday chapter 16
||First off I am glad that you are back and writing. This has been my favorite series on this site and just keep it going. IT IS GREAT! But my vote is to have the twins have there own day to plan the revenge on the mother/aunt. And I am sure that you will do a great job in writing the next 10 chapters. Again this a great story!
||Daughter of Ex-Wife Grown Up, Part 6, Return of Ex-Wife
||Damb Great story. Keep writing it. But what happend to chapter 5
|| LONG WINTER WEEKEND WITH THE GIRLS Part 2
||I pretty much agree with everyone else here that this a GREAT stroy but you have chapter 2 listed 3 times on this site. Please post the next chapter soon. You will make a great amount of readers happy.
||The Forest Nymph: Original And Sequal
||I loved the story and don't worry about being history/myth correct. Not everyone has read the Greek myths and even the Hercules/Xena series wasn't correct all times. I hope that you right more stories in this genre.
||PRMOTION CELEABRATION WITH MY SON, CHAPTER ONE: EDITED
||Good start with the first story. I really enjoyed it and can't wait for the next FEW chapters.
||Innocent Mother Seduces Son Ch. 2
||When is the next chapter of this good story? I really hope that you finish this story and don't leave us haning unlike some other writers.
||MOM... Chapter 3
||Go with what you want to write. But in my opion you are writing a great story but just keep writing!
||I suggest that you keep writing what you feel is the best. You do have a talent and I hope to see more from you. But the others have given you idea's to keep this story going on with what Lolitalover46 had to say.
||Busty Daughter-In-law Busted, part 4. Annie's Revenge
||Please keep writing I love this story. Maybe get the the son and other mom invloved in future chapters.
||MOM WANTS TO BE MY CUM BUCKET! - CHAPTER 6
||GREAT STORY! PLEASE DON'T KEEP US WAITING.
||MY TWIN SISTER, TARA - 2
||Can't wait for chapter 3 and 4 and maybe more. Keep writing
||My Wifes Big Surprise for Me
||There all great stories. Just keep continuing to write them all. Along with new baby sitter teaches sex and mad me do it along with the biology teacher.
||Meet the Jetsons
||I agree another story is needed. Maybe between Geoge and Judy? Who knows where you can take this. But please no Astro.
||(Day Two) Loving Lisa?s Pretty Pink Pussy Petals
||Jackass you rock. Just keep writing they you want and i wil read them
||My Ebony Girl
||Good story so keep writing and just see where you want to take this.
||it happened on vacation (and continued at home) pt 8
||Yes continue this story. That has to be the most dumbest question. You have a GREAT story going on. Keep it going until the finish.
||Sorry but I had to give negative rating. You did have a good story line going but it was to short to get into. I do recommend a sequel and a bit more of the action
||Lesbian sisters home alone CH.01
||KEEP WRITING ALL THE GIRLS ARE OVERAGE DUE TO THE NEW POLICY THAT THIS SITE IS ENFORCING. THIS IS STILL A GOOD STORY REGARDLESS OF THE AGE. WHO KNOWS MABYE LIS SIS WANT'S TO JOIN?
||Camping With My Girls - Conclusion
||No this is a good ending to this great story that you have wrote. The only question is what happened to the other wife and husband when this story orginated in the oppertunity? That might be a good side story for a couple of chapters.
||My Uncle's New Wife; Part 4 Stacy and Mrs. Johnson
||GREAT SERIES AND YES KEEP WRITING THIS STROY UNTIL THE END.
||SOUND SLEEPER 2: The Awakening
||So when is the next story. The only suggestion that i have is to make it longer
||Dad and his Girls
||Forget the negative critic's you do have a good story developing and I would like to see at least one or more two chapters
||My Aunt Is Just Too Sexy
||As in your Danny story just keep writing what you feel. But just keep writing until you end the story.
||Yes write another story. It was great as a wram up and as long as your aunt story that is posted here. Keep writing the both.
||My Two Aunts Part 2
||Good story and i do like the ending since I also live in the Phoenix valley and love the Dbacks and Cardinals. The only thing I would suggest is that make the stories a bit longer (more background, charchter etc..) for each chapter. These are like wham bam thank you mam.
||The Kiss Part #3 B
||BOTH WERE GREAT JUST KEEP WRITING AND MORE OF MY DAUGHTERS FRIEND NATALIA
||Late night with young boys
||Good potenial but to short of a story. Expand on the story and give your characters of the story to come through
||My stepsisters 3
||Please have a stepsisters 4 (and 5 etc). This is a good story.
||Bra Shopping With Uncle
||GREAT STORIES AND I LIKE HOW YOU END THE THE END.
||Berry Patch Cherry Picker Chapter 1
||More before the next Jason series please. Great story
||Sharing My Room With Sis 10: Abby's Fear
||Great ending. Just tease that leaves it open but not. Over all one of the best series written on this site. Can't wait to see what is next.
||Wizards of Waverly Place: Episode 3
||COME ON AND GIVE US ANOTHER STORY OR AT LEAST FINISH THE SERIES! YOU HAVE GREAT THING GOING SO DON'T KEEP US WAITING!
||A Road Trip with My Grand Daughter-Final Part
||Great job in writning thes stroy. I hope to read more of your stories. Just write what you want and the readers will come to you.
||SORRY I WAS NOT LOGGED IN BUT WHAT I HAVE SHOULD HAVE SAI THEY WISH THEY HAD A LEAST HAVE OF 12 FOR THIER DICKS. COME ON GUYS HE AT LEAST POSTS STORIES FOR US TO READ AND MAYBE ENJOY. GIVE HIM CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISM OR BETTER YET DON'T READ ANY MORE FROM HIM
||Sonny with a chance to get laid
||My suggestion is to keep writng and eventually (see my gammer is not that great) and you have a great story going and for the next chapter continue on with Sonny. But keep writing!
||Do not listing to last reply! I would love to read your next story of the incest club. So please post it and keep it as just as great!
||Family Circus - Ch. 6
||WRITER I HOPE THAT YOU ARE STILL HERE. THIS WAS A GREA;T SIERES AND I HOPE THAT YOU CAND FIND MORE WITH THIS AND ALSO WITH THE FAMILY AFFAIR.
||Daddy uses uses his Asian Kat for the first time
||I AGREE WITH ALL THE OTHERS. YOU HAVE A GREAT STORY GOING AND I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT ONE. KEEP WRTING PLEASE!
||Holiday of Sin
||ANOTHER GREAT STORY GOING! BUT I STILL DARE YOU TO KEEP WRITING THIS STORY BEFORE STARTING SOMETHING ELSE LIKE ALL THE OTHER WRITES. IN OTHER WORDS FINSH WHAT YOU STARTED!
||Driven to Sex
||Good start but I barely give a postive vote because a lot of the writes dont continue their stories. So here is the dare continue this story and I will keep giving postive reviews
||PART 2PART 2 PLEASE! GREAT STORY!
||Dad and the neighbors
||I BARELY GIVE YOU A POSTIVE RATING. THE ONLY THING THAT YOU HAVE GOING ON IT IS A HOT STORY AND HAS A LOT OF PROPECT TO MAKE IT HOTTER. PLEASE NO MORE WHAM BAHM MAM STORIES. GET A BIT MORE STORY AND SEX INTO IT. BY THE WAY I DO LIVE IN THE PHONIEX AREA.
||Family Therapy III
||Come on Darklord! You have a GREAT series going on don't waste it with short stories! I have read a lot of your stories but they are so short with no plot. You have it in you to do better. You have the talent!
||Me and my Cousin
||Not bad for the first time. But you may want to write a bit longer stories. Just remember wam bam thank you mam maybe good but it will not get back readers.
||Wizards of Waverly Place: Episode 2
||Also I agree with the others make it a longer stroy! A little more plot and about the same on the sex.
||Wizards of Waverly Place: Episode 2
||Great story going! Now if you got the hot mom going catching them in the act and wants in who knows where you can go with this? Maybe Dad at the same time?