Comments from BlackRonin

Date Story title Comment
2012-06-10 04:06:03 Roses are Red (or, "The Red Girl"). I appreciate your opinion, but that's not terribly constructive. Can I ask in a bit more detail what you didn't like?
2012-06-19 12:56:35 The Changeling Baby. If you have a more specific question I'd be happy to address it?
2012-06-20 01:41:15 That was a good read. I rather enjoy the atmosphere of a salty sea tale. The prose gets a bit purple here and there, and I'm not sure the thing about getting turned on by watching a naked woman eat raw fish really pans out (although I suppose that's surely someone's fetish...), but still, a good read, with genuine conflict and a folkloric bent that's rarely seen. PM me sometime, it seems like we might have some common interests in source material.
2012-06-21 04:50:10 The Girl In The Photograph This really ought to have more reads.
2012-07-24 02:49:32 The Green River: Chapter 1: Lust & Beauty Hey, congrats on the first story; it's really gratifying to be expressing yourself in a public forum, isn't it?

By way of advice, I'd first say, be sure to use the tags in the upload form. Not only will it mean your story is linked on more parts of the site, it'll also give readers a heads-up about the content. Second, I'm never one for preludes, warnings, or any other such waivers; your story will speak for itself, one way or the other, and these waivers tend to lead people to pre-judge your work before even laying eyes on it.

The story is not bad, but there's not much remarkable about it. Put it in a lineup with similar stories and it would blend right in, as there's not much in the way of a plot or characterization. This doesn't make it bad, of course; on the contrary, you've giving readers what they want up front, and more likely than not they'll appreciate it. But they might be prone to forget about it pretty easily because it doesn't stand out.

Congrats again, and keep w