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| 2010-03-22 22:29:26 |
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Sorry, I thought that maybe you could remember where Beverly was at the time and what her situation was. The reader was left to surmise the grisly scene found by the Captain at the end. |
| 2010-03-22 22:31:44 |
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Oh. By the way, I wouldn't wright anything. I didn't just now either. |
| 2010-03-22 22:39:27 |
Mrs. McBride |
It's fantasy. Did you expect me to take him to church? |
| 2010-03-25 01:58:10 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Seven |
Sorry, Paul's Mom never did anything to him other than gawk. Kenny was a different story. Check out the earlier parts for that story.
kenny1kenny |
| 2010-04-17 02:09:15 |
A Canadian Story |
Bravo. Quite a story. You should write some more. |
| 2010-04-17 02:10:45 |
BeC Clothing Company; Jeremy's story |
What can I say. I wish I could write like that. Keep it up. |
| 2010-04-29 20:05:52 |
Total Confusion Part Three |
Comments? Let me know what you think. Good or bad. I am working on a new story and haven't posted in several months. I still keep up with the comments. 04/29/10 |
| 2010-04-29 20:08:19 |
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Comments? Comments are still welcome. Good or bad. Let me know what you think. 04/29/10 |
| 2010-04-29 20:10:23 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Seven |
I'm not hearing any feedback. Tell me what you think. 04/29/10 |
| 2010-04-29 20:11:59 |
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Don't be shy. Post a comment to let me know how you feel.
04/29/10 |
| 2010-04-29 20:13:08 |
Haley |
Comments anyone? Lets hear what you think. 04/29/10 |
| 2010-04-29 20:14:40 |
The Bastard Bitch Part Three |
Post a comment. Lets hear what you think. 04/29/10 |
| 2010-04-29 20:16:49 |
The Bastard Bitch Part Two |
Hey gentle readers. Lets give a little feedback. Post a comment. 04/29/10 |
| 2010-04-29 20:18:22 |
The Bastard Bitch Part One |
Post a comment. I'd love to know how you feel about the story. |
| 2010-04-29 20:20:06 |
Mrs. McBride |
Comments are always welcome. Give me your honest opinion. |
| 2010-04-29 20:21:18 |
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Tell me what you think. Post a comment. |
| 2010-04-29 20:22:16 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Five |
I am looking for some input. Tell me what you feel. |
| 2010-04-29 20:23:33 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Four |
I'm not hearing anything. Surely someone has an opinion. |
| 2010-04-29 20:27:17 |
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Its kind of quiet out there. Don't be afraid to comment. I promise not to take anymore cheap shots at anyone's typing errors. I just couldn't resist that one. After all, I have quite a few in my stories too. |
| 2010-04-29 20:28:50 |
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Comments are still welcome. Good or bad, I read them all. |
| 2010-04-29 20:29:47 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Three |
Come on. Let me know what you think of the story. |
| 2010-04-29 20:30:46 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Two |
Don't be shy. Post a comment. let me know what you think. |
| 2010-04-29 20:31:51 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty One |
Comments. Comments. Comments. Lets hear your opinion. |
| 2010-04-29 20:32:54 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty |
What do you think of the story? |
| 2010-04-29 20:33:40 |
Total Confusion Part Nineteen |
Comments wanted. Give your opinion. |
| 2010-04-29 20:34:31 |
Total Confusion Part Eighteen |
Tell me what you think. Don't forget to vote. |
| 2010-04-29 20:35:56 |
Total Confusion Part Seventeen |
Vote and post a comment. All opinions are welcome. |
| 2010-04-29 20:37:19 |
Total Confusion Part Sixteen |
Comments? Votes? Is it fantasy or is it real. |
| 2010-04-29 20:38:56 |
Total Confusion Part Fifteen |
Comment and vote. Tell what you think. Are you reading fantasy or is it something different. |
| 2010-04-29 20:40:26 |
Total Confusion Part Fourteen |
Feelings? Anyone have any input. Fact or fiction? Lets hear your comments. |
| 2010-04-29 20:41:45 |
Total Confusion Part Thirteen |
Let me know what you think. Give me your vote. |
| 2010-04-29 20:43:18 |
Total Confusion Part Twelve |
Are these stories fantasy or did this little boy actually go through all of this. Give me your input. Don't forget to vote. |
| 2010-04-29 20:44:22 |
Total Confusion Part Eleven |
Vote and then comment. Are these stories for real? |
| 2010-04-29 22:15:41 |
suzy and stefi |
I don't know if you ever come back to the site as your last post was 2004, but that was a great story. I loved it. I wish you'd write another. Well you did see one of mine recently, so good work. |
| 2010-04-29 22:32:26 |
Total Confusion Part Ten |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got signed out in the middle of posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:34:11 |
Total Confusion Part Nine |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:34:45 |
Total Confusion Part Eight |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:35:20 |
Total Confusion Part Seven |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:35:47 |
Total Confusion Part Six |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:36:22 |
Linda Lou And The Crew Part Two |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:36:53 |
Total Confusion Part Four |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:37:47 |
The Bastard Bitch Part Six |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:38:21 |
Total Confusion Part Two |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:38:52 |
Total Confusion Part One |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:39:17 |
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The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:39:50 |
The Scout Trip |
The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-29 22:40:28 |
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The comment below is mine. Somehow I got logged out during posting and lost my name tag. Sorry. |
| 2010-04-30 00:30:01 |
Getting my nephew naked |
Great story. I got a kick out of it. Still, you're going to have a hell of a hard time getting your nephew to accept any of that twenty two year old male pussy, unless you can convince him you are really a thirty two year old aunt. I love true stories. Keep it up and I am looking forward to part two if it isn't already out. |
| 2010-05-05 08:36:55 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Seven |
There is a Part Twenty Six. It has proven too dificult to share it at this point, therefore it is still in my computer. I am still considering it. Maybe later. |
| 2010-05-26 20:19:56 |
THE GUILT OF LIKING IT. |
Yes, that's right. The story really sucks. |
| 2010-05-27 12:48:10 |
STRIP POKER___ALL BOY'S |
Yes. That's right. That's still very annoying, but I cannot lie. The story was great. It gave me a boner. |
| 2010-08-06 18:46:24 |
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Congratulations on a dick raising and very erotic story. Makes me wish I had a step sister when I was fourteen. I loved it. I plan on reading them all. |
| 2010-08-06 18:53:16 |
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As I said after reading part two. This is great. Keep up the great work. I've only read two so far, but I'm banking on all of them being fantastic. |
| 2010-08-07 12:27:04 |
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This is GREAT stuff. |
| 2010-08-07 13:58:01 |
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Every bit as good as the first. I kept a hard on the whole time I was reading it. |
| 2010-08-07 14:16:16 |
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It would be cool to tell everything you and your sisters did with each other. Heck start a different series that is fantasy and let Mom catch you and join in too. Maybe even Dad will want some. Who knows what might happen. |
| 2010-08-08 00:26:55 |
Jenna’s Story |
Hot story. Good work on being a girl for the story. You made her real. I wanted to fuck her too. Especially in front of her Mom. |
| 2010-08-08 00:55:45 |
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Bravo. You are three for three so far with me on this series. I see you are #2 already. |
| 2010-08-08 01:14:33 |
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Congrats. This just gets hotter as it goes along. |
| 2010-08-08 12:14:20 |
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Thanks for the revision. I didn't read it as I have already read Part Two. |
| 2010-08-08 12:17:17 |
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Excellent writing style. Keep dishing them out. |
| 2010-08-08 12:19:09 |
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Really Sexy. Gets a fellow's dick hard for sure. |
| 2010-08-09 09:12:48 |
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I really enjoy this series. |
| 2010-08-09 09:17:52 |
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Wow. The way those kids go for each other is awesome. |
| 2010-08-09 10:03:54 |
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Thanks for making it so real. Some folks don't believe that families can do that sort of thing, but it happens more often than many think. I've seen enough of it myself. |
| 2010-08-09 15:26:11 |
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Ah. A suspense thriller. Is the whole damn family pregnant? Stay tuned for the next episode. Brilliant story telling my man. Brilliant. |
| 2010-08-09 16:47:48 |
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Do the girls do it with Mom too? Do they all treat each other to a tongue sandwich? |
| 2010-08-09 21:23:55 |
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Now you're talking. More sex between the girls. |
| 2010-08-09 21:51:16 |
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This whole series has been really hot so far. |
| 2010-08-10 00:00:03 |
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Hey dude. Take The End off Part 15 and write one letting some of the sisters fall in love with each other and slowly build their sex to a crescendo. That would make a really sexy story. Surprise us with which ones and how. |
| 2010-08-15 10:19:57 |
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That was cool. Keep it up. |
| 2010-08-21 23:25:08 |
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Awesome story. I loved the way you built up the feelings between the boys. |
| 2010-09-05 16:36:49 |
Camping With My Dad |
Great story. Very exciting the way you captured a young girl's feelings in her first time with Daddy. I'll bet Part 2 is even better. I'm on to part 2 now. Keep up the good work. |
| 2010-09-05 16:57:28 |
Camping With My Dad 2 |
Bravo on the suck scene. While it was interesting reading, the dream part should have been introduced after little Cindy had learned what all that stuff was. I still gave a positive vote the same as I did for Part one. On to Part 3. |
| 2010-09-05 17:19:06 |
Camping With My Dad 3 |
I really loved the way you ended that one. A marvelously cock hardening story. Hurry up with part 4. Maybe after her dreams come true, her brother might want to share their next camping trip and be naughty too? |
| 2010-09-06 12:42:25 |
Dad Doesn't Stand A Chance: Part 1 |
Really exciting story. You managed to relay the way a young boy might think when he is thinking of having sex with Dad. You definitely had my dick hard. I gave it a positive vote. |
| 2010-09-06 12:44:09 |
Dad Doesn't Stand A Chance: Part 2 |
Another positive vote. I can't wait for part three. |
| 2010-09-07 23:24:46 |
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Keep it up dude. Really hot story. Plenty of stuff left to do with this one. Please do part three. |
| 2010-11-07 08:52:23 |
Haley |
Sorry about that. I was so consumed in having Haley slowly seduce her father, I guess I blew that one for you. It most certainly would have been better for him to work it in slow and eventually end up pounding her backsides as he pulled it out and slammed it right back in with her squealing in ecstacy every time. I\'ll try to slip it in sometime. |
| 2010-11-08 09:18:38 |
Haley |
Thanks for the constructive critique and the heartfelt praise. I hope you enjoy my other stories as well. |
| 2010-11-13 05:46:43 |
The Bastard Bitch Part Two |
\"Mary had a little lamb. Her fleece was white as snow. Everywhere Mary went her lamb was sure to go.\" Better? Thanks for the advice anyway. |
| 2010-11-18 17:55:14 |
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Obviously, I didn't get to be that boy, as I am writing this, but I did get pretty close to being him. It was scary. I'll never forget the experience. |
| 2010-11-24 06:00:14 |
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This is the fantasy genre. My doctor could be one of those geniuses that go through college by thirteen. I could have a twelve year old for a doctor if I wanted one. If you want to read the news, try a paper. |
| 2010-12-05 17:33:36 |
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Part 2 is already out. And it is boy/boy. Thanks for the vote of confidence. |
| 2011-01-10 12:30:23 |
Fascinated with hypnotism |
Great story as always. Keep up the good work. I'm getting ready to start part 2 now. I expect it to be the same. |
| 2011-01-10 12:42:02 |
Fascinated with Hypnotism- Chapter Two |
Congratulations. Another ringer. |
| 2011-01-10 12:44:35 |
Fascinated with Hypnotism- Chapter Two |
I would imagine that Mom and the mean older brother are in serious trouble. I can't wait to see what you do with them. |
| 2011-01-15 11:26:17 |
Me,My Friend and our little girls |
I taught I saw a puddy tat. Good story. |
| 2011-01-18 21:18:48 |
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Sorry. In most of many of my stories, I had been the main character with some of my boyhood friends as others and a few special guest stars. It allowed me to feel the character. Perhaps you are right. It is time for a change. Thanks for pointing it out. |
| 2011-01-19 20:48:50 |
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I think you are a little confused about fantasy. This place can do whatever they want. They have some awesome procedures. Perhaps you can find a truthful documentary about sex in the true stories section. Ah, but you'll probably find someone swearing he had an eight inch dick when he was five. Enjoy and thanks for the input. |
| 2011-01-21 11:00:14 |
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It wasn't meant to be realistic. That's the beauty of fantasy. Some people fantasize about flapping their arms and flying. I guess that's pretty realistic. Perhaps I should have had the boys fly around fucking each other. What's reply he can live up to 240??? mean. I am glad you enjoyed the story. Sincerely, Retard |
| 2011-01-21 16:26:02 |
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Great story. I enjoyed it immensely. You got a positive vote on that one. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-04-30 23:35:13 |
Susie's Introduction |
Hey Ghost. I haven't had the opportunity to read all your stories yet, but will soon. Your writing style is definitely different from mine, but cool. Try putting two empty lines between your paragraphs and then the format on this site will give you paragraphs. |
| 2011-05-02 11:34:00 |
Total Confusion Part One |
You are absolutely right. It is disgusting. It is supposed to be. Thanks for the wonderful comment. I don't understand the bad speller part. Perhaps you read the wrong story? If you like stories about two boys eating each other's shit, read on. |
| 2011-05-06 09:01:04 |
Suzy's Introduction Part 2 |
Both of these are great. I know we touched on this earlier, but fourteen is just too old to have a naturally bald tiny little hole with itty bitty titties. The girl you described is more like ten, but then again, it is your story. Bon apitite! |
| 2011-05-06 09:24:29 |
Ranch Life Part 1 |
Hey Dude. If this part only has a little sex, then part two will be rocking when I read it. Good job writing. Are you telling the truth about these being your first sex stories? I like the idea of passing a fifteen year old off as being an early bloomer and not knowing what sex is. That was hilarious. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-05-06 09:46:26 |
Ranch Life Part 2 |
Sorry about the anonymous comment, but this site has a habbit of logging me off in the middle of writing them. Don't stop writing. You're going to be really good. |
| 2011-05-08 00:00:49 |
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Hey Doc. A lot of the stuff in my stories doesn't exist. It might at some time in the future. Who knows. Right now I make it up to sound cool. That's why they call it fantasy. Thanks for the tid bit we all know anyway. For your information, it is impossible to vacuum something out from a tube which is inside the item we are vacuuming out. For that matter, you can't pick up a table no matter how light it is if you are sitting on it, unless it is fantasy. |
| 2011-05-09 00:40:53 |
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Oh, I almost forgot to mention. The prostate gland is not a "bundal" of nerves, nor is it located in the rectum. It is not a bundle of nerves either. I do so wish all the educated fuckers that insist on correcting everyone's stories would actually get a little education before opening their mouths. Maybe you should have your testicales removed, well maybe you'd prefer to call them testicles. |
| 2011-05-12 01:14:49 |
Total Confusion Part Eighteen |
Sorry, this story is 27 chapters long and does not have a recap for each chapter. If the reader starts with chapter one the story is easy to follow. Admittedly, it does skip around a little as it is supposed to be memories in the life of a young boy. |
| 2011-05-27 05:50:56 |
The New Den Mother |
Thanks for the tech info that most folks are already aware of. Unfortunately if more than about an inch is removed, the procedure is less likely to be reversed as there isn't enough vas to make the length to reconnect. Sometimes a little more is removed so the vas doesn't have to be tied which creates other medical problems. The one in the story was a total removal since the procedure was one of those that should have never been performed in the first place. |
| 2011-05-29 20:24:53 |
Alice's Trip To The Doctor~ |
Hey girl,
Try hitting enter twice between paragraphs as you write your next story. The format for this site truncates your indentations and the first blank space leaving you with the jumbled mess you have now. It makes your stories hard to read. |
| 2011-05-29 20:27:20 |
Alice's Trip To The Doctor~ |
Also, I agree with loveable guy. With a little work, this can be a fantastic story. I think you did great for your first story. I'm giving you a positive vote, so you'll have no excuse not to write part 2. |
| 2011-07-14 01:35:10 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Seven |
Here's the deal. I wasn't going to write anymore chapters in this series. They simply are not getting many reads. However, it does look like they are picking up some. If only some of the folks that are reading would give positive votes so the stories would get more exposure. I'll try writing Part 28. If it gets good response, maybe I'll do a 29. |
| 2011-07-14 01:39:25 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Seven |
To the last commenter. Yes. If you PM me an email address, I'll send you a copy of Part Twenty Six. There isn't much sex in it, but it is very personal and tells about a traumatic episode in my life I will never recover from. |
| 2011-07-21 11:48:05 |
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You are absolutely correct. It is copied from me. If you will check your source, you will see it is so. Thanks for pointing it out to me. |
| 2011-07-25 16:36:17 |
Summer Camp Part 2 |
I don't understand these saintly folks that are offended by stories about children. It's not like there are any actually in a fictional story the way they are in photographs. Besides, last time I checked, headings like boy, boy/boy, and young were dead give aways that the story is pedophile in nature. Why are these smart as "brick" people still reading them? To the fella that says we should only read adult stories. Where's your contact information Mister Anonymous? |
| 2011-07-25 16:39:36 |
Summer Camp Part 2 |
To Jackin83. This story is much much better than Part One. I loved this one. I guess the first part was a build up to the story. Next time, try putting the build up in with the exciting part all as one story. Great story. Thanks for sharing. |
| 2011-07-25 22:01:25 |
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I know you will probably never see this comment as after being confused you aren't likely to return to this story. For the benefit of the other readers, this is a twelve part story. There is no recap at the beginning of any part explaining what has already taken place. The reader merely has to read from Part One and then will understand what is going on in Part Two and so on and so on. That is if the reader is not a moron as I am sure none of you are. Thanks for reading my story. I am sorry you did not enjoy it. |
| 2011-07-26 15:48:13 |
Haley |
Yes. Very long. One doesn't need to read the original version to enjoy the story. I included it for the curious so they could see for themselves the difference between what I wrote and what was there to start with. Even so, Haley is not for someone who wants to read a one or two page quicky. I originally only meant to tweak the story for my own enjoyment. Later, it turned into a completely different story and I thought I should share it. Without of course taking away the original author's due. |
| 2011-08-05 00:36:23 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Two |
Think about it a minute. This kind of thing is in the newspaper everyday. It is all over the news every night. That little Ramsey girl had awful things done to her before she was killed right in her own home in the basement. Why do a lot of people think that if you ignore it, it will go away? The story is what these folks are calling good. Not the fact that a pedophile is after a child. I for one am damn glad the bastard didn't succeed. You didn't seem to mention that. Thanks for the comment. |
| 2011-08-12 01:18:41 |
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I love it when the English teachers leave class to profread the smut we write here. At least this one spelled everything correctly. I am not sure why he felt the need to hyphen well educated. Then again the guy you get could be educated rather than well educated. Alas, enough about the professor. I enjoyed the story immensely. Keep writing. |
| 2011-08-12 01:22:09 |
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Wow. I read both your stories. A fine job writing. Keep up the good work. I don't get these kinds of ratings. You are a much better writer than I am. Thanks for sharing. |
| 2011-08-17 23:50:28 |
Haley |
I was shooting for something that would be different than your run of the mill sex story. I believe I achieved that more than adequately. Oh, well. It is what it is. I am sorry you didn't enjoy it. I understand your feelings. Most sex stories are the same boring droll. The guy always has a dick and shoves it into the pussy that the girl always seems to have too. All they ever do is fuck. Ho hum. |
| 2011-08-18 12:09:25 |
Haley |
Its always nice to hear praise for a story, but part of constructive criticism is being able to accept the things people don't like about them too. I mention a little about scat in the story as some people like it. Why, I don't know. It never did anything for me other than make me throw up. Death is a fact. This story was meant to be heart wrenching yet turn around to have a happy ending. The characters are young, but a lot of my stories stem from my experiences as a child at which time I was young also. A story this long will most certainly contain both things you like as well as things you don't. Thank you for your unbiased opinion. |
| 2011-08-18 12:24:25 |
Haley |
One other item of note pertaining to the kids ages. The good thing about a fantasy story is none of the characters experience any pain or psychological trauma because none of them ever existed. So you don't have to worry about their well being. The ones in real stories? Trust me, they have some real shit to deal with. A true sex story about a child can be taken several ways. One of which is some pedophile can get off on its content. The other is the reader can experience the trauma the child experienced. As much as people abhor the things presented in those types of stories, it doesn't change what the child went through one iota. Sometimes its the child's way of overcoming the abuse by sharing the feelings with others. True the child may be an adult by the time the pain is diminished enough to share the story, but the fact is not many adults are willing to hear the anguish the child has to live with. Pity. |
| 2011-08-19 06:05:15 |
Haley |
I gather you've never watched a movie where there is more than one thing going on at a time. Talk about boring. I couldn't imagine a one sided story. Nothing would ever change. Yes, there are a lot of things someone can say about this story. It is definitely long, but boring? There is a big difference in being offended by the content and being bored. Apparently you don't know the difference. Hey Doc. How do you know what kind of urges a nine year old boy or girl would have? Have you been doing something inappropriate? I love hearing from all the experts on fantasy. Thanks for the wonderful comment. |
| 2011-08-19 06:15:02 |
Haley |
A quick thank you to the twenty year old girl who realized this story isn't real. For the people who haven't figured it out yet. Read the damn thing. Not much in this story could actually happen. There are no children in it. The boy didn't die and come back from the dead because he never existed. Its supposed to be a fantasy. People who read smut and then start to make up rules about what is and isn't okay is akin to the type who get put in jail for murder or robbery and then start to make rules about what is and isn't acceptable behavior for a prisoner. And yes, all of this crap we read on this site is smut. Too bad many of us don't recognize that. |
| 2011-08-23 13:09:26 |
Total Confusion Part One |
A reasonable request. I added gay to my other stories that had some. Its simply too much trouble to edit the first two. Due to the volume of stories on the site, the coordinators are swamped and it takes forever to get them put in the edit mode. Under those circumstances, I am reluctant to make minor requests of an already overburdened individual. I hope the reader understands. I am sure the coordinator does. |
| 2011-08-26 08:53:15 |
Total Confusion Part Three |
The rules have changed concerning the acceptable age limit of fictional as well as real characters for this site. I had all of my stories placed in the edit mode so I can redo them to meet the new criteria. I am trying to leave them as intact as I can. Unfortunately due to the age restrictions, I don't know how it will turn out. They all seem different to me so far. I still have the originals on my hard drive. Should anyone want a copy of any or all of them, all one needs is to PM me at the site. Leave an email address and I'll send them to you. |
| 2011-09-02 00:20:28 |
Total Confusion Part Four |
Parts one, two, and three are in the fantasy genre. You can click on the kenny1kenny at the top of the page which will show you all four parts. |
| 2011-09-22 11:31:51 |
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I am enjoying your story. I am presently starting Chapter Two. Just to let you know, while I see a lot of what I would call spelliing errors, I realize the British spellings for the same words are different. Taking that into account, I don't even know for sure which are correct and which aren't. What I am saying is it doesn't really matter as long as it is close enough to tell what you are saying without using an interpreter. We all make some mistakes anyway. Even in grammar. By the way. The part about being so excited about getting the job. Stretching out finding the phone in the middle of the night and all from the perspective of a fifteen year old is genius. Unless of course you are really fifteen. Enough said. Let me get back to your story. |
| 2011-09-22 17:08:40 |
The New Den Mother |
The repost was done strictly to comply with the new rule that characters in the stories cannot be younger than sixteen. I liked the original version better. I kept the story as intact as possible, but even I feel that they are no longer the same. Sorry to those fans that like em young. For everyone's benefit, all of my stories are being reedited for the same reason. Its either repost with the changes or risk being banned from the site. |
| 2011-09-23 22:50:33 |
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The question marks only show up when viewing your own stories in the view mode in the your stories section. Go to the authors list. View your stories there. I assure you, you will not see the question marks there. |
| 2011-09-27 22:02:33 |
Total Confusion Part Twelve |
Thank you for your heartfelt opinion. Yes the story has a lot of what you call changes. It is a compilation of memories about the characters abuse. The story is also about 28 chapters long. Some of which are quite a bit longer than others. I tried to separate the thoughts with a series of *************** as much as possible to let the reader know they were either a different chain of thought or a separate time frame. I still respect your observation. I also agree that the story is hard to believe. Anyone else have a take on it? |
| 2011-09-28 11:06:18 |
Total Confusion Part Two |
I couldn't agree more. On both counts. The counciling was very helpful. It allowed me to understand that what was done to me was wrong. I thought it was something everyone experienced but kept secret. Yes, it was awful. When you read this series, put yourself in Kenny's position. Then you'll understand what the story is all about. One more point. This story is over. It can't be changed, nor can it be undone. It had to be told a little different due to the nw rules. The characters are older here than they were when the story took place, but we have to follow the rules. It is a bad thing, but sticking ones head in the sand and pretending it didn't happen by saying don't write this shit won't make this kind of thing not happen. Total Confusion is a true story. I put it in fantasy because I mixed the facts between the characters. It all happened, but not necessarily in the order it is written. Keep in mind that all of my other series belong in the fantasy genre as they are all made up. |
| 2011-09-29 09:50:27 |
Total Confusion Part Thirteen |
Relax. True there wasn't much about David in this chapter. He'll show his ugly head soon. You'll get all the David you want. Personally, I've had enough of the bastard. Now its your turn. |
| 2011-09-30 12:21:54 |
Linda Lou And The Crew |
To the nice pervert complaining about the non girl girl action as posted up top. I don't see any girl girl action posted there. Its female girl.
Also as far as being pedophile, thats in your head. I told you straight uo all characters in my stories are of legal age. Read the story. No mention is made of them being ten or twelve or sixteen for that matter.
Get your mind out of the gutter my man. As far as having what is advertised, this story has many more chapters than what you've seen. I promise it will deliver as advertised.
I'll probably even through in a little girl girl action, although I can't understand why a fine upstanding fellow like you with such high morals would be looking for a story involving two girls. Of age or not.
Go figure. By the way, I do appreciate your comment. I just don't agree with it. Thanks again. |
| 2011-09-30 12:27:22 |
Linda Lou And The Crew |
You did good. You got me so riled up I missed a typo with uo instead of up. Then I left through in place of throw. I guess that puts us in the same boat as far as spelling and grammar. Thanks again dude. |
| 2011-09-30 12:30:33 |
Linda Lou And The Crew |
Sorry about the cancer part. Unfortunately older sis had to go in order for Uncle Matt to end up with the girls. I thought that might be a gentle way of letting her go. I hope you understand. Thanks for reading. |
| 2011-10-10 10:31:04 |
Linda Lou And The Crew Part Two |
I can't argue with you the story contains sex with a dead body. I didn't put it in the tags as the type of folks that get off on that type of story would want to know why I included it. Look at what is going on. The guy's darling sisterpassed away in the middle of seeing her life long dream of making love with her brother come true. You the reader are supposed to feel his anguish between letting her down by not keeping his promise or doing the unthinkable to complete his promise to her. |
| 2011-10-30 22:14:13 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 1) |
I disagree with the reader who says all eleven year olds are much more mature than you projected Issy to be. While its true a lot of them cuss and know a lot about sex, those pretty much tend to fuck anything that will stick a dick in them. Eleven year olds are reluctant to curse around adults, especially when they like that preson.
If you actually take the time to talk about sex with the average eleven year old girl, you'll be amazed at how much she either has confused or just plain doesn't know. Keep Issy like she is Dude. You're doing great. |
| 2011-11-03 01:36:31 |
The New Den Mother Part Two |
You can relax. I am presently working on Part Three. I will have it out as soon as possible. The delay is I am re-editing all of my previous stories. Each needs to be added slowly so they can be burped into the system without the bad rating gods devouring them too bad. |
| 2011-11-04 13:03:44 |
To be an Assassin |
Great story. If the next is as good, I'll read them all. |
| 2011-11-05 11:57:15 |
The Scout Trip |
Thanks for the lovely comment. Unfortunately you seem to have pedophile on your mind. The story mentions no such character. I don't see any reference to any ten, twelve, or even sixteen year olds. All I saw was a guy that's really small and under developed. He even thinks of himself as a little boy, though he never said how old. Too bad you can't read the story for what it is rather than what you dream it to be. |
| 2011-11-06 10:45:01 |
To be an Assassin (2) |
Wow. You write really well. I only hope I do as well at some point. |
| 2011-11-08 11:35:07 |
To be an Assassin (3) |
Keep it up. This is a great story. It has a lot of twists and lots of things going on at the same time. I like that. |
| 2011-11-09 02:00:31 |
To be an Assassin (4) |
I love your writing style. You know that it isn't always necessary to delve into detail with an event for it to be great. Just like the ritual. The reader knows that it is an awesome event. It becomes more so by the fact you don't describe it.
The deal about Assassin's Creed, well, you said you wrote your own stuff. The quality of your writing skills makes me believe you. I never read that other story anyway, so I could give a shit.
I don't know why you keep apologizing for your grammar mistakes. It would take an English professor to find them. Not many of the dumb bastards that attack author's writings here know any of those.
Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading your stuff. I wish I could write as well as you do. You are an awesome author. |
| 2011-11-09 04:00:53 |
Incest Is Best |
To not my cup of tea. What the fuck are you looking for? |
| 2011-11-09 23:38:11 |
I couldn't think of a title |
Wonderful. I liked the way you made the story rough as a rape then turned it into a romantic love story in the end. Bravo on a job well done. |
| 2011-11-09 23:55:19 |
I couldn't think of a title |
When is I Couldn't Think Of a Title Part Two coming out. Or maybe you could call it Just Another Nother Sex Story.
I know its hard to follow up on a good thing. It would be difficult to make the sequel as interesting as the original, but I know you are up to it.
Sorry, I haven't read Just Another Sex Story yet, but I did glance in long enough to find it is a revision of the earlier story.
What little I did read appears to be more concise, making it a smoother read. I will read it soon. Thanks for posting this great story. |
| 2011-11-10 03:28:13 |
Just Another Sex Story |
I liked the re-write better than the original, which I assume was the reason you did it to start with. The detail you added made it all the more exciting. I didn't understand why someone said the sex could have been more elaborate. You described the sex scenes vividly and erotically without making it so long that the reader would tire of it. Again, your writing style is superb. Nothing like mine. Which is something you should be happy about. |
| 2011-11-10 13:28:40 |
Werewolf Sex |
Great story. I'm not into werewolf stuff, but you made it interesting enough to give it a go. Yeah, its definitely a rough draft. I can only imagine what it will be like when you fine tune it someday. Well, on to Part Two. Tomorrow that is. |
| 2011-11-10 23:13:00 |
Werewolf Sex (2) |
Superb story. Keep up the good work. Another thing I like about the way you write is you are quite literate. There are very few spelling mistakes. The ones that are there are still readible. Not that all that matters, but it is nice to read someone's stuff when it is obvious they have some education. |
| 2011-11-10 23:16:12 |
Werewolf Sex (2) |
See what I mean. Readible, readable. What does it matter. Well, actually there are a lot more mistakes in my stories than in yours. I guess I just don't have the patience you have. |
| 2011-11-13 00:07:55 |
Muse (1) |
Nice story. Great build up of characters. I was going to inquire about Lisa and Kate, but read the comments first, so there is no need. You definitely have a flair with words. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-11-14 00:46:31 |
To be an Assassin (5) |
Just wanted to let you know that last comment was mine. The damn thing logged me out right in the middle of writing it. I've always hated the anonymous writer. Especially the ones that want to bash you and then don't have the balls to admit it. Congrats on the 100% rating. I've never made better than 8 votes fefore they bashed me. Keep up the great work. |
| 2011-11-14 18:29:33 |
Werewolf Sex (3) |
Pretty cool. Its a shame you don't plan to finish it. Perhaps in time you will change your mind. If not, I'll just settle to read your other stories. |
| 2011-11-19 00:49:44 |
Monoshifter's Saga- Teacher's Pet |
I started reading this story a few days ago. Not really having a clue what a monoshifter is, I got bored with all the were-this and the were-that. So I quit reading.
Later, under the guise of being fair, I did some research. Your story, Army Tragedy described monoshifters enough to give me at least a hint of what is going on.
I re-read this story with a different perspective. As usual, you proved that you are an exceptional writer. I enjoyed the concept immensely. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-11-19 01:13:33 |
Monoshifters Saga- Army Tragic |
Great story. Very heart wrenching. |
| 2011-11-19 23:35:09 |
Monoshifters Saga- Teacher's Pet |
Everyone is eagerly anticipating Maren getting a session with Ivy. Too bad you aren't going to give her that thrill. I'll bet you could give the scene a little pizzazz. I love your stories. |
| 2011-11-20 17:28:03 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Seven |
You say the shitting part made you vomit for real. Bravo. We have something in common. It made me throw up for real too, only I wasn't reading a story. Trust me, you have no idea what it means to throw up.
I guess you also have something in common with David. He liked to fuck me too, in my gross cunt. Thanks for the comment. |
| 2011-11-20 22:24:29 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Two |
Yeah, somewhat. Kenny survived without killing himself to write the damn thing. |
| 2011-11-20 22:29:25 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty One |
I don't know for sure if she ever did as I lost touch after they moved away. Yes, a lot of parents are fucked up. Mine weren't, but some of my friends' definitely were. Thank you for being truly sorry. |
| 2011-11-20 22:41:07 |
The New Den Mother Part Two |
Sorry to my many fans. Part Three is going to take a little longer than I had hoped. I have two more series to finish editing before I can concentrate properly on it. I will work on Part Three after I finish The Bastard Bitch and Be My Little Bitch. I promise. |
| 2011-11-25 00:42:35 |
Furre Fuck Flick |
Wow. I like the way you captured the way a woman feels about doing her dog the first time. The hesitation and the burning desire. Not wanting him and yet having to have him at the same time. And the brother scene was hot. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-11-25 23:27:45 |
Furre Fuck Flick 2: Captive |
Alas, I am confused. I thought you were feeling cruel yet you wrote this sweet story where the guy is going to give her some of her own medicine. Perhaps you were intending on being cruel by discontinuing the series. Yes that must be it. Great story as usual. |
| 2011-11-27 03:33:48 |
The Rat and the Dragon |
Don't get me wrong. I love all of your stories. Even the were this stories I mentioned before. But it seems so strange. The stories I like the best seem to be rated much lower than the ones that I liked less. Maybe I just don't have the same tastes the majority of folks on the site seem to have.
This one really impressed me. I loved the way you had Roan and Cyl play the cat and mouse game taking advantage of each others mistakes. That was so cool. The sex scene was very well done also. Very exciting without being vulgar. I am going to read part 2 soon.
Keep rocking with the great stuff. You make me envious with your writing skills. I wish I could write half as good. My ratings suck compared to yours. |
| 2011-11-28 00:17:19 |
The Rat and the Dragon 2 |
Your writing just keeps getting better and better. Where do you get all these wonderful characters? The story line is fascinating. Keep grinding them out girl. |
| 2011-11-29 00:04:19 |
The Rat and the Dragon (3) |
Absolutely amazing story. The sex was fantastic. Every detail of the plot had me yearning for the next. You have a way with words that is unrivaled. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-11-29 12:24:44 |
Roscrow's Entertainment |
That was cool. The way you hinted that there were others staying in the dorm room without actually mentioning it. The fact they could have been caught at any moment and yet Roscrow was seemingly in no hurry. In the end, they were only moments away from being caught. Yes, you are an absolutely fantastic writer. I wish I had a quarter of the talent and imagination you have. I get jealous of your seemingly endless ideas and your special way of making words sing. Keep it up. |
| 2011-11-29 14:01:37 |
Piper Girls: Babysitting Bree |
First, I use Microsoft Works Word Processor to write my stories. To get paragraph separation to show up on the XNXX site, I have to hit the ENTER button twice. The site still truncates the indentation at the beginning of the paragraph, but at least there is some separation.
This makes the story easier on the eyes and makes it easier to keep ones place while reading.
The title is eye grabbing as I glanced at it and was curious to see what it is about. The story itself was interesting. It has an awesome potential for excitement. The flow needs a little work.
Keep writing. For a first shot at writing a sex story, I'd say you're on your way. |
| 2011-11-29 14:06:04 |
Piper Girls: Babysitting Bree |
It looks like you need some positive votes. Sorry, I couldn't help you. I am already voted out for the day. Just wanted you to know, if I'd had any left, the story warranted a positive. |
| 2011-11-29 22:58:53 |
Preteen Life |
Its a damn shame there isn't going to be a part 2. I agree that 4 years is a ton of age difference at 12. So is six years for a fifteen year old. Fifteen year old girls have a hell of a lot more maturing to do than a twenty one year old.
The 21 year old shouldn't brag too much about his fifteen year old girl friend. He could spend a long time in jail.
The actual fact is none of it matters. The author already admits to having sex with her six year old sister and 16 year old boyfriend at 12. She was obviously very curious about her body at the time. One wonders if maybe there is more to the story. Perhaps Daddy or an Uncle. Since she was so fond of pussy, maybe an Aunt or a teacher.
Give her a break, you don't expect her to change her memories just to qualm your sexual hangups do you? |
| 2011-11-29 23:05:37 |
Preteen Life |
I believe the part I liked the best was He was gentle about it. He charged his penis into my pussy and my body hopped up in shock and a scream escaped my lips. Its a good thing he was gentle. I'd hate to have imagined what would have happened if he'd been rough with her.
It must be genetics. For some reason all the 16 year olds on this site have 8 inch dicks. |
| 2011-11-30 03:51:19 |
Riding the Ponies I: Intro Lesson |
My first clue that the rider was a girl was when she found out what all the other girls thought of riding a horse.
My congratulations to the author for so convincingly potraying what I perceive as the emotions of a woman enjoying her first ride and her first relations with her dog.
I figure she was alluding to wishing she could lick the dogs nuts rather than her own. If the author treats us to an encore, she may very well do so. Of course I haven't looked yet to see if he already has.
Bravo dude on a job well done. Keep up the good work. I'll read the rest of them. You are a much better writer than I. |
| 2011-12-01 11:08:31 |
Addicted to oral sex |
Awesome story. Your style is much better than mine. I wish I could write as well. Keep up the good work. |
| 2011-12-01 11:25:55 |
Fascinated with hypnotism |
That was cool. I wanted to do that to my sister too, except I don't have one. Great fantasy. Keep em rolling. |
| 2011-12-01 17:47:48 |
Fascinated with Hypnotism- Chapter Two |
Another masterpiece. I haven't read many of your stories, but if they are all as good as the last two I read, you can bet your bippy I'll read them all.
When I finally grow up and become an adult, I hope I write half as good as you do. Two things will prevent that. I'll never grow up and who could ever write that good. |
| 2011-12-01 17:57:14 |
Fascinated with hypnotism- Chapter Three |
That was great. Too bad you are ending it there. Its got a lot of twists and turns left in it. If it were my story, I'd milk it for everything its worth. But then thats why you get more reads than I do. |
| 2011-12-01 22:48:52 |
A Brother's recollection-Chapter One |
I would have liked it a little more if Janice had reluctantly given in slowly to everything instead of merrily volunteering, but then that's just my opinion.
We have a very different approach to our writing styles. I love the story. It is still a dick raising story the way you tell it. On to the next. |
| 2011-12-01 23:00:12 |
A Brother's Recollection-Chapter Two |
Well, a little bit of guilt is almost the same thing. You still made me want a blow job from your sister, especially if she's going to do it like that. I would read another, but I have a story to work on if I ever want to get it posted. |
| 2011-12-02 14:29:08 |
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I like the way you capture the young girl's emotions. I can feel her desire as well as her hesitation. Reading this lets me understand how young girls fall so quickly to the temptation to do it with older guys. Awesome story. You put me to shame. Thanks for sharing. |
| 2011-12-30 14:08:30 |
Haley |
Actually, there are two reasons for the revision. First, the rules on the XNXX site have changed so that any stories involving sex with minors under the age of 16 will be systematically deleted as they are reported.
Second, Haley was much too long to be on this site as one lump. Therefore I have divided it into probably ten or twelve parts. Not sure yet how many. It will take a while to get the rest of it edited. I still have the original on my hard drive should anyone desire a copy. |
| 2012-01-02 08:48:31 |
Total Confusion Part Twenty Seven |
Sorry about entering my last comment as anonymous. I'll never get used to this site logging me out as I am typing. Oh well. It's part of the fun. |
| 2012-01-05 01:11:40 |
Total Confusion P1 |
I enjpyed your story. I especially liked the title. Very original. I think you should keep writing. You can bet I'll read your other story as soon as I leave here. One thing. If you write more, shorten your paragraphs. It makes the story easier on the eyes.
Go with no more then about five lines. Also keep in mind this site truncates the indentations of your paragraphs. I have to hit the enter key twice on my word processor to get this site to show a separation in the paragraphs.
Keep up the good work. |
| 2012-01-05 01:25:51 |
Dream Come True |
Hopefully you won't have writers block for too long. You are welcome to read my stories and take whatever ideas you like to expand on.
I most certainly won't mind. I like to see beginning writers broaden their horizons. As far as you being gay. Have fun and try not to catch something that will make you a little deader than you want to be in the near future.
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| 2012-01-05 11:08:12 |
Genie Chronicles |
Really great story so far. Too bad you didn't write it. Wonder what gives with the ass hole and the I hate Indians bit? Oh, well. Welcome to the site. I noticed your stories when you blew past me on the author's list. Way to go girl. |
| 2012-01-08 05:47:36 |
The Bastard Bitch Part One |
Thank you for your evaluation of my story. You seem to have as open a mind as you do an attention span. If I only read the first couple of paraagraphs of a story to decide if I liked it, I wouldn't read much either. Thanks again, for what it's worth. Note, I only made the comment one paragraph. I didn't want to lose your interest. |
| 2012-01-21 19:28:57 |
True Face Of Love. |
Cool poem. Too bad most poems don't fair so well on this site. I guess perverts just aren't poetic. Keep writing poems if you feel like doing it. If ratings to get people to read your stories is what you are after, give up the poems. They didn't like mine either. |
| 2012-01-21 19:57:05 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter (Part 3) |
My congratulations. Your stories are fantastic. You are getting excellent ratings as well as picking up reads. I think it is cool the way you keep little Issy fairly innocent while at the same time making it obvious she is enjoying what is being done to her by asking for more. Keep it up. I am going to read all three part 4's and then the rest of the story. You are already a great writer. |
| 2012-01-21 23:07:14 |
The Babysitter, The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 4) |
This story is exciting, but only if the reader hadn't gotten to know Issy as an innocent sweet darling that only recently was introduced to the joys of sex.
It may have been a little easier to take after Steven butt fucked her and maybe introduced her to one of the young boys in the neighborhood that he had taken a shine to.
You hinted that Steven might like doing it with another boy by stating he thought the blonde boy's cum tasted sweet. Breaking the story into paragraphs would have made it easier to read.
I lost my place many times and had to back track to find where I was. Still, knowing how young girls can be, seducing the boy on a public bus isn't all that far out. Too bad many other voters didn't see it that way. |
| 2012-01-21 23:59:55 |
The Babysitter, The baby takes care of the sitter. (Part 4 [REPOST]) |
Much easier read with the paragraphs, but you really should shorten them to no more than five or six lines. Still enjoyed the story. |
| 2012-01-22 01:04:14 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 4 NEW] |
Great story. That was a lot more like the Issy we have all become fond of. I am moving eagerly to part 5. Don't worry about writing more emails to get your stories deleted. The coordinators are swamped with requests and will eventually get to yours. |
| 2012-01-22 01:47:28 |
The Babysitter: The baby takes care of the sitter [Part 5] |
Amazing use of the imagination. The swat thing was a little much, but at the same time was brilliant as the reader certainly wasn't expecting it. I enjoyed the entire series. Keep up the good work. I am eagerly waiting to see if you can top it with your next. |
| 2012-01-26 00:51:35 |
Total Confusion P1 (EDITED) |
Great story. Hopefully you'll start getting some votes. Sorry I'm all out for today. I use Microsoft Works Word Precessor to write my story. It cuts down on my spelling mistakes through its spell checker. It will even highlight grammar mistakes if you set it up to do so. Proof reading will eliminate many of the others. It may not pick up on the misuse of words like your when you meant you're and so on. Keep up the good work. I am looking forward to part two. Don't fret about the low rating. you only have 1 negative so far. It will turn around. |
| 2012-01-28 17:50:21 |
You Can Suck Too |
Thank you for your heartfelt comment. While I agree with you that the average penis size for a man is nowhere near the nine or ten inches a lot of authors give their characters, and perhaps some of them get a little carried away with the spurting, the stories are meant to excite the reader. Or at least amuse him..
Bottom line is if I used your formula, that story would go something like this: I sat in the chair at the front of Mrs. Habberdashers whorehouse patiently waiting for my next dick. I am the blow job boy. I suck em all. I am getting ready to suck this dude who's hung like a horse. He has a huge five and a half inch dick.
Usually all I get is five. I'll probably gag on it, if he doesn't drown me with the teaspoon full of cum he just dribbled onto my tongue. I love it when they get so excited.
Yeah. I'd read that for sure. |
| 2012-01-29 09:45:01 |
You Can Suck Too |
Oh. I almost forgot to ask. What the hell are you stuffing your olives with? |
| 2012-02-07 11:25:06 |
Haley Part Two |
When you say she sounds selfish and childish, I assume you are refering to her not wishing to share her Daddy with anyone by having them live in the house. When one parent passes on, it is a normal reaction for the child to cling to the remaining parent. Not wanting to share that parent's attention with some stranger living in the home.
I am not sure that makes someone particularly selfish. As far as being someone that can never be happy or cannot be pleased by anyone, I believe Haley is quite happy and pleased by her Father's presence.
It will be apparent later in the story that Haley is far from being selfish. My intent had been to show Haley's love for her Father. I can see from your point of view that it is possible for someone to interpret it differently. Thank you for pointing it out for me.
I ask the reader to remember when reading this that Haley is supposed to be a sweet, caring, loving person, and perhaps somewhat naive about sexual things. |
| 2012-02-07 11:32:46 |
Haley Part Two |
One other question about your comment. Let her go? Let her go where? I assume you are implying a father should expel his only daughter form his life because she loves him so much she dotes over him.
You have a strange outlook on life. I am glad you were not one of my parents, though I would probably have still been okay because I didn't dote over my Dad. Well, not quite like Haley.
I still appreciate the comment and welcome others as well. |
| 2012-02-08 13:26:20 |
Total Confusion Part Eleven |
Wow. I feel for you. That has to be hard to take. Still, I am somewhat confused. Maybe you can explain how it relates to this story? I'd love to know. |
| 2012-02-13 23:38:29 |
Haley Part Two |
To informative but not convincing, what is it you wanted to be convinced of? The daughter loves her father in more ways than one. The father is slowly finding he loves her the same. What is missing is Part 3. The chapters are not stand alone stories. One needs to read them all as each builds on the other. I will be working on Part 3 soon. |
| 2012-03-01 16:59:26 |
Camping cousins part 1 |
In defense of the author, he used a lot of paragraphs. He wasn't aware that this site drops the indentations and to actually get a separation, one needs to hit enter twice.
I agree that the story was way too short. Thankfully short, or I would never have managed to finish reading it. From the looks of things, there will likely never be a part 2. Pity, it would have to have been an improvement. |
| 2012-03-01 17:30:34 |
Camping and losing it with my cousin |
Obviously from the comments and number of readers, the story is well liked. As to it being a true story, many young cousins experimented with sex as they grew up.
Some started at a young age. Others realized an attraction during puberty when hormones were raging and bodies were changing.
I wanted to marry a certain one of my second cousins something fierce. Alas as much as I loved her, it was illegal to marry her, so we never hooked up permanently. We still get together for a fling from time to time and each is like gold. I cherish every moment with her.
The story could have been much better with a spell checker and the use of a little grammar. Some different adjectives would have kept me from 'convulsing' through the whole story. Otherwise, I enjoyed the story as well. |
| 2012-03-01 17:38:25 |
so mean cuzin |
Sorry dude. I read the 'True Story' claim, then I read the first paragraph about your nine year old high school girl cousin. I was finished at that point. |
| 2012-03-17 12:22:53 |
Haley |
Part 2 is already out. I am working on Part 3, but am presently experiencing a little writer's block. Don't worry, it usually doesn't last long. |
| 2012-04-06 10:30:19 |
Sex Education [Part 1] |
Hey Cuddles. Sorry. That last comment was mine. I got kicked out again just after sending. |
| 2012-04-23 15:43:17 |
Haley Part Three |
To predictable. Yes, you are correct. Daddy eventually gives in to what Haley wants. I guess it is predictable, but if he didn't, alas there would be no story. I tried to make up for it by making it a little bit less predictable with what Haley asks for. |
| 2012-04-24 22:40:30 |
Haley Part Four |
Thanks for the wonderful comment. I try hard. Actually I was well trained as a kid on how to do these things. Hopefully you will find a place to read some stories with high morals. I usually look on a smut site first. I guess I am not the only fucked up person on here after all.
I am glad you enjoyed the story. I assume this means you gave me the negative vote. Thank you for that as well. If you really enjoy hard core mean nasty shit, read some of my other stories. This one was a nursery story compared to some of the others. |
| 2012-04-24 23:18:32 |
Neighbor kids, part 1 |
Oh yeah. I read this one from when you posted it originally. I loved it then and I still do. Absolutely fantastic story. Keep em coming. |
| 2012-04-24 23:39:09 |
Neighbor kids, part 2 |
This story is getting hotter as it goes. You have a winner here. I wish I could write that well. Rock on. |
| 2012-04-25 00:00:36 |
Neighbor kids, part 3 |
What can I say? It does my heart good to find someone to give me a run for my money in the fucked up department. But, I bet I'll beat you. |
| 2012-04-27 23:11:23 |
Haley Part Six |
Dear Professor Porno. While its true most eight year old girls aren't equipped to become pregnant, much younger girls can and do have orgasms.
If you kept your ears open instead of your mouth, you would know that eight year olds not only talk that way at times, but think that way as well.
When I was a young boy, I was forced to bring some young girls to orgasm. Thus I know they can do so. I have also had some chilling conversations with those same girls. So don't tell me what they won't think.
You are right about one thing, we are both adults so we can't and won't do anything with an eight year old. Pity you can't tell the difference between an eight year old girl and a story you already knew was about underage fictitious characters.
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| 2012-04-28 05:55:55 |
Haley Part Four |
Thanks for asking. Read my Total Confusion series. It is a compilation of journals containing memories about my childhood.
There isn't much in it that's pleasant, but its what I had to deal with. I put it on the site originally so I could share my pain and heal some.
Now I realize some folks get off on what was my trauma. I guess that's okay, but what hurts is most people can't handle hearing it when they know its true.
It is also the inspiration for some of my other works that are otherwise entirely fiction. |
| 2012-05-02 10:04:55 |
Haley Part Six |
I couldn't have put it better myself. Don't worry, you don't have long to wait. By the way, this story has already been written except the last chapter. I'll write it as soon as I finish uploading the other chapters. If you feel anything goes in fantasy, you should love this story.
It is sad in some spots to allow the reader to feel the hurt and anguish of the characters, then happy in the ending to elate the reader. A word of warning, even though this story has a happy ending, not all of my stories do. |
| 2012-05-13 00:31:10 |
Too Young To Die |
I am truly glad you thought it was sick. It most certainly was supposed to be. Some of the folks on the site actually seemed to enjoy it. When shit like this shows up in the papers, nobody seems to care.
The little boy or girl it was done to cares. Sex with children isn't always as glamorous as some folks on this site make it out to be. Is it? You are a good man or woman as the case may be. Keep up the good work. |
| 2012-05-13 02:57:24 |
Haley Part Three |
One more comment for predictable. First, I am glad you are enjoying my writing. I appreciate your telling me so. Just so you'll know. If you can predict any of the stuff coming up in this series, you are good. Enjoy and thanks again for your support. |
| 2012-05-13 03:03:23 |
Haley Part Three |
To friends please. Many little girls get fucked at their friend's house during sleepovers. Sometimes it's by their friend's Dad. I've been around it enough as a kid. Usually if they are busting you too, it ain't all that big a secret when the little girl becomes a temptation to Daddy. |
| 2012-05-15 02:04:34 |
We Started As Friends |
I really enjoyed this. It is so difficult to get a poem rated near 90%. I could never do better than about 78 with the one I posted. The one poem at better than 90 isn't a poem at all. It is even more difficult to get many reads. After finding this gem, I simply must read more of your poems. Keep up the great work. |
| 2012-05-15 16:53:18 |
Getting A Raise (From The Boss's Wife) |
I see folks complaining about you using less shall we say intrusive words in an old fashioned way. Some say there isn't enough sex and the story is too short.
Bullshit. You wrote a fine story. I felt like I was getting to know the characters. The sex was just right, especially for two people who just met.
A story doesn't have to be obscene to be sexy. It doesn't have to have somebody huffing and puffing and panting while they are coming continuously to be good.
Heck, 90% of the folks who voted thought it was worth a positive vote. With a hundred stories already posted on the site, I don't need to tell you to keep doing your own thing. |
| 2012-05-16 00:30:07 |
Olivia's Ordeal |
I am surprised. No comments on this one. I liked it. Definitely different from what I've seen. You just might have a slight mean streak in you. I guess we'll see. |
| 2012-05-16 00:42:14 |
Morning In The Park |
Great fantasy. Thanks for sharing. Keep em rocking. |
| 2012-05-16 01:00:55 |
Dream Job (Everyman's Fantasy) |
Cool. I wasn't disappointed. It would have been too predictable to have let the guy have all those pretty young lasses. Great ending. I must be dreaming. |
| 2012-05-16 01:27:17 |
Bang You Hard |
I'm new to reading your stories as yet, but so far you manage to amuse me. I love your stories. I wish I had your imagination. Keep writing. |
| 2012-05-16 01:30:54 |
Pete And Joe Get Laid (Second Stab At Humor In Sex) |
I haven't read this one yet, but trust me, it's next. I just wanted to comment on how much easier it is on the eyes reading your stuff now that you don't have the 40 and 50 line paragraphs. I'll comment when I get back to reading. |
| 2012-05-16 15:32:10 |
Pete And Joe Get Laid (Second Stab At Humor In Sex) |
That was funny. Funny and good. Only thing I didn't like about it was the ending. To me it just didn't fit the story, but that's probably just me. |
| 2012-05-16 15:53:22 |
Carnival Knowledge |
Nice romantic interlude. |
| 2012-05-17 12:07:50 |
Too Young To Die |
I am sorry you couldn't get interested in the story. It is difficult to hit all the tags. I guess I just didn't look at being raped and tortured by a psychotic killer as being gay. Especially when you are a young innocent boy. Thanks for the advice. |
| 2012-05-17 13:02:29 |
Clubhouse |
Once again, you prove your writing skills and imagination. I was a little disappointed that Bunny Girl went from a barely Hello girl to popping her head between the dude's legs with virtually no build up, but then it is your fantasy. After all, you did list it as fiction. Great story. |
| 2012-05-17 13:16:24 |
Beginner's Meeting, A Play (Third Stab At Humor) |
That was hilarious. Thanks. |
| 2012-05-17 13:37:49 |
Book Signing |
Very original as are all your stories. I wish I could write with such enthusiasm. |
| 2012-05-17 18:36:44 |
Sex Education [Part 2] |
Comments and praise, comments and praise, and comments and praise. There, you have motivation to write more. All kidding aside, this is getting hotter and hotter.
I am not sure why some folks are wanting Sam to decide between Lil and Leo. Since Sam is experimenting right now learning about sex and has just learned what a pussy can do for her, I would think she will enjoy both equally.
Besides, at her age and given the school she is in and your imagination, I doubt Lil and Leo will be the only decision she has to make.
Again, you are one writing fucker. As usual, I am envious of your success and wish you to continue in it. |
| 2012-05-20 08:50:31 |
Haley Part Three |
Haley Part 4,5,6,and 7 are out already. Part 8 should be ready in a week or so. If you have trouble finding them, either click on kenny1kenny at the top of the story or look me up in the author's list. If you click ratings first then I will be on the first page. The stories are there. |
| 2012-05-20 09:08:10 |
Too Young To Die |
Thanks for the nice comment. I am happy you were interested enough to finish reading it. Not all of my stories end in tragedy. Many end quite happily. Some allow the reader to see just what child molesting is really all about. Gives the reader a feel for what the child goes through. |