||from the intro it implies its not his. I remember it from 1stsexstories about 10 years ago
||Thanks Snow, Silent1, Jade, and HBG, I'm glad you liked it. I'm glad so many people got the references to the original Nutcracker story... I can never tell if I'm being way way too subtle or way way too heavy handed (or if possible both?? however that would work) when I put the hints in.
||I have no idea what the anonymous reader was on about... weird. thank to those who enjoyed the story though
||Amazing as always LT but that pun at the end... excellent job none-the-less
||Thank you, Glad you enjoyed it
||Thanks for the positive feedback everyone.
||THE NEW GODS 6: The Ravages of Time
||Hector, Helen, and Rex Timon wow dude thanks for your attention to detail on the names thumbs up
||Heather wore the slutty dress at the beginning... then later the guy unbuttoned her jeans. I'm probably the only one that noticed but look out for that in the future. otherwise good story
||My Beautiful Best Friend
||this was sweet. good job
||Strawberry (Chap 5)
||shouldn't a 16 year old barista be at school on a weekday morning? what the hell is lerche I looked it up and still couldn't find it? otherwise great stuff.
||The story says it was posted march 21 2011 but I know I read this and its sequels last year is this someone elses or reposting with a new account?
||SCENE IN AN ALLEY
||Amazing LT I know I say it on every one of your stories but each one is unbelievably good.
||Door to Door Sex-Girl
||jeeze dude the stuff is too long
||did you mean the first word of the second to last paragraph to be "Joe" instead of "Brendan"? It threw me off. Very good work as always
||Pussies and Boots: A Piece of Fairy Tail
||Man that was lots of fun. I kept laughing after every new reference. great job
||My Ability To Sense Minds Chapters 13
||great job as always PPRE. you are one of the true masters of this site.
||like has been said by the rest there is potential there. but if your character is a mid teen there is alot less naivete than the dialogue supposed... or conversely if you like that dialogue you have to drop the age (I\'d put it as sounding around 7-9 area)
||Choose your own adventure!!! Episode 5
||Interesting series Metropolis if you haven't tallied the votes as of yet I'd go with B. its hopefully some pretty chick ready to join in Kelly's punishment. its unlikely that the tease only annoyed guys.
||Allison and the Primdales, Part 2 Chapter 59
||you know I think I completely skipped this chapter the first time I read the series. Making the later chapters a much bigger surprise. Then again I was at the time more focused on the Jeff/Brit storyline.
||My New Neighbor's Pool
||great story welcome back
||you referenced the dildo as "her favorite vibrating dildo..." then in the same paragraph you say it was a gag gift she never had the courage to try till then. So its her favorite but never used?
||Johns Last Summer
||to joemagnum611: I agree I wasn't going for realism as much on this one... as John's character was loosely based on me, and part of it was wish fulfillment I wanted him to be a "if I knew then what I know now' kinda thing and have him say the right thing as opposed to what I did in that situation which was humiliating and certainly didn't lead to sexual relations.
I do hear ya though and I appreciate the feedback for more 'realism' in speech try my Sophie or Kellie series.
||I Cummed On Mommy's Face
||pretty good story but your characters repeating 9/10ths of what they say is a bit annoying
||Santa's Candy Cane
||I wish you would've posted this around christmas I can't get into it in July...but good story nonetheless
||Harry and Kari; Father and Daughter
||the evil anal at the end was a bit dissapointing... though it was a good story
||Daddy Loves His Daughter 1
||well its been said a bunch of times before but no 13 year old is that naive... and if she's faking and the dads a high school teacher (14-18 year olds) he knows that no 13 year old is that clueless. even if she were homeschooled.
||daddys little girl
|| I thought it was very hot.. my only complaint was that it needed a 'pregnant' tag
||PEGGY AND BRAD
||nice to see you on the story site. for those of us who don't read stories from the forums
||Daddy, My Tummy Hurts
||very nice story. as said before the first person (girl) to third person was kind of weird there was even one paragraph that was first person (dad); but it was very enjoyable.
||exceptional work. then at the end I thought wait a second. wasn't Picard raised in France not England. and now my inner nerd is arguing with my inner pervert. but both agree excellent story.
||Love at Second Sight
||Another great one DC
||An incest birthday chapter 3
||I enjoyed it, I think you need to separate the dialogue into different paragraphs. Especially when there is a three person conversation its too confusing lumped all in one. Grammar 101 stuff. A spelling and grammar check would be useful too.
I also thought there were places that needed more development, there is no transition from yard work to date, which is jarring
There is problems with driving stuff . First he says he is going to take his test at first opportunity. Then is driving on the date, and it seemed that that was the same day.
The ending as others said before was predictable but fun. look forward to part 4
||Allison and the Primdales, Part 1 Chapter 20
||aha I take back 80% of my criticism that is a crucial misreading on my part. still as I remember it sex ed classes were not even that informative. granted that it must differ state to state, school to school, and probably teacher to teacher. but hymen wasn't mentioned in my classes.
there are stories out there that go even further so your slight exaggeration doesn't even register. I read one where the school nurse put a girl on the pill the other day and about flipped my shit. once again my bad.
||WHAT TURNS ME ON
||Another great work LT. You are an amazing writer as I have said before and undoubtedly will say again.
||The Homecoming Ch. 1-3
||dammit I got up to the Dinner scene and I got hungry, I have to eat something before continuing. my mouth was watering over steak and fries when it should be watering about the women. good imagery nonetheless
||My Neighbor's Incest Part XII
||I guessed it! yes! for the win. another great story. can't wait for more