Comments from Ed Itor
|2012-05-28 22:11:33||I CAN'T RESIST MY NEIGHBOR-OR HER TEENAGE GIRLS!-2||The only thing that bothers me is the excessive use of the word 'honey' by all 3 characters. I could understand one saying it so much, maybe even 2 but all 3 is really stretching the point a bit.
Most people use it as a term of endearment to another like a pet name or this a region respectivee idiom?
I am enjoying this and hope that you don't turn it into a family orgy tale with all involved.
Have the twins find out and at first think he is forcing Kat but then realize that she Loves him and wants to help their mom by sharing for the moment. Have him and Cyn become life long lovers and Kat become a life long friend while the twins move on to their own lives with fond memories for Tony.
|2012-05-29 11:06:02||The Project||Please stop hitting enter after each sentence or so,. Write it in Word or similar program and it should catch major spelling and grammar mistakes.
The spacing makes it hard to read.
|2012-08-03 21:39:46||My Pretty Little Slaves||Do us All a favour no Capter 2, please.|
|2012-08-22 14:41:42||Together with Angela Pt3||I voted negative because including the Aunt was so predictable. You should have had them become lovers for a period of time first, then brought in others if that was your plan but no so readily/easily.
Next mommy will join and then he has a harem. Every writer here goes that way it seems. No originality.
|2012-09-03 19:13:05||Modern Mage - Chapter 14||Good spacing between the next action cycle and the last.
dathel0101, it is similar to what they do on Dr. Who when getting you ready for the next adventure cycle by explaining the whatnots of the story.