Comments from Ed Itor
|2012-02-13 12:08:26||The Teacher Fuck||Are you sure you are of age to be here? I know 12 year olds that write better.|
|2012-02-19 10:12:35||Kimmy, My Cumslut: Chapter 3 - Kimmy's Hungry Starfish||Or 3.
His wife died in a car accident and he has not come to terms with it. He has various dreams about his daughter, who is in the hospital from the same accident.
|2012-03-04 02:56:25||Sara Protective Dad Part 10||Finish it off with dr bastard and his goons getting their just deserts, have them in Colorado enjoying themselves but helping others too.
Do not let this slip into just being a sex romp, keep their adventure going.
|2012-03-05 17:11:39||Fucking Teagan||You have started a good series by not getting into sex right away, as most do.
This makes for a good story and will entitle you to become a preferred writer here if you keep it up.
Definitely a PR.
|2012-03-13 13:59:53||The Girls Next Door ? 7 CJ?s Birthday Surprise||You might want to get Amanda thinking of telling her mom that she wants to have his kids but Please, Please don't get the mother involved other than to realise that her daughter is happy and grows to be fond of our hero.
Also CJ's older sisters should be left out, unless one of them has had a crush on him since her early teens and comes home for a quick visit but realises that Amanda is his new love.