Comments from Ed Itor
|2012-01-07 11:19:08||The Clan||Spelling & Grammar errors can be lessened by using "Word" or similar program. Then Copy/Paste it for submission.
This seems like it could have become a good series but you ended it too soon. You should have been a little more forthcoming on their being chased & given more info on how their army grew by meeting certain characters and why they picked that town, etc..
|2012-01-15 23:25:08||My Neighbor's Incest Part XIX The End||It has been 2 years now since bistander left us. This series is a testament of good writing techniques and its ending, like life is never what we expect or hope for.
May the authour be having the happy ending that he looked for himself.
|2012-01-28 23:52:47||Adam 4 - Seduced by Megan's Tutor||You should keep a list of your characters' names.
This girl's name was originally Brooke while Judy was Megan's 5 foot, heavy girlfriend whom he has already fucked in Chapter 2.
It should turn out that Abby is preggers by Adam and that is why she did the girlfriends father.
|2012-02-02 16:18:41||A day of fucking two Dykes and a Tyke.||Good story although at that age Elly is no longer anywhere being near a tyke.
You have the start of a series if you want to go that route.
|2012-02-07 13:43:21||The Absolute Perfect Girl||It is layed beside me not lied.|