Comments from Ed Itor
|2013-11-19 23:43:10||The day I get a step brother. Part 1||I like to give new writers the benefit of the doubt but unfortunately for you there is no doubt that you not continue to write anything.|
|2013-11-30 00:26:36||Can We Survive I||The only thing wrong with this story is The UN involvement as it has no Army. The American Govt. would use their own army thus causing a 2nd Civil War at most. By bringing in The UN (more likely NATO) most if not all citizens would rise up against the foreign invaders, as that is how they would see them, even the U.S. Armed Forces would fight the invaders. The Yankee Govt. would be toppled very quickly because of it.
A good premise other wise though.
|2013-12-03 18:57:17||My Sexy Cousins (Part 1)||So let's get this straight you were 6 and you had an orgasm which doesn't happen in a male until he nears puberty.
You write in a constant block running words together, making it hard to read.
This story wasn't the only fantasy.
|2014-03-23 18:39:42||boy in the grass 32||"and the beat goes on" the new adventures have taken the story on when it seemed as if it was about to run out of steam. Please though no more death and keep Amy as the joy of the family without making her seem too sickening sweet.|