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| 2011-07-01 04:46:40 |
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I guess it didn't occur to me to explain why the older succubi didn't have wings. As I wrote this story my mind started to wander imagining all the aspects of the Succubi culture. I envisioned them as sort of ant/bee-hive structure and to that effect each member has specific jobs. so as they age past their prime they stop being hunter/gathers, like Scarlet and Jade, and they get relegated to ""housekeeping" tasks around the colony, they shed their wings because they don't need them anymore. little extra trivia, I envisioned their "rank" in the colony could be determined from their horns, very short means low on the hunter/gatherer totem and young (like Jade), Scarlet was older and sort of a middle rank so her horns were longer and grew straight up, the queen was obviously top dog so hers were very long and straight. And the workers were very low rank so theirs were long because of their age but they curled back.
Anyway I hope that answers your question and thanks for reading!
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| 2010-09-25 06:16:43 |
Friends Confessions. |
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...douchebag |
| 2010-09-25 06:14:53 |
Sperm Sample. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:14:02 |
Hand relief for money. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:13:09 |
Stupid Women? |
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| 2010-09-25 06:12:13 |
Tittle Your Fancy. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:10:31 |
Sex and the Church. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:10:04 |
Give my wife a baby. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:09:47 |
Giants and Midgets. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:08:47 |
Womens Night Out. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:08:31 |
Murder in Court. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:08:13 |
Panties and Gloves |
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| 2010-09-25 06:07:48 |
Prostitute Sex. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:06:59 |
Drunken Threesome? |
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| 2010-09-25 06:06:03 |
Naughty Nuns and Father David. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:05:11 |
You won't cheat on me again. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:04:23 |
Viagra Needed |
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| 2010-09-25 06:03:38 |
Taxi Home |
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| 2010-09-25 06:02:34 |
Sweet, Sweet Love. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:01:35 |
Family Only |
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| 2010-09-25 06:01:09 |
Family Only Part 2. |
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| 2010-09-25 06:00:35 |
Explanation of Cuckold. |
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| 2010-09-25 05:59:36 |
Family Only Part 3. Beth's pre night incestation. |
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| 2010-09-25 05:58:55 |
Beths Incestation |
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| 2010-08-11 04:21:13 |
The Kindergarden Blues |
Great start, but you totally skimped on the action. dont just tell us that they had alot of great sex, actually describe it! |
| 2010-03-26 04:45:04 |
Just one girl..... |
not bad for a first story, so short though. Dont be afraid to draw out the excitement, build the characters more, or have multiple sexual encounters in each story. one other thing, add an empty line between each paragraph, makes it alot easier to read. |
| 2009-11-26 05:50:45 |
Death Throes |
I'd say you got jilted pal. I've seen alot worse rated alot better on this site. True it was'nt "wack off"material, true it was nerdy as hell(no punn intended), but I'm a sucker for a well written story. At least it's different from all the incest/step-sibling crap on here. |
| 2009-11-23 05:25:30 |
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Woops, nice catch Hellkitty. that one slipped through my normally thorough proofreading process i guess lol.
oh well, sue me
JS |
| 2009-08-21 05:26:25 |
Planet in crisis |
sorry friend, there is no hope.
what "needs" to happen is about 90% of the human race dying off... no amount of commities or regulations will stop us from living beyond the carrying capacity of this planet.
nothin to do but let it all fall down then pick up the pieces, but rest assured the planet will survive. humans are nothing but an annoying parasite, when we're gone she'll heal up just fine |
| 2009-08-11 03:24:11 |
Timestop - Days 1 and 2 |
Hah! Wish I had thought of this concept: teen angst, sexual frustration, freaky powers, I love it!
I laughed, I cried, I came, good job! |
| 2009-07-16 18:19:20 |
Can't Rape the Willing |
foolish, just propogating the fantasy that the rape victim secretly wants to be raped. |
| 2009-07-11 21:23:04 |
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Thank you all for your positive feedback, it really makes me proud to know that you all like it so much. I just finished my next piece so look for more from me in the next week or so
J.S.H. |