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| 2011-10-14 20:24:40 |
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loved the story Rach. As good as you are sexy - so must be quite the story. Keep writing - looking forward to your next installment. |
| 2011-08-30 02:48:33 |
My disgusting experience with Daddy: Part 4 |
Well as usual am enjoying this series. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter! Thanx for sharing with us all. |
| 2011-08-28 20:15:59 |
My disgusting experience with Daddy: Part 3 |
Naughty - all I can say is fuck the morons that have to put their unwanted two cents worth in. You put tags on shit for a reason. If you read it then be prepared for what the writer said was there!!!
Stupidity runs rampant in this country - dont fall into it. Write the story as only you know where it is going. You are doing just fine and like all the turns and twists so far! 10 from me baby!
At least I can put my name to a reply. |
| 2011-08-28 19:51:19 |
My disgusting experience with Daddy: Part 2 |
so liking this naughty - hope it continues past chapter three! |
| 2011-08-23 03:23:23 |
My disgusting experience with Daddy: Part 1 |
yeah - will be eagerly awaiting part two! Great start - obviously as i sit here hard as a rock! |
| 2011-05-10 20:06:42 |
My step-sister Sara! |
Well for a first post that was pretty damn good. good description and had paragraphs to make it easier to read. Hell yes lets hear what happens the next morning! |
| 2011-05-10 19:53:53 |
mysterious fuck at midnight |
Love the story but yeah - have to watch the paragraphs. And you may have had them in there - from experience sometimes when you load it up on here they disappear - worse case double space the paragraphs - better to have 2 breaks than none. Definitely hope to hear more from you - indeed a sexy whore! ;) |
| 2011-03-04 22:38:43 |
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Loved the story Nicola - must have - it took me three times to read it to get the whole thing in - came too early the other two times. Thanx for sharing with us all. |
| 2011-02-23 20:16:03 |
A Rough Night Out |
Well thanx for the re-post of my work. I guess that is a form of flattery. |
| 2011-02-08 21:57:37 |
Baby-sitters Delight: Joyce |
Liked it - good start - definitely wanting a second chapter. Only complaint is to watch the spacing - makes it easier to read. |
| 2011-01-15 13:02:02 |
Can I suck your cock sir? |
great story as well as the rest of your work. Like the true story as well. Can just imagine that British acent also. Keep up the good work.
From one author to another I hope this is your material and not someone else's. If so then give credit to that person and just out it as a re-post to a story that you read that you find hot and leave it at that. |
| 2010-11-26 03:04:16 |
How Laura lost her cherry. |
This is virtually unreadable. Almost impossible to decipher what the person is trying to say. If you are going to make us fill in the blanks for how the story is supposed to go then just put in blanks and leave the bad grammar and spelling. Congratulations on the spacing though! A least it wasn't all bunched together. |
| 2010-11-23 18:31:28 |
The Physical |
A follow up exam would be a good thing. |
| 2010-11-23 18:09:54 |
An Anal Awakening |
Spacing! HAs to be one of the most common problems on this site and makes for harder reading. Story wasnt bad though. |
| 2010-11-23 18:09:43 |
An Anal Awakening |
Spacing! HAs to be one of the most common problems on this site and makes for harder reading. Story wasnt bad though. |
| 2010-11-10 22:27:21 |
a night in the woods |
Would have to say the same thing. Grammar and spacing really make a story easier to read. |
| 2010-11-10 22:25:59 |
a night in the woods |
Would have to say the same thing. Grammar and spacing really make a story easier to read. |
| 2010-11-05 22:19:35 |
My daddy made me his slave |
Whew! ... Ummmm where to start?!
OK instead of apologizing for spelling and grammatical errors take the time needed and proof read your story and fix it. Definitely need to add some more details to the story. Yes everyone likes the sex parts - but the build up to that is what makes the sex parts great!
Also watch your spacing - paragraphs are a good thing! It just makes reading your story easier. Go through several stories on here and you will see what I mean. Doesn\'t have to be mine - just browse a few. You will find examples of both.
Hope that helps as you did ask for suggestions. No vote this time just hints. Hope you continue to write and improve on your skills. Enjoy! |
| 2010-11-05 22:19:28 |
My daddy made me his slave |
Whew! ... Ummmm where to start?!
OK instead of apologizing for spelling and grammatical errors take the time needed and proof read your story and fix it. Definitely need to add some more details to the story. Yes everyone likes the sex parts - but the build up to that is what makes the sex parts great!
Also watch your spacing - paragraphs are a good thing! It just makes reading your story easier. Go through several stories on here and you will see what I mean. Doesn\'t have to be mine - just browse a few. You will find examples of both.
Hope that helps as you did ask for suggestions. No vote this time just hints. Hope you continue to write and improve on your skills. Enjoy! |
| 2010-11-05 22:19:09 |
My daddy made me his slave |
Whew! ... Ummmm where to start?!
OK instead of apologizing for spelling and grammatical errors take the time needed and proof read your story and fix it. Definitely need to add some more details to the story. Yes everyone likes the sex parts - but the build up to that is what makes the sex parts great!
Also watch your spacing - paragraphs are a good thing! It just makes reading your story easier. Go through several stories on here and you will see what I mean. Doesn\'t have to be mine - just browse a few. You will find examples of both.
Hope that helps as you did ask for suggestions. No vote this time just hints. Hope you continue to write and improve on your skills. Enjoy! |
| 2010-11-05 21:58:21 |
My daddy made me his slave |
Whew! Ummmmm ... where to start? Ok Jenna - instead of apologizing for spelling and grammatical errors - just fix them. Definitely need to expand this a bit more and write with more detail - doesnt always have to be just the sex part - the build up is what makes the sex parts good!
Also watch your spacing. Paragraphs are a good thing with a space between them - just makes for easier reading. By all means dont quit - but read some of the other stories on here and see how some of them do it. I am not saying it has to be mine - but browse through a few and you will see what everyone means. Good luck in your writing. |
| 2010-11-05 21:57:46 |
My daddy made me his slave |
Whew! Ummmmm ... where to start? Ok Jenna - instead of apologizing for spelling and grammatical errors - just fix them. Definitely need to expand this a bit more and write with more detail - doesnt always have to be just the sex part - the build up is what makes the sex parts good!
Also watch your spacing. Paragraphs are a good thing with a space between them - just makes for easier reading. By all means dont quit - but read some of the other stories on here and see how some of them do it. I am not saying it has to be mine - but browse through a few and you will see what everyone means. Good luck in your writing. |
| 2010-10-25 22:42:36 |
Kitten |
Hope that you find the time to write a second chapter to this and more. |
| 2010-10-25 22:42:03 |
Kitten |
Hope that you find the time to write a second chapter to this and more. |
| 2010-10-25 22:40:52 |
Kitten |
Hope that you find the time to write a second chapter to this and more. |
| 2010-08-08 05:04:25 |
Kaylee's Ordeal |
Hmmm so when is part two coming up? |
| 2010-08-03 23:53:09 |
Ambers First Time With Her Dog written by MorethAntwOlesstHanwHole |
nice to see you writing again Princess. ;) |
| 2010-07-27 01:04:46 |
Leather |
Hmmm would still like to make this fantasy cum true for you ... or did I?? ;) |
| 2010-07-22 17:03:39 |
And The Dog Made Three PT 10 |
Was a great story - it was from an author that has been pub |
| 2010-07-20 18:23:29 |
The Bookworm, the Dog, and Me- Part III |
well now that just takes teasing to a whole different level! |
| 2010-06-30 18:34:03 |
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A plus from me. Theshorter paragraphs was a lil different but definitely bearable. Thats the only complaint I would have - other than that - great! Very hot and hope there are further tales of Jodie's exploits! ;) |
| 2010-06-17 23:21:33 |
Late Arival |
Nice story Cija! ;) |
| 2010-06-01 18:09:47 |
A curious daughter |
Quite liked the descriptiveness of your writing - eagerly waiting for chapter two. There is a chapter two isnt there?? |
| 2010-05-17 01:06:18 |
Daddy Gives Me A Present |
Well Ann - will have to read the rest now - first one seemed just fine though! |
| 2010-05-17 00:52:09 |
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Positive from me. Quite enjoyed the little twist at the end too. |
| 2010-05-14 18:44:51 |
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Positive vote from me - and of course we want to hear all about you and your dog! |
| 2010-05-10 22:40:25 |
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thats a positive from me - a sequel for the other men to cum her way is a good idea. |
| 2010-04-01 01:44:58 |
The Awakening - Chapter 1 |
Chapter should be excedllent - just as chapter 1 was. |
| 2009-11-30 22:53:23 |
Sophies home alone...part1 |
Spacing - plain and simple. A little to quick to the action too - especially on the horse part. Not bad but need some help though. Please keep working on this though. |
| 2009-11-04 03:28:54 |
Daddy's Toy |
Hope you continue the story |
| 2009-10-01 22:45:57 |
Lauryn Goes to Disneyland |
Will echo what everyone else has said and what is obvious - proof read for clarity and spelling and grammar - did make it hard to follow in several spots. |
| 2009-08-23 22:04:40 |
The 16-Year-Old Tease 2: Tease Harder |
Great start on both chapters. Hope the series continues. |
| 2009-08-21 23:32:45 |
My First Time |
please continue to write more. |
| 2009-08-21 22:53:29 |
My Disastrous Night |
Sandra, wife and dog - work them all into it. |
| 2009-08-21 02:48:26 |
Fucking Sleeping Leah part 2 |
Sorry for the delay in leaving a comment - had to clean myself up! Liked the story - spacing is my only suggestion. |
| 2009-08-21 02:17:28 |
Fucking Sleeping Leah .. part 1 |
well if thats the teaser then I will have to read the second part now! |
| 2009-08-21 01:49:41 |
The VTP Stud Ranch |
enjoyable read - need to space the pargraphs though to ease reading. So wheres part two?? :) |
| 2009-08-15 16:09:12 |
Formula 1602 |
liked the story. Some how I see Jennifers mom getting in on this as she was a snooty bitch too. Maybe a lil mom/daughter action as well? Waiting for chapter two! |
| 2009-08-09 20:01:56 |
My neighbour Jessica |
Spell check or a good proof reading - but good story though. Part 2? |
| 2009-08-07 17:46:24 |
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Almost 11,000 reads and over 90% - must be doing something right Rebecca! |
| 2009-08-07 17:43:01 |
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I love it when ppl cant separate fantasy from facts Rebecca. I have been there myself with stories I have written. If they cant read the header and figure out that they wont like it then fuck em. Thats what a disclaimer is for.
On a positive note - story was great! Enjoyed it and already have part three open. Thanx for sharing with us all! |
| 2009-07-31 17:47:55 |
Ginger learns her lesson: part two |
You were going to leave us hanging (so to speak!) at part 2 Ms. Lewis? That would be wrong in so many aspects. You deserve a spanking for even contemplating such a feat! Part 3 should definitely be written when you have the time. Spacing would make an easier read - but will get through it for part 3 sexy! |
| 2009-07-30 17:32:32 |
Nora |
Great story! Ah yes - have to remember those days of having an ofice and an assistant that you were involved with. And yes sex does happen at the office! Field service has benefits as well but wont forget the days of being in the office either. Very nicely done! |
| 2009-07-27 19:07:41 |
Libba Mae |
good start! I cant stress enough about spacing making a story easier to read. But quite enjoyed it and has potential for other parts like the beastiality I am sure we will hear about eventually. Thanx for sharing! |
| 2009-07-23 23:59:29 |
Lily's last summer |
Interesting start - I hope the story continues and builds. |
| 2009-07-23 01:41:41 |
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Different yes - but a decent read though. I wouldnt do something lighter unless you want to. Write what makes you happy I always say. |
| 2009-07-22 01:07:36 |
My first time |
Well paragraphs always help for an easier read. A few spaces really help reading through a story. Hope you write more. |
| 2009-07-22 00:03:11 |
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Yes Good Little Girl! Just like Oliver, "Can I have more?" |
| 2009-07-16 02:46:14 |
TRY IT ON FOR SIZE |
Love your stories and writing styles. I know all too well how long and hard it can be to write consequent chapters to a story. You have several that I would love to read the sequels to. I hope you get the chance to continue and post them. Thanx for sharing with us all. |
| 2009-07-07 13:03:52 |
THE HUMILIATION OF JENNIFER |
Love your imagination dear. I do hope you continue this story line and also hope you get as wet as I am hard! Nicely done! |
| 2009-07-06 12:50:51 |
I'm Not A Little Girl Anymore |
Do hope there is a sequel - would love to hear what little Linda has planned. |
| 2009-06-12 18:20:11 |
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A little slow to start with the ending where it was - but definitely hope there is a part awaiting validation. |
| 2009-06-12 13:31:03 |
Army Camp |
oh for fucks sake continue! |
| 2009-05-11 13:07:06 |
When I learned How |
Loved the story Katie - look forward to more tales - or is that tails? |
| 2009-05-08 18:07:31 |
April (Longish) |
Quite enjoyed this story. Nice work. Hope to hear more from you. |
| 2009-05-08 17:02:32 |
Alumni: Lisa's Punishment |
Looking forward to the rest of this story |
| 2009-05-08 16:14:32 |
The Cock Hungry Houswife |
I spend a lot of times in apartments as well with my job. Always a great fantasy and you sometimes wonder if the women there arent sometimes looking for a lil more. |
| 2009-05-08 15:51:48 |
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While I am not sure about an 8yo with a full sized shepard and being that sexually active - have enjoyed the majority of these two stories and hope there is a third cumming. |
| 2009-05-08 15:49:02 |
Daughter's Accident |
Good story. Not overly detailed or anything but still a good read. |