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Comment |
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| 2010-11-29 11:43:52 |
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No younger >.< ignore the sickass pedos. |
| 2010-11-29 11:36:02 |
Taking Mary |
Sorry, I missed that bit; I saw as my comment was going through that you did indeed untie her, and it was too late to stop it. I apologize =) |
| 2010-11-23 13:35:50 |
Taking Mary |
Not bad; short, sweet, and pretty hot. You need to watch your continuity though; you had him tie her down hand and foot, and then in the middle of the action flip her over with no mention of releasing her(or the excruciating pain of having both shoulder and hips dislocated)... it's not a huge deal, just something to watch out for. |
| 2009-12-03 12:03:27 |
For His Deeds |
I loved it... I do agree with the other girl that more detail of the oral would've been hotter. The fact that he fucked her to the beat of the music made up for it though; I have a thing for that. Fast, angry music for fast, angry sex ;D |
| 2009-11-13 12:03:33 |
Fat Bastards Rapes My Arse story 4 |
I don't find this story all that unbelievable... I was taken advantage of in these types of ways when I was her age.
To the author: I really like the stories, but a bit more detail would make them more stimulating... you named this segment after the anal rape, but then kinda glossed over it; it was kinda disappointing. The gangrape scene was hot though =) |
| 2009-11-12 07:46:07 |
Seducing Silvio |
Hm... seems to be formatting issues... oh well. It looked to be in normal paragraphs when I posted it. >=/ |
| 2009-11-09 02:19:26 |
The Incubus |
Yes, read more carefully before you comment... the author used the terms in their correct gender roles. =) I enjoyed the story, with it was longer. Off to look for more |
| 2009-10-23 18:23:30 |
Punishing Rachel, Part One |
Yes, it's true that if you're looking for a quick wank my stories are likely not what you want... I personally am more aroused by sex in context than random scenes. If I hadn't introduced you to the characters in my intro that 'dragged', would the story have been as good? I think not... it would have been some guy angrily faceraping some chick, and who knows why. Perhaps it's odd of me to be more turned on by what's going on in people's minds than just the physical act? Naaah... =P |
| 2009-10-23 18:18:23 |
Punishing Rachel, Part Three |
Thanks so much for all the encouragement!! =D unfortunately, I'm having RL issues, mostly with my internet, am unable to post part 4 at this time, though it is done. I may break down and just re-type it off the flash drive I have it onto my phone so I can post it from here... the task is daunting, though, and I admit I've been trying to avoid it. Thanks for your patience (those of you that have it =P) and the last part of this, plus the first part or two of another series will be up asap. |
| 2009-10-15 14:43:12 |
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You have a lot of potential... you describe things in a way that's really hot. You really need to use paragraphs, as the previous commenters said, and to use spell and grammar check before you post. If you don't have a word processing program, go download OpenOffice... it's free and has everything you need. I think with some technical improvement your stories could be great. =) |
| 2009-09-29 19:56:30 |
Punishing Rachel, Part Three |
Ah, dammit... found my own mistakes... and a couple of redundancies. Oops! We live, we learn... I shall continue endeavoring to improve. =) |
| 2009-09-29 09:29:38 |
Punishing Rachel, Part Two |
I really did put part three up for validation on Friday... and I'm still waiting... I think that 1 or 2 day thing is not so accurate. I'm really surprised, and sorry for the wait. =) thanks again for your encouragement. |
| 2009-09-28 17:38:41 |
BLACK FUCKS> White |
This is silly, and what's with all the blank comments? I agree whole-heartedly with the first comment.
But um... Ragunzen... calling another dude 'babe' doesn't exactly make you sound straight... |
| 2009-09-28 14:05:47 |
Camp Wanafuk, part 2 |
I wish it would quit surprising me, the way people whine about things in a story that are listed as genres. Apparently it takes greater than average intelligence to be able to skip past stories with themes one doesn't like, because I see an awful lot of morons. |
| 2009-09-28 13:42:30 |
Tied up for the night |
Where was the rape, exactly...? I liked the story, but the genre choices are misleading. |
| 2009-09-28 09:31:56 |
My sister, the Bitch (was taken down i found it) |
*facepalms* WHY IS EVERYONE TELLING THIS POSTER GOOD JOB? He made it clear it's not his, and it's still on the site under the ACTUAL author... go uprate HIS. He's the one who deserves it. |
| 2009-09-25 22:05:11 |
Reading Allowed, Pt.7 |
Even without any "sex" per say, your stories still make me long to be her. =) |
| 2009-09-25 20:37:25 |
Pink Little Girl Panties |
I like the concept, but you should never end a story with an elipsis, unless it's at the end of "To be continued..." Also, proofread a bit more closely... it's 'prostate'. 'Prostrate' means something else entirely.
I was happily surprised to find out this was NOT a pedo story, with that name and 'young' as a genre. Not bad at all, really... just categorize it more accurately next time. =) |
| 2009-09-25 20:14:45 |
my first fuck |
Oh damn... I read this hoping it would be ok, but damn. First of all... the spelling and grammar stuff has been covered. Suffice it to say, I agree... it is some of the worst I've seen. Secondly, there's no way it's a true story... ridiculous to think a 13 or 14 year old boy would fist a 12 year old girl... or that she would orgasm from it... especially for what must have been several minutes, considering what all happened 'while (you) were in the middle of an orgasm'. And there wouldn't have been any need to scream when you had sex after, if you'd already been really, literally fisted... but of course that didn't happen. The whole thing is just... bad, and dishonest to boot. So in my humble opinion, keep your sequels and other firsts to yourself. |
| 2009-09-25 10:25:27 |
Punishing Rachel, Part Two |
Once again, thanks so much for all your sweet comments! I'm putting part 3 up today, so hopefully it will be validated by the end of the weekend.
I will absolutely finish this story and post the rest on this site; however, after, I may move on. It's becoming more and more obvious, the more I look around here, that my stories are never going to have a chance at widespread readership because I'm not child-molesting or fucking my dad. It seems those are the only postings that get a lot of response. It's unfortunate and disturbing, but since I can't change it, I'm probably going to find somewhere else to post after this story. I'll link it, of course, for those of you who find deviant, violent, fucked up sex between non-related adults hot. =)
Oh, and for fuck's sake, don't get your underpants all in a wad if you dig those other types of stories, I just mean this site may not be my type of audience. I need to find a more BDSM-oriented site is all. |
| 2009-09-23 16:23:58 |
Gone fishin' - Conclusion |
Oh yes, good point wolf... the idea that children shouldn't be sexually victimized by adults is such a RECENT concept, we should take that into consideration. Maybe we were wrong... maybe child labor laws are wrong too. After all, they're not any older... let's put all the kiddies back to work full time, too. That'll keep 'em outta trouble. *rolls her eyes* love has no boundaries, my ass... neither does depravity. Believe me, I know... but I don't write about kids. |
| 2009-09-23 16:09:12 |
Reading Allowed, Pt.1 |
Has anyone ever noticed that people looove to leave shitty, trolling comments with no name on them? 'Scuse me; who's a pussy? Get a life and quit reading fbailey's shitty writing if you don't like it. Do you really not have anything better to do that try to start flame wars... anonymously? |
| 2009-09-23 16:00:07 |
Gone fishin' - Ch. 3 |
*bows to the Critic* 'nuff said! |
| 2009-09-21 18:25:49 |
Gone fishin' - Conclusion |
LOL... srsly? You think this is like, some existential love story without which one can't understand love? Good lawd, better love stories come out in movies every year. What I see all the fawning fans ignoring is the question of "what if it was your daughter" and that kind of thing. I wonder if you'd find it so sweet, and I agree most probably would not. The story itself is fine and well-told, and most aren't arguing that either. 14 year old girls are children, and men over 30 who touch sexually/have sex with them are pedophiles. Period. It is not pretty and romantic, it is predatory and tragic. In the context of fantasy, yes, great... but those of you who are arguing that it should be ok in real life are wrong. |
| 2009-09-19 14:21:59 |
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Fucking hot, I loved it! I was too caught up in it to be distracted by the typing errors =) |
| 2009-09-18 23:37:27 |
fucking sleeping leah 3 |
I'm afraid I agree, perhaps you should have paid more attention in English class with the "losers".
Btw, "grammar doesn't mean shit" until you're not 18 anymore, and what's in your head matters more than what's in your clothes. |
| 2009-09-18 09:02:29 |
Punishing Rachel, Part Two |
Haha... damn the plague of double-posts... anyway thank you guys so much for your kind words, it makes it easy to disregard the negative raters who never leave any reason as to why. Part 3 is well under way, and is going to be a more psychological bit... that's all I'm saying though. ::wink:: As long as people are liking it, I'll keep writing. |
| 2009-09-17 13:11:22 |
Punishing Rachel, Part Two |
Hm, maybe I was unclear... they woke up at about 8 am saturday morning. It will be more like lunch or after when he gets back with the food, so what comes after will be a long evening/night... Rachel is going to be taught some lessons in humility::evil grin:: I may write her dream out... or one of my own, since that's where I stole it from... as a separate story; I don't want to delay progress on this one. Thanks for the feedback =) |
| 2009-09-17 12:14:04 |
Aimees Joint |
The negative reviews are so harsh because this is crap... poorly written, confusing, not hot at all... if you post garbage you should expect that. |
| 2009-09-17 12:09:53 |
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I kinda wish the girl was a little older... you really can't put a full grown cock in a 3year old without doing her some kind of terrible damage, I don't think. I kinda thought, before you did that, that he would wait to fuck her and do other things first... that would have been a much better idea. Checking for continuation now =) |
| 2009-09-17 11:56:36 |
James |
First of all: author, the spreader bar you mentioned is fairly standard bdsm equipment, you didn't come up with it. Secondly, to the other commenter... true, the tease kinda sucks, but I beg to differ that people don't like detail. Anyone who does... I feel sorry for them... they should probably just watch their porn instead of reading it. How can there be too much detail? |
| 2009-09-17 09:05:37 |
Punishing Rachel, Part Two |
Ahhhh! One of these days I'll post without mistakes, I swear... somehow the (Saturday.Morning) from the top got lost, and NOW I see more typos... I swear I read it over like 3 times before I submitted it. Oh well... hopefully you guys willl dig it anyway xD |
| 2009-09-16 15:29:31 |
My wife & tailor |
Spitfire, how dare you call anyone else out for stealing stories when you are a thief yourself? It's patently obvious from your comments and intros that you can barely write yourself; I'm frankly surprised you can read and comprehend the work you've stolen. |
| 2009-09-16 15:24:25 |
reading aloud |
Don't you think, now that the REAL author of this story is posting the series, you should pull your plagarized copy? In case you're too illiterate to understand that... which you may well be, after noticing your intro... that means stolen. There's very little I find more pathetic than stealing others' work and passing it off as your own... you didn't even have the decency to leave it open whether you wrote it or not. You blatantly lied and said it was yours. That sort of behavior should warrant banning from the site; wonder if any of your "work" is yours? |
| 2009-09-16 10:00:37 |
Punishing Rachel, Part One |
Lol! Thanks =) yeah I disregard negative ratings with no comments, I figure they're just people trying to boost their own spot by downrating other people... that or maybe I just won't be able to stay above 90% without some incest. *rolls her eyes* I read some of the stories, if there are other elements I'm interested in, and I'm not trying to talk shit about the people who write them; it's just not any particular fantasy of mine to fuck a member of my family. *shrugs* to each their own. |
| 2009-09-15 19:01:08 |
Punishing Rachel, Part One |
I just put up part 2 for validation; thanks for all your encouragement! I'll start on part 3 right away =D |
| 2009-09-14 20:57:08 |
Autobiography of a Rapist - Chapter 1 |
I enjoyed this very much... looking forward to future chapters. Shame on you who downrated this setup to what will probably be a great series, if you did it because there wasn't any 'real' sex yet. |
| 2009-09-14 12:21:28 |
Raping My Daughter 2 |
First it's 12 in, then it's 8... which I personally think you should stick with if you plan to continue. Foot-long cocks are such an overused, bad cliche. Once again, it felt... really, really fake, mostly due to the dialog and reactions of the girls. I'm not saying he COULDN'T make her like it, it just wouldn't be that easy, it would take time... and the likelihood a girl would suggest bringing another girl who rivaled her looks to the bedroom with her father... where there must be even MORE of the insane female jealousy because of the fucked-up nature of the dual relationship... are slim to none. Methinks the author really just doesn't know much about how women's minds work. |
| 2009-09-14 12:11:10 |
Raping My Daughter |
How exactly was that a rape story? I'm disappointed... it was unrealistic, especially the dialog. The pictures he took were like... pointless... I dunno. It seems thrown together and not well thought out. Maybe the next part will be better. |
| 2009-09-14 09:11:56 |
Punishing Rachel, Part One |
I want to apologize to anyone who chose this expecting alien action; that was an accident, and by the time I saw it, it was too late to change it. I should probably have waited until later in the story to add Stockholm Syndrome as well... but since I didn't, you can see where it's going. >=) I also realize I missed a couple of typos... I have to type these on my phone and have no spellcheck. Other than that, hope I get some good feedback. |
| 2009-09-14 00:15:02 |
Reading Allowed, Pt.5 |
Thank you for writing these, and thank you for posting them here. |
| 2009-09-13 23:43:41 |
Reading Allowed, Pt.3 |
Ah, this is just about my fondest dream. =) beautifully written. |
| 2009-09-13 23:31:33 |
Reading Allowed, Pt.2 |
It would be nice if people too illiterate to understand a story were barred from commenting on it, wouldn't it? ;P I found it awesome, just like part one... off to part 3. |
| 2009-09-13 21:57:06 |
Reading Allowed, Pt.1 |
Lovely story... one bone to pick. The Sleeping Beauty trilogy was written under A.N. Roquelaure, and even though everyone knows that's Anne Rice, the books still bear the pen name. I own all three, and they are a big part of the reason I am who I am now. ;D |
| 2009-09-13 21:47:15 |
When I was raped |
PEOPLE WHO READ STORIES LABELED 'RAPE' AND THEN TELL THE PEOPLE WHO WROTE THEM HOW SICK THEY ARE FOR WRITING IT AFTER THEY FINISH WANKING OFF ARE THE WORST SORT OF PATHTIC, HYPOCRITICAL TROLLS. PISS UP A ROPE. YOU DON'T EVEN HAVE THE BALLS TO LOG IN TO LEAVE YOUR COMMENTS. |
| 2009-09-12 19:44:20 |
A Night with Megan |
Hot, awesome, raaawr. Going to read them all now if I can make it ;D repeated violent orgasms make me sleepy. |
| 2009-09-12 19:07:10 |
Breaking Descent: Temptress Soldier |
I absolutely loved it, it gave me an anime vibe too... I adore hentai, it's so limitless xD |
| 2009-09-12 16:50:24 |
Even a Demon has needs... |
Fuck that was hot... I would love to see more of this. Or find out what happened to her after she killed the husband. Or both. >=) Love it. |
| 2009-09-09 15:15:06 |
A bumper harvest 1 |
The writing isn't great from a professional POV... but it's so hot in it's intent I can't stand it... raaawr rape scenes. |
| 2009-09-09 12:22:57 |
Aunt Alice Dog days of Summer Chapter 2 |
Apparently SOME women really 'like' dogs... and I've sure thought about it, though I don't own one and except for the idea of being licked and fucked by one I don't actually like dogs lol... loved the first part of the story, though the dialog was a little... obscene to the point of silliness at some points... who says 'so shittin good'? Haha. I have no interest in having a dog cock in my mouth though, so the rest didn't do much for me, but it was all in all very descriptive and good. |
| 2009-09-09 12:11:16 |
Tarnheim Academy Part 2 |
I do hope you intend to continue... not only is it insanely hot but so well-written! |
| 2009-09-09 11:58:07 |
Tarnheim Academy Pt 1 |
To the person who 'can't see a (Domme) muff-diving her victim' you missed the whole fucking point of why she did it... and adding guys would DEFINITELY have changed the mood... I agree with the last poster, write your own stories. =P excellent, hot and ripe with potential. Nice setup... give us moooore! |
| 2009-09-06 15:11:07 |
My Wife Rose and the Stray Dog |
Mm, so hot... I admit I'm kinda scared of the idea of a dog that huge though 0.o |
| 2009-09-06 14:54:46 |
A Three-way with my Husband and... the Dog? |
Might not be 'realistic'... I wouldn't know because I've never done any of it either... yet... but still very hot. Good job; I'd love to see more on the same theme. |
| 2009-09-05 12:30:14 |
Sacrilege Chapter 1 |
Hahaha... I find it hilarious and slightly ironic that someone would whine about the blasphemous bits... why would you read a story called 'sacrelige' if that offends you? *rolls her eyes* I agree it could use more details, but it was pretty hot anyway. However, when I see 'reluctance' as a keyword, I don't expect everyone to be so into it... the one girl only objected once and then got down and dirty with no other problems. Just my own peeve... I was looking for some force. |
| 2009-09-02 12:08:01 |
Crystal and to much achool |
It's not that people are being overly picky, they are trying to help. Spellcheck is easy to use, and while it doesn't catch everything it helps a lot. Having to stop and make sense of what are not typos, like transposed/missing/extra letters, but misspellings, ruins the flow of a story and is offputting as far as the turn on goes.
That being said, pretty good story =) |
| 2009-08-30 10:41:19 |
Harry Potter and the Spellbook of Desires - Chapter 32 - Ancient History |
I have loved all your stories so far, great job really in keeping it interesting! This is such a fun and deliciously deviant little series... keep up the good work! |
| 2009-08-30 10:27:40 |
Bunk beds |
Blah... generic... *yawns* |
| 2009-08-29 16:50:15 |
Raped by my own dog then left with an Itch |
Kinda... glossed-over and non-violent for a dog 'rape'... I agree it needs more detail. The way it is now is kinda like... it takes what could be really intense subject matter and makes it almost dull. =/ |
| 2009-08-29 10:26:22 |
the naughty Mom |
I read your profile... and it says that it will say in the title if you wrote it, and otherwise you're just posting the work of others. I applaud the story, it's very well-written, but I looked through everything you have posted and so far... you didn't write any of it. =/ Perhaps you should... anyway kudos to the actual writer. |