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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2012-07-02 18:05:16 |
Start over, with me |
I wish I could have read more of your poetry via another website; something so beautiful doesn't belong here.
Keep writing, and I'll look out for your poems whenever I'm browsing on here... |
| 2011-11-30 01:17:47 |
The Investigation - Caroline Ann |
I know, I'm a troubled person... |
| 2011-11-30 01:16:57 |
The Investigation - Caroline Ann |
I know, I'm a troubled person... |
| 2011-11-30 01:15:06 |
Her Fantasy - Ambush |
Previous comment;
Your words are really wonderful and something that I'm very happy to hear. At one point there was a two-piece continuation. However, when my last computer crashed the entire hard drive was erased and I lost it.
As I am busy with school I do not know if I can find the time to write the next piece, but I will try.
Thank you. |
| 2011-08-02 05:15:00 |
-8th Grade, Semester 2- When My Life Changed |
..Thanks for the comments.
2011-05-15 05:11:19- It wasn't the right thing. Killing is never the right thing, however the main character of this story clearly has a different mindset than normal people. While all of my characters may have my name (don't ask me why, I just write it like that) I am not like any of them (well, so far.)
Previous comment: I understand your post, and I wish you had read the more recent version. (which has a little more writing, and most of the third/first person issues weeded out [I think some commenter pointed out one]). This was my first story with involving sex, and it was new to me. I wish you had read more of my recent works. :) |
| 2011-08-02 05:08:14 |
Her Fantasy - Ambush |
previous poster:
Being raped is bad... Plus you can't want rape... or it's not rape... If you want it it's consensual... |
| 2011-08-02 05:07:02 |
The Investigation - Caroline Ann |
I wish I didn't kill all the awesome characters I made. :(
But I can't help it. |
| 2011-08-02 05:05:36 |
Where Am I? |
It's not my pain.. completely fictional. But thanks for all the constructive comments and criticism! |
| 2011-08-02 05:04:21 |
-8th Grade, Semester 2- When My Life Changed (2) |
Yes, of course it's fiction.
...I put it under fiction, no? |
| 2011-04-21 00:45:22 |
Oh God... yes...! |
...Write more please. </3. |
| 2011-04-21 00:41:46 |
baby girl |
I already replied once. But jesus mother-effing christ, YOU WRITE AMAZINGLY.
I'm going to go check for a part 2, and if there isn't I will personally spam your PM box until you make one. |
| 2009-11-04 22:29:16 |
A Slavegirl of Rome |
I agree with the previous comment. I just think you need a bit more spaces, because the wall of text is hard to look at. Also start a new line when a new person is talking to keep it from being confusing. |
| 2009-08-24 16:56:11 |
-10th Grade- The Rock Climb (2) |
I prefer to think of Abby more as a wolf so it's not so surprising she could kill him. It's not like she was a poodle, seriously. If he died to a poodle, I'd just laugh. |
| 2009-05-04 17:52:15 |
Twister sex with a hot girl |
Good descriptions. It seems somewhat realistic, though if I were here I wouldn't have let myself be alone with you :3 But that's just me. Also it is rather short, so making it longer would be better too.
Good job though.
Dear
READER
2009-05-03 20:43:45,
Are you the same person who gives the dumb comments to everyone? If so, get lost. Nobody wants you here.
If not, read the story before commenting. |
| 2009-05-03 17:40:30 |
Sandy Gets Even |
I laughed. ;)
10/10 :p |
| 2009-05-03 00:02:42 |
I loved you, I still do |
Just a couple grammar problems, but good job.
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| 2009-05-02 23:58:21 |
My Story |
Well done.
I'm sorry that this website has real losers.
Truly, I am. |
| 2009-04-27 23:29:46 |
-8th Grade, Semester 2- When My Life Changed (2) |
"his other hand slid up HER skirt to slowly massage my pubic region, much to my childish delight." - Dang it.
I knew this would happen. |
| 2009-04-02 18:55:59 |
The Chase |
I'm looking forward to whatever happens next. ;) |
| 2009-03-27 10:38:16 |
Amy's Rape |
Such a sweet daughter. ;)
Very well written :p |
| 2009-03-05 09:04:30 |
-10th Grade- The Rock Climb (2) |
Yeah. I know she didnt wake up. I did that on purpose, lol. ;D |
| 2009-03-05 08:55:49 |
-10th Grade- The Rock Climb (2) |
Lol...
That's a good question. o_o;
But still, whatever I say doesnt matter if I didn't include it intext, so be creative and think up your own reason.
Ex.: Maybe the dog considered her boyfriend a threat to her?
K |
| 2009-03-05 08:52:07 |
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For the record, when she said sex was all good and fine it may have implied that she had sex before but that was not intended, sorry for this misconception. I simply meant for it to show she wasn't afraid of sex.
I took about 1hr to write this, just wanted to see how it would turn out. And by the looks of it, it's gone well.
Please provide an example of my fractured paragraph please. ;), because technically all paragraphs can end the moment the subject/topic of the paragraph/sentance has changed. There were few grammatical errors.
But anyhow, thanks for your somewhat constructive comments, though I have to say (@e) that you provided no examples of what I could do to improve, and no serious ideas.
Thanks for everyone else though.
K
P.S. lastmochenan,
Dick size? Seriously, they were in a pitch black closet.
As if she could see that. He had descriptions from when she could see him, no later. :( |
| 2009-03-04 23:21:56 |
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Thanks.
I'll just consider this a trend, but for those of you who feel like posting comments like - "Stupid. -.-", then please include WHY you said that so it can be considered constructive, and not just a complete waste of time.
K |
| 2009-02-18 20:59:50 |
Little Red Riding Slut |
Lol xD what a great personality Little Red Riding Hood has~
Anyway, good story. Funny xD. Extremely different, but things like that are good on a website where all the stories are somewhat similar. |
| 2009-02-17 18:00:29 |
-10th Grade- The Rock Climb (2) |
Correction from my last post: The boy had no wounds when the girl fell asleep on him. |
| 2009-02-17 17:47:25 |
-10th Grade- The Rock Climb (2) |
For those of you who don't know, the dog killed him. The girl was sleeping... so she couldnt have. The boy had no wounds, and the dog's blood everywhere wouldnt make sense, considering there were footprints, and the dogs wounds werent THAT bad...
Also, as I said on the other list, for those who post comments like "Stupid", could you please tell me why so it can be considered constructive. :3
Thanks. |
| 2009-02-16 00:46:38 |
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Those who post comments like "Stupid -.-", could you say WHY you posted that so it can be considered constructive comments and not just a complete waste of time? :3
Thanks. |
| 2009-02-16 00:07:10 |
Home Alone With My Virgin Girlfriend |
You were right, it was good. :p |
| 2009-02-15 18:47:24 |
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._. Sorry I didnt mean to post this version... I had it posted at midnight... I am trying to get it deleted.... x_x Sorry again.
T_T
K |
| 2009-02-13 20:48:16 |
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Look forward to reading the next one** =P
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| 2009-02-13 15:26:27 |
baby girl |
Sad ending :( Poor girl.
The other comments have said everything already :p
10/10 |
| 2009-02-13 14:51:42 |
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Well done, once again. :) |
| 2009-02-13 14:41:48 |
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I know half the time I see the wall of text I'm like: Not reading this.
But it was great. :) (Better than mine ;_;, -sob, cry, cry-) Keep writing, I look forward to reading it. :)
10/10 :D! |
| 2009-02-13 10:27:16 |
Love Texting |
The last comment says it all. |
| 2009-02-12 21:08:26 |
Joanna Make Up Your Mind (Edited) |
I didnt read it I sort of lost myself, so crammed. Just felt like leaving a comment. :p |
| 2009-02-12 21:06:55 |
someone to listen |
At least she didnt die. ;D
Work on the grammar.
7/10 |
| 2009-02-12 21:04:01 |
Accident |
Needs quotations, spaces, the whole "........." idea is....kinda.....annoying...
More detail would be nice. Work on it.
5/10 |
| 2009-02-12 21:00:18 |
SEX PARTY |
It could be worse.
-cries in the background- Whyy!?!!? |
| 2009-02-12 19:29:33 |
-8th Grade, Semester 2- When My Life Changed |
Go keep comments like that where they belong. >:( Hasnt your mother ever told you if you dont have something nice to say, dont say anything at all?
Jerk. D:<!
Thanks to all the other comments though :D! |
| 2009-02-12 00:03:50 |
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Scary. That's all I have to say.
Scared me to hell and back.
I suppose that means it's good.
Thumbs up. |
| 2009-02-12 00:01:45 |
Strangled Co-ed |
*Disturbed*
Always in these stories the girl dies. :( Someone should write a story where the RAPIST dies T_T Right? :) Better ending's make for better stories. This is purely disturbing though. |
| 2009-02-09 22:55:14 |
-8th Grade, Semester 2- When My Life Changed |
Last comment was me btw.
K |
| 2009-02-09 18:26:19 |
-8th Grade, Semester 2- When My Life Changed |
Lol whenever I refreshed it resent the message. xD Sorry.
K |
| 2009-02-09 18:25:00 |
-8th Grade, Semester 2- When My Life Changed |
That went better than I thought it would, thanks. :D
Also, second comment: It was no, (pause here), thank you (as in she was saying he deserved thanks). Not no thank you (as in 'No') :P
Karen~ |