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Date Story title Comment
2009-02-16 05:39:26 First Time With Sarah The writing and dialogue felt very natural; well done.

The sex between father and daughter came a little too easily though - there didn't seem to be any build up of sexual tension. It was refreshing, however, to read an incest story where the taboo aspect was not the central theme.

Looking forward to your next one...
2009-02-19 04:27:15 First Time With Sarah A Reader wrote: "Don't say 'The End' at the end. Total literature no-no."

Agreed - I just want to add that it's not to be avoided because it's a literature no-no, but because it's like explaining a joke. If the story has a good conclusion it's unneccesary, and it's insulting to the readers to treat them as if they haven't already figured it out.
2009-02-19 04:49:44 First Time With Sarah A Reader wrote: "Don't say 'The End' at the end. Total literature no-no."

Agreed - I just want to add that it's not to be avoided because it's a literature no-no, but because it's like explaining a joke. If the story has a good conclusion it's unneccesary, and it's insulting to the readers to treat them as if they haven't already figured it out.
2009-02-26 23:55:49 Office Girls Great concept, pretty well executed. Watch the spelling and grammar.
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