||Chapter 02 - My Step Sister Cindy
||Very nicely done, am looking forward to reading more
||Mom's Kids 4
||Great, really a good twist, nicely done hoping for more
||my sister Carole next part
||DEAR readers Unfortunately all 300 pages of my story of my sister Carol and I were deleted from my files .. i have not been able to recover them ..
So it looks like I have to rewrite all that I had which had taken the best part of a year ....this will take time so I ask your patience i have other stories almost ready to post but as they are follow ups to my sister Carol, they would be kind of out of place if posted before - i am just so sorry for the unnecessary delay of things Bobby..
||MY SISTER & THE EXCHANGE STUDENT PART 10 CONSPIRATORS
||Always nice to a continued story well put together
good stuff takes time, there is no need to excuse yourself for a delay between i am sure we the readers will wait patiently
||Moms Kids 3
||Very nice, well written easy to read easy to follow
keeps you up
||my sister Carole next part
||please let me know where the mistakes are, I spent four hours going over this, I cannot believe I missed things, I mean it is possible, but can you point them out so I can correct my proof reading habits I do not like mistakes either and four is too many please either post here or send me a private message
||Feeling My Daughter: Part One
||this is very good, well writen, nice , calm , quiet , priming and probing I do not like the slam bang stuff
I hope you write more
||My First Time With Sarah Part 2: She Had Me So Close
||Very nicely done, please if you have time write more, I like it when things are taken slowly . Your storiy brought back a lot of fine memories with my girl Joyce . I have tried to wrtie about her and I but have troulbe putting it down in words . The ones I have posted were just parts of what I started Yours are more like what i wanted to write in the begining
Keep you the good work if you can locking for more
||MY SISTER & THE EXCHANGE STUDENT PART 2 DINNER
||Very nicley done, looking forward to reading more, I like stories with a tease , at the table that was just the right choice.
I can remember my teaseasing sister it was fun while it lasted .
||Not bad at all, I like these kinds of stories ratherthat the slam bang thank you mam ones.. There is no reason sexual encounters have to be rought and tough .. the playful onnes are sometime much better as you can let your imagination run with the story line . I have a bit of difficultly writing fiction when I try I get tied up in knots but you appeare to have gotten around this thank you for posting
||Baby--sitter's Delight: Allison
||Yeah !! that is what was needed part two .... now just keep it coming, i was a bit disappointed that mother had to get into things so quickly , i was hoping Joyce would be put through more hoops before we brought the other in ....
In any case pleas keep it coming it is good
||Baby-sitters Delight: Joyce
||This was really good in fact it is perfect for me ... I use the name Joyce in most of my stories, but the story telling does not go beyond her splitting up with her boyfriend . The real Joyce did go off and get married and i believe she had only one daughter ... so I'll just read your stories as an add on to mine ,as i said thisis just great thank you for writing , thank you for posting
||Fascinated with Hypnotism- Chapter Two
||Both parts are well written, I know it is hard writing fiction, I have a devil of a time with writting fiction, I have to have some truth to keep me aligned .
Keep things up you should be able to take this story line quite a ways with out having to bring it to a sharp conclusion
||Freddy's Family Fun2
||Not bad at all, however you had it working just fine, and could have continued along a bit longer before having them get caught, after all every thing was in place to keep the girls coming back for more, to the point that you could have had them competeing amongst themselves to provide more opportunities, perhaps great opportunities, risk taking situations etc. I could just imagine the three girls plying for attention at the breakfast table with the mothers not too far away. or perhaps atthe mall, or on the bus on the way to school, or even at school ,,, the situations might have been extensive... BUT you had them get caught ...........
||A Day In the Woods Chapt 15
||Well I certainly enjoyed this series, sex or no sex, the story held and kept me coming back. Mind you it was the sex that drew me here in the first place, but that is some thing else. I did not want to leave an anonymous comment as I felt you deserved better. I know how difficult it is to write and keep it flowing properly Thank you for your posting
I read your others but this series is the best by far
||Games at Work
||Thank you very much for this story, it was very good, kept me guessing the only comment that I might like you to consider in the story line and the title , we sort of got away from work at one point and i would have liked a bit more office time , mind you the way you rounded the story out you left your self able to continue so i will be coming back should you write more .
it is too back that the readers leaving comments are not forced to leave this signature names , ezpecially those who nic pick about things like name changes .... spell check does not catch every thing ..
as far as the other who live silly comments well there should be a way to viod those comments
keep up the good work
||Games at Work
||First i think you story is very good, I waould have liked to have read more plays at work, but your rounded things our fairly well, leaving yourself able to continue the story line
Second I think readers leaving comments show leave thier names especially if they are going to be nic picking about a change in names spell check does not catch every thing .
KEEP IT COMING, but if we are to play games at work, maybe we could spend a bit more time ar work please thank you
||Second time around ( Part4)
||sorry, but all you have to do is avoid clicking on what I post
this series is some thing my sister gave me, I pass no comment on the suject matter, I just cut the story into sections and posted ... Have a good day
||Second time around ( Part 3)
||I do not quite understand what you are refering to - SCAT -
i have posted this as i received it from my sister in a journal she had written . i thought i would share if it does not suit your taste i am indeed sorry .......
||Sharing My Room With Sis 10: Abby's Fear
||I have read each of your wonderful stories and now believe that i should stop posting becasue i will never be able to write as you have , even though i thought i was doing an ok job
Your writing is light, fresh, spell binding
Now that you have perhaps closed this series , i will look forward to more of your postings
thank you for this series it was a real pleasure reading them
||A Trip to Grand dad's farm - part 4 the picnic
||I know this replique to the 2010-05-08 comment is a bit late in being posted, but for the record - I will state that none of you really know just what we did at Grand dad's farm to entertain ourselves I am however sorry I missed correcting the proper term for stalks . indeed it was always hot like hell at the farm, unless it poured rain. but it never bothered us and as to the picnic, well if you would like to come on out and pass along North Beech and the cut off , you will see that there is a small patch near where that tree is that while not covered in deep soft grass, is not quite dirt between the rows of corn. I am sorry perhaps I should have paid a bit more attention to describing the landscape for my readers. The location of this spot is very clear in my mind, so I perhaps assumed things I should not have.
||Sharing My Room With Sis: The 2nd Day
I hope you keep it coming , nice and slow , delicate, no use rushing the story
||Hello- My Name is Jerome -1
||Too bad for you , I put this in the fiction section becasue that is just what it is . BUT I always wondered why those little white girls seem so happy with thier black boyfriends so i decided to write a story what it might be like if I was that young black guy and not the poor old white man that I am . Fiction leaves you lots of room to work with .. some of my other stories are base mr on what actually happened perhasp you would like them better after all they are not coded interracial . I mean what did you expect a love story !!!!!!
||My Niece Mary Jane part 1
||The speeling problem has been fixed for part 2 I thought the first one had been revised by Spell Check but I was looking at wrong proof read copy sorry ..... about that
as to lenght well i am not a big bang thank you mamme type of writer i wrote for myself, and thought may be some other would not reading what i had put on paper - be sides you need so many word of they will not post your story