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Story title |
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| 2011-10-26 20:38:03 |
The Trick |
I just spent about 10 sec trying to work out what a "dident" is...
And that's the first paragraph...
I'm not going to read it, instead I'm giving you a negative rating for annoying me and posting this load of shite.
Proofread it, correct all the spelling mistakes, re-post it. |
| 2011-10-26 20:37:18 |
The Trick |
I just spent about 10 sec trying to work out what a "dident" is...
And that's the first paragraph...
I'm not going to read it, instead I'm giving you a negative rating for annoying me and posting this load of shite.
Proofread it, correct all the spelling mistakes, re-post it. |
| 2011-05-13 13:59:18 |
a life of service |
One of my favorite stories!! Absolutely brilliant! Well done, mate. |
| 2011-03-30 07:39:59 |
Harry's Ladies |
Check your spelling and grammar! Always check your SPELLING and GRAMMAR!
I copied your story to word, and i got this error message:
"There are too many spelling or grammatical errors in Document1 to continue displaying them."
Mate! Come on. This is just too much.
If you cant be bothered to spell check yourself (or you cant), then have someone proofread it for you. Im sure there are plenty of people who would do it for free. Hell, if you cant find anyone, Ill do it myself.
One of the Anons said "grammar can kill a story". If thats true, yours is dead, mate. Dead and buried. 10 feet under.
I enjoyed it ;) Keep it up.
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| 2010-10-31 11:26:44 |
Gymnasium Nightmare |
Repost it with paragraphs and I might read it. |
| 2010-10-31 11:22:18 |
Abusing Nadia - 2 |
Sorry for posting same thing four times. I\'m not quite sure what happened. I\'ll try not to do that again :) |
| 2010-10-31 10:37:10 |
Abusing Nadia - 2 |
One of my favourites. It has everything that I like in a story. Good grammar, no spelling mistakes. Its well written. Characters are interesting and believable. What can I say... I loved it!
Cant wait to read the rest.
Ps. My girlfriend climaxed three times when I read it her!
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| 2010-10-31 10:32:09 |
Abusing Nadia - 2 |
One of my favourites. It has everything that I like in a story. Good grammar, no spelling mistakes. Its well written. Characters are interesting and believable. What can I say... I loved it!
Cant wait to read the rest.
Ps. My girlfriend climaxed three times when I read it her!
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| 2010-06-12 19:47:23 |
Amber won't do it again (Sequel) |
I agree with "READER 2010-04-14". Great story, but you have to hit enter before your characters start talking.
And I hope that Jim develops his sadistic streak :) |
| 2008-10-20 17:32:19 |
Harry Potter and the Sisters Black - The Complete Saga PART TWO |
I must say Ive really enjoyed your story. There are few things that I would like you to keep in mind in future (I hope youll keep righting). Please stop writing in that horribly official style. Being polite is important, but dont push it
I dont get Harrys character swings. Hes innocent and polite at one page, and he turns into a proper sadist on the next! If that was your intention, then I apologise, but it just doesnt work for me. Ron was much more likable character.
And why on earth everyone is passing out every so often. Sex is not that exhausting.
You have good ideas and imagination. Keep writing!
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| 2008-10-20 17:02:31 |
Harry Potter and the Sisters Black - The Complete Saga PART TWO |
I must say Ive really enjoyed your story. There are few things that I would like you to keep in mind in future (I hope youll keep righting). Please stop writing in that horribly official style. Being polite is important, but dont push it
I dont get Harrys character swings. Hes innocent and polite at one page, and he turns into a proper sadist on the next! If that was your intention, then I apologise, but it just doesnt work for me. Ron was much more likable character.
And why on earth everyone is passing out every so often. Sex is not that exhausting.
You have good ideas and imagination. Keep writing!
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