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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2011-11-01 08:38:39 |
Claudia Incarnata...Part II |
Please leave intelligent comments. Thank You. - Piquet |
| 2011-04-15 19:40:29 |
As Twiligh Tide Draws Nigh |
Typo : the title is 'As Twilight Tide Draws Nigh.' Please leave a comment. Thanks from Piquet. |
| 2011-03-25 07:22:21 |
The Slave Princess.... Part 7 |
Thanks Anon, Have you read the other 6 chapters? If so, please leave a comment. I will keep writing Cheers from Pete. |
| 2010-04-14 10:48:34 |
Sonnet for Haysi |
I love ABAB ! "Can you hear the drums Fernando.........." Ah the 80s ! |
| 2010-04-06 09:54:36 |
Jessica Elba & ME |
Her name is Jessica Alba - with an 'A'. |
| 2009-10-24 00:01:25 |
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Fantastic tale Sarahhh !!! (pun intended) "Your pretty peach is certainly plenty perky." LOL. Plenty hilarious, satirical, and well written as usual.
Cheers from Piquet. |
| 2009-10-16 17:13:22 |
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Excellent story Sarahhh - hot and hilarious. Well done !!!
-Piquet |
| 2009-10-16 06:27:46 |
Happy I Went To Work, Poem |
Great - would work well as a rap song. Well done.
- Piquet |
| 2009-10-15 03:32:19 |
Loretta.......Part 2 |
Er, yeah but why?
- Piquet |
| 2009-10-08 04:01:01 |
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Excellent story SMCC but your introduction was a tad misleading - you minx ! Very enjoyable, Well done !
Cheers from Piquet |
| 2009-09-29 03:58:57 |
Butterscotch Part 5 |
Sorry for all the annoying italics folks. My Bad. Please read the new edit of this story and please leave a comment. Many Thanks.
-Piquet |
| 2009-09-25 21:34:15 |
Nurse Lexi Gives In |
Excelent and very believable !!! Let's hear more of the adventures of Nurse Lexi. Well Done.
- Piquet |
| 2009-09-25 21:02:04 |
Leah Fulfills a Fantasy |
Great story - nice to hear a woman's perspective - Well Done.
- Piquet |
| 2009-09-25 17:07:06 |
Cherished |
Well done, you show potential. But you might consider an eazier to read structure and please use spell-check; this might be a porn site but we do have standards. Keep writing, good first effort and very romantic.
- Piquet |
| 2009-09-25 10:10:30 |
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Fantastic Sarah, entertaining and funny, hot as Hell too ! Keep up the good work.
Cheers from Piquet. |
| 2009-08-30 08:11:32 |
Butterscotch Part 5 (new edit) |
Thanks for your comment. There are four earlier chapters to Butterscotch, please read them. Yes, I'm working on the sixth and final part now.
- Piquet. |
| 2009-07-23 21:33:04 |
My Anus |
Oh Crustybunger, you never fail to crack me up !!! btw "does" and "doth" mean the same thing and I don't think there ever was such a word as "thoust". But, "Which doth proclaim the dusk" is fine. Well done, you always give us gastronomical distress - but in a nice way.
Cheers from Piquet |
| 2009-07-22 07:12:43 |
Peering From the Darkness |
Great work Safe Bet. Very evocative and erotically charged. Watch your tenses. You are writing in the present tense so try " Can she hear the beating of my heart." Also, what is it that falls onto the floor? Her hips? In all a fine poem. Well Done.
- Piquet |
| 2009-07-14 18:45:54 |
Can't Rape the Willing |
Very powerful work Safe Bet. An ode for the downtrodden.
- Piquet |
| 2009-07-12 04:12:59 |
Dream Lover |
Nice one Otzchiim. "Pubic hair" is a bit clinical for me. But a nice turns of phrase - particularly at the conclusion.
- Piquet |
| 2009-07-04 02:07:46 |
Butterscotch |
Thanks, If you liked this one please read Parts 2-5 of Butterscotch. And please leave a comment - all opinions are most welcome.
- Piquet |
| 2009-07-03 18:20:42 |
Alone at Night |
Excellent Otzchiim. Your best yet in my opinion. Well done !
- Piquet. |
| 2009-06-29 04:15:39 |
Lucia |
Agreed.Thanks for the feedback !
Cheers from Piquet. |
| 2009-06-12 21:32:43 |
Graveyard Slut 2 |
Nice one Fallen. You are our new Marquis de Sade !!!
And to people that left harsh negative comments, remember that even though Agatha Christie killed lots of people she was never once tried for murder. Why? Because they only died on paper.
- Piquet. |
| 2009-06-12 21:01:43 |
Do It Now |
Reminds me of a Swedish girl I knew once who thought that a sofa was called a sausage in English, "I sat on the sausage to watch the TV." But man was she HOT !
Well done Otzchiim. Nice meat metaphors.
- Piquet |
| 2009-06-06 22:02:56 |
Give me... |
Lovely poem Eils. Give Me - two sylables that sound like a heartbeat. |
| 2009-05-29 05:35:50 |
Defloration |
My mistake : Ars Amatoria.
- Piquet |
| 2009-05-28 05:04:51 |
Defloration |
Very horticultural in parts Otzchiim, but I liked it - and I'm glad you didn't rhyme 'match' with 'snatch'. Ovid's Ars Amaroria (The Art of Love) uses this type of imagery. |
| 2009-05-15 22:12:16 |
Where Am I? |
Great start Karen. But you really need to do some more editing. See if you can get a couple of friend sto read your work first - a fresh perspective or two usually helps. I love the line; "Finally done with me, you peeled your skin from mine." This makes him sound like a real parasite ! Well done - keep writing girl.
- Piquet. |
| 2009-04-16 08:56:18 |
A Kiss (and More) for a Special Woman |
Very nice Otzchiim. Althought I think that "clitoris" is such a clinical and unpoetic word, you've 'set' it nicely in poetic gilding.
Well Done.
- Piquet |
| 2009-04-05 09:06:09 |
Janina |
Thanks Mate! But I came up with this one after having had a fight with my girl. She stormed out of the house so I got myself a large bourbon and put on Leonard Cohen. Will look up Smith and Service. I love irony but it usually eludes me.
Cheers from Piquet. |
| 2009-04-04 21:14:21 |
Sara and Mr. Rostand |
Nice one as usual Minty. Sara's not quite as self motivated and proactive as your other heroines but a great story.
Cheers from Piquet |
| 2009-04-04 20:50:56 |
Blind Date |
Ye Gods..... a sonnet ! I like the final four lines best. Very good, evocative and nicely constructed.
Cheers from Piquet |
| 2009-03-25 07:43:39 |
The Ballad of The Legend of Johnny Fishturd Johnny Fishturd |
Timbaland move over - Crustybunger in in da house !!! |
| 2009-03-01 07:42:30 |
Welcome Home |
Very good and somehow a little sad, but in a positive way - I'm left wondering if this brief encounter made such a strong impression on him as it did on her. As for length; it's just as long as it should be. Well Done. |
| 2009-02-26 08:39:22 |
One night stand |
Very Good Mitchie. Nice to see some structure and a rhyme scheme. Nicely paced too - Well Done.
- Piquet |
| 2009-02-07 23:09:37 |
Blackmailing Blondes - Part 1 |
Great story. I'd like to see Nick fuck every girl in school - have 'em line up on their hands and knees and beg him !!! |
| 2009-02-06 22:04:50 |
Remember |
Very Good. Very romantic and well written. There just isn't enough romance in the world. |
| 2009-02-06 21:43:11 |
Morgan is a bitch |
Nice one Fallen. You need to do a little more editing/ proof reading, but keep it up. I know chicks that would love to have this sort of thing done to them... well......maybe not the wax in the ass. |
| 2009-01-30 22:33:48 |
Ode to Night |
Thanks for you kind comment. I've received so many negative ratings for this poem - for something that takes under one minute to read!?! I do like Wilde's poetry and this is written in 19th century taste, but as I said, it was inspired by making love under the moon and stars. |
| 2009-01-23 14:50:58 |
Having Fun |
Excellent work Minty. Well up to your usual standard. I like the fact that we don't know their names. It makes them represent all of us. |
| 2009-01-16 23:29:06 |
Green Ribbon |
Nice images. You need to do a little more editing and watch your tenses - "pervaded" is past tense, "grasping" is present tense. A very good start, please write more. |
| 2009-01-02 16:46:57 |
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Excellent as usual Natalie. You have transcended the ordinary and given us something truly inspiring. Well Done !!! |
| 2009-01-01 16:25:59 |
Ana's on the Prowl |
Great story - good to see a woman in charge. |
| 2008-12-12 03:57:25 |
Janina |
Please, please, please, some one, anyone - leave a comment. |
| 2008-12-12 03:55:15 |
Fantasy |
As always; succinct, sensitive, subtle, beautiful. |
| 2008-12-10 04:22:34 |
Golden Summer, A moment in time |
Beautiful and subtle work, Lady. Well done.
- Piquet |
| 2008-11-29 07:42:43 |
Butterscotch Part 3 |
Erratum : Line four of the quote from Swinburne's Dolores should read "In marvellous chambers of thine."
Please leave a comment. Good, bad or best of all : constructive.
- Piquet. |
| 2008-11-27 10:36:07 |
Business Trip Fling - Part 1 |
Great story man. Nicely constructed and well written. Keep up the good work.
- Piquet |
| 2008-11-23 09:07:03 |
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Excellent work Natalie. Can't wait to hear more from you. |
| 2008-11-21 08:22:39 |
Descent into depravity Part 1 |
Nice story. Good to see a guy writing from a woman's POV. Well done. |
| 2008-11-18 17:51:07 |
Sade Biography |
No wonder Napoleon decieded to leave de Sade in prison. btw : Any one interested in the Marquis should read the excellent bio by Francine du Plessix Gray. |
| 2008-11-18 17:43:27 |
How To Eat A Pussy |
Excellent advice Angry Girl. I'm one of the converted and I still think too many guys (and girls) are missing out on this beautiful passtime.
Well Done. |
| 2008-11-07 22:25:23 |
His Loss |
Well written and very funny - serves him right I say ! |
| 2008-11-07 22:16:44 |
One Night of... |
Very nice Lady. You've said so much with so little. Well done ! |
| 2008-11-02 18:06:05 |
I Like Ladies |
Good first effort JT (hope I can call you that) I love the "hallowed halls" line. Poetry is great for recording the fleeting glimpse, the momentary impression - a beautiful face seen for an instant in a crowd and some of the stray thoughts that fill our lives. Cheers from Piquet. |
| 2008-11-02 08:49:18 |
Rachel, My Naughty Little Tomboy Neighbor |
Nice one. It reminded me of some of the paintings of Norman Rockwell. I like your use of dialogue most of all - well done. |
| 2008-10-28 05:54:44 |
Butterscotch |
Thanks Wantsomefun, This is the first of a series. The next episode will be posted as soon as I put on the finishing touches. btw, the system will not accept the word 'cafe' with an accent - most strange. |
| 2008-10-26 04:03:11 |
The First Time for a Pair of First Time Lovers |
Nice story man. You've created a pair of believable and likable characters. It's great the see that your male character is sensitive and a "bit nerdy". It will be interesting to see where their relationship will go. You might like to consider writing the next episode from J.C's point of view - always a challenge.Btw, the word is 'defloration'.
Well Done. |
| 2008-10-06 00:12:50 |
THE VOYEUR |
Nice Julia, but I think you still need to do some editing eg."the warm, moist heat' A good poem. |
| 2008-10-05 23:39:22 |
Kim possible part one (revised) |
Poor old Ron misses out =( |