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Story title |
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| 2009-09-16 19:31:26 |
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Finally! Without being rude i can't read the gay bits - i'm not homophobic or anything it's just not pleasant for me personally but some great storyline here! I'll read the fifth installment a lil later,
Good stuff!
Annonymous Z |
| 2009-09-16 19:19:52 |
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Getting there now - I hope beth isn't this fucking strict on time the whole way through- would make a shitty sex scene in two mins... lol
Annonymous_Z |
| 2009-09-16 19:11:54 |
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Not bad... not bad... Like the fact theres a tangeble stor ybut the gay parts should eb indicated in the themes ^^^^^ Time for part 3!
Annonymous_z |
| 2009-09-16 19:01:30 |
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Pretty good so far - woulda liked it if they were a lil older but good so far - time for chapt 2
Z |
| 2009-08-26 00:43:36 |
Routine Questioning |
Absolutly lvoe the concept but you seem to avoid the intimate bits a lot, drift over them. The diea of Adam is fantastic it's just too short and not very erotic... |
| 2009-08-26 00:32:47 |
The Van |
Yeah, i woulda liked it if the protagonist had gotten a bit lippy and Jean had tied him up and fucked him like the 19 year old... Good idea though |
| 2008-08-31 18:33:45 |
Click |
Stupid... the story line had potential, you must of been too horney when you wrote this... it just doesn't make sense... |