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| 2010-05-22 19:20:46 |
Like mother.. like Wife |
well written story, though the tagline, Cuckold, is both odd and interesting. It is odd, because the cuckold is generally the husband on whom the wife if cheating, but there is no husband in the first part of this story, but rather a mother and son. I think it actually shows the origin of voyeurism and why a man would like and want a slut wife. The story would have been better to have developed more why he was attracted to his wife in the first place. You make her seem very ordinary. How did he see her slut potential before Mom re-entered the picture? |
| 2009-11-14 13:21:19 |
Shadows of Paradise |
written by a woman who clearly is really very much into getting fucked. Very hot stuff. |
| 2009-10-03 23:42:36 |
New Daughter, Chapter 8 |
Congratulations on a magnificent story from beginning to end. |
| 2009-04-11 23:11:19 |
Sacrilege Chapter 1 |
Wonderful description of a young girl's ass. Keep it up (so to speak.) |
| 2008-11-11 14:05:23 |
Daddy's Tease |
nicely written. Interesting and different that it is written from the perspective of the daughter. |
| 2008-11-02 10:53:36 |
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A wonderful tutorial--not only for Miss Denise, but also for me, Cha Cha, one of the many writers on this site who look to you, Phrenetic Ice, as our mentor in erotica. |
| 2008-11-02 10:39:05 |
My Wife's Christmas Affair |
Very nicely written. It adds so much to the sex scene to have it told from the viewpoint of the cheating wife to her cuckold hubby. Well done. |
| 2008-10-28 17:31:29 |
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You get an A+ from me and I won't even make you sit in my lap. |
| 2008-10-23 20:36:24 |
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nicely told, well developed story. Congratulations. |
| 2008-10-17 22:59:52 |
Wild weekend |
It was pretty good until the paragraph where you decided not to take a breath. |
| 2008-10-17 22:52:02 |
Vampire Jesse |
Okay as a first try. You do need a bit of work on the grammar and spelling. |
| 2008-10-15 19:35:36 |
Dads sex slave Jan |
unreadable |
| 2008-10-15 19:21:08 |
Wish upon a star ch.1 |
a good start, but it needs a bit of work.
you start out sleeping by a campfire outdoors and wake up with an alarm clock in the bedroom. Call it a lack of imagination on my part, but the sex change shouldn't have also resulted in a complete change of location (thought the transformation of the bedroom for boy to girl was fine).
Also, help the reader out with spaces between paragraphs.
Finally you need to think about plots. Get him-her to do something more with this new body new gender. Have some fun with it. Develop the story. |
| 2008-10-15 10:19:40 |
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the most wholesome incest story ever written. fantastic job. |
| 2008-10-15 10:09:18 |
A young guy. An older woman |
yummy story, well told |