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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2010-08-23 22:52:25 |
I Married my Mother |
Alright then...
To the complete and utter morons that thought this story was real, Are you fucking stupid? Or do you just not know how to read? It clearly says FICTION at the top. |
| 2010-08-04 21:56:39 |
Sex with my Hot Granny |
Bravo, that was nicely done, the anal at the end was a great touch, could've been a little longer though. |
| 2010-08-04 21:55:23 |
Sex with my Hot Granny |
Bravo, that was nicely done, the anal at the end was a great touch, could've been a little longer though. |
| 2010-07-24 23:02:31 |
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Not bad at all, could've been a little more descriptive, and I wouldn't have minded seen some more anal, rather than the small mention there was. |
| 2010-07-24 01:13:05 |
Lucky Josh |
Well done! Could've been a little more descriptive, but other than that it was pretty good. |
| 2010-07-24 00:41:35 |
A Harry Potter story Chapter I |
Not bad, pretty entertaining actually. |
| 2010-07-24 00:37:28 |
GOOD NEIGHBOURLINESS IN ZAMBIA |
Your writing is terrible, description is non-existent. And you are no longer a man but a cuckold. |
| 2010-07-23 22:25:11 |
I'm hot for my older sister |
Nicely done, dialogue was a bit fake but description made up for it. A few grammatical errors but nothing all that noticeable. |
| 2010-06-16 22:59:56 |
Big Incest Family Fest |
The idea is nice, but you need a lot of work on your grammar and spelling; english in general. I suggest you get a beta or learn the language you are writing in. |
| 2009-08-03 00:23:04 |
Fucking Mia Matsumiya |
Hmm...Not bad, not bad at all. |
| 2008-07-21 17:30:37 |
CAMP CH.1 Learning Curve (rewrite) |
Dude you have not improved on the "mangled" version as you said when infact it wasn't mangled at all and by the way you haven't improved it to its 'unexplored potential' as you say you are doing infact you have ruined it. Psionic is a word in the english language just look in a couple of dictionary's or dictionary.com. And saying that an author who probably put his heart into writng a story that was equvivalent to a novel is mangled is highly insulting since most reviewrs thought it was an excellent story. |
| 2008-07-21 17:01:48 |
ASHLEE'S YOUNG LIFE 3 |
I belive that the second one was written better but hey this one was still good maybe in the next one the dad will fuck her or her mom in the ass/pussy while the dog fucks them in the ass/pussy a sandwich lol. |