| Date |
Story title |
Comment |
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| 2012-10-30 11:03:42 |
Sandra |
weel dun given the translation |
| 2012-08-31 07:35:20 |
Double Dose Of Bad Seed 4.3: The Academy days continued |
this storie is total CRAP STOP AND THINK BEFOR YOU RITE |
| 2012-08-27 12:25:24 |
Aunt Rebeccas Remarkably Torrid Lesbian Incest Epic Part 2 The Seduction |
PLAGIARISM ?; you CHEAT |
| 2012-08-07 16:49:42 |
Dinah |
Nicely written thnaks |
| 2012-07-02 06:46:35 |
new life 1 |
BAD'POOR GRAMMAR' NO FORETHOUGHT ABOUT THE STORIE |
| 2012-06-04 07:58:03 |
Married with children |
make sum sense, Bad storie line!
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| 2012-06-01 13:21:16 |
Sexy Shelly Part1 |
BAB !!!!! YOU?DO YOU WRIET |
| 2011-08-01 19:13:48 |
Mom's still my first. |
Nicely dun,well writen. thanks |
| 2011-05-03 07:15:50 |
SAGA FROM LOVING MOM TO BECOME WIFE |
Bad grammer composed poorly |
| 2010-07-27 09:07:22 |
SEX WITH MY MOM, AUNT AND DAD |
Bad GRAMMAR; get help due not waste our TIME.
A sincere effort no doubt but not usable. skipper
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| 2010-07-15 06:58:08 |
A Good Kind Of Trouble |
Good story,well dun.Thanks Skipper
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| 2010-05-06 10:27:14 |
Black mailed teacher |
this sounds like amused ramblings of someone's mind, no forethought or structure. |
| 2010-05-06 10:11:08 |
Jacob's Retirement |
a damn good read, timeline and placement were excellent, keep writing it's good to still find people who can write and use the proper placement of characters and time. |
| 2010-04-30 15:10:02 |
Raping a cheerleader slut |
the situation that took place at the end of the story, could have been better plotted a little less of the Wham Bam thank you ma'am and more attention to details and timeline. |
| 2010-04-30 14:54:49 |
Whata Week- Day 3 |
a few major writing errors, females do not have prostrate glands, the timelines are somewhat vague. |
| 2010-03-19 15:49:50 |
My neighbour two doors down. |
quite believable, the lust of an older female in the enthusiasm of youth when the entire scenario was pretty well formatted would slightly more detail be appreciated in certain parts. Well done |
| 2010-03-11 10:19:02 |
The best of 2 worlds part1 |
appears to be totally off-topic, ; 'ENEMAS' whatever happened to originality let's stick to the storylines as in ENEMA
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| 2010-03-11 10:14:28 |
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totally off-topic ramblings of a bemused person, totally unreal and appears to have no semblance to the truth |
| 2009-12-07 14:00:29 |
mom sis and me |
poor character layout, no forethought was given to the format, please study other people's work and understand why they use what they do in English language quotes and text placement of character and consistency in storylines |
| 2009-12-05 08:38:47 |
Visiting Day With My Aunt...Glad She Decided to cum! |
making the aunt less aggressive and more a seductress and the nephews more the aggressor this puts it in a better age contacts |
| 2009-12-05 07:44:30 |
sister n law fuck |
very poorly written, stories given from the perspective of the perpetrator with very little reference to the feelings of the victims age of the youngster is questionable very little thought appears to be given to the format of the story. skipper |
| 2009-11-24 15:42:32 |
My mother is the entertainment for my 18th birthday |
no human being could treat his mother in any way like that, it's absolutely demeaning and cruel not to mention perverted and selfish |
| 2009-07-30 10:32:49 |
Nora |
having been in the corporate world somehow this scenario could be any more true with the exception of sex in the office however we all must take risks finding a loyal secretary like that is an impossible dream come true well done |
| 2009-07-30 09:38:44 |
A Neighbor's Dream |
the overall story was not bad, however the scenario is quite predictable a chance encounter rather than the old worn-out work seen IEI'll work over there that you want to screw me type scenario.
I do not mean this is harsh criticism is constructive suggestions
Skipper |