Comments from Confusion816
|2008-05-06 23:22:24||Raven Ch. 1 - Self Exploration||Thank you for the feedback, Johnny Lightnin.
I've noticed myself about the lengthy paragraphs but I just can't help it because I can never decide when to end it.
Trust me, this version has the edited paragraphs.
Thanks for the comment (which I wish I saw more of) and be on the lookout for the second chapter.