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Comments from joeforillio

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Date Story title Comment
2008-10-22 22:28:04 Me and my sister.PT 1 A good story in my opinion, a few clean ups here and there with grammar and clarity, but good base ideas and a plausible plot-line followed up with good execution. I do agree with Bulksfpmunks though, the action moves along a little to fast, and without as much description as I might feel necessary. Overall, I am looking forward to a sequel, as well as seeing your writing skills improve with experience and time.
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