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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2011-05-20 10:33:52 |
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Great stuff, really!
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| 2011-05-10 23:40:05 |
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You KNOW they have to go back. Write it! |
| 2011-04-08 21:12:29 |
A Family Thing part 4 |
Sweet story nicely told. |
| 2010-12-28 21:15:36 |
Laura |
A rarity: intelligent erotic writing. |
| 2010-11-30 20:35:40 |
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Intriguing characters and story. I hope you will write more. |
| 2010-11-12 22:48:26 |
The Experience |
Good start. Readability and enjoyment would be greatly enhanced by good grammar, punctuation and paragraphing. I would also suggest avoiding minutiae and trivial detail that don\'t move the story along. |
| 2010-11-11 09:25:36 |
Seduction mother and ..... |
More to come, I hope. |
| 2010-09-28 21:32:48 |
My New Neighbor's Pool |
Unusual, original and VERY erotic!
A few errors of spelling and grammar but these were a minor distraction and did not diminish the enjoyment. |
| 2010-09-28 20:52:13 |
The Kiss |
Of course there are several more chapters where that came from! |
| 2010-09-23 20:58:33 |
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Get working on the rest of the story! Excellent. |
| 2010-09-01 21:03:23 |
Dave finds his sole mate in the last place he would have thought |
"Not on thy sole but on thy soul ..."
Gratiano to Shylock, "The Merchant Of Venice" Act 4, Sc 1 |
| 2009-10-23 01:17:11 |
Daughter's Friend |
Literate and well-written non-stop erotica. |
| 2009-08-10 00:34:08 |
What mom doesn't know. |
Nice beginning ... more please. |
| 2009-08-02 05:08:24 |
My Son's Girlfriend |
This could go somewhere really interesting. |
| 2009-07-21 23:11:31 |
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We need at LEAST one more chapter to resolve all the tantalising loose ends.
Is this the break-up of the marriage -- or the breakthrough?
How does Jessica really react? Does seeing Emily with her husband and learning about the pregnancy stimulate her own suppressed desires -- and her own lactation? Does the doctor play any further part?
Happy endings are good endings. |
| 2009-07-14 01:35:40 |
Finding bliss with my sister |
Lovely ... keep writing. |
| 2009-07-05 22:33:42 |
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More, please! |
| 2009-06-29 20:54:11 |
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To bring all the threads together Jessica will eventually have to become involved and then the son. One happy, milky family! |
| 2009-03-30 06:13:23 |
Daddy Gets Candy |
Excellent, but it doesn't end, it just stops. You KNOW it needs to be continued. |
| 2009-03-25 00:33:01 |
Family encounters of the sexual kind: the story of an anonymous girl |
More ... you have to continue the story. |
| 2009-03-12 19:59:17 |
Our New Neighbors - Ch04: Maxine's Liberation |
You are a writer who knows what your readers want -- and gives it to them in spades!
This is becoming a classic of the genre. I am one of the thousands who are eagerly waiting on every new chapter. |
| 2008-06-13 11:09:01 |
The Hot Tub with Friends |
I know this is not Eng-Lit 101, but any story that begins with the eye-rolling cliché of using cum to mean come ... that's as far as I get. |
| 2008-06-11 21:38:10 |
Siblings With Privileges (re written) |
Nicely done. A little subbing (No, no *that* kind of subbing, I mean sub-editing or proofreading) would have picked up the few minor spelling and punctuation errors. |