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| 2010-09-08 15:52:54 |
What is a psionic? |
I have given this some thought and would like to say the following:
I am not recreating the Camp environment. I freely admit that reading Camp gave me the idea that I wanted to read more about Psions, even if I had to write it myself. So I borrowed the ability/mutation from Camp, but everything else is and should be the sole property of it's original writer.
In my stories I simply use the Psion's ability to manipulate people and matter for a fluent and a bit different story line. Those of you that like my stories, please enjoy. Those that don't like them - well tough luck.
I am working on a bunch of new stories and rewrites and additions to older stories of mine. Unfortunately, due to the recession, I have had very little time for this but hopefully I will post one or two new stories in the next couple of weeks.
The larger stories have to wait somewhat longer. And for that I appologize.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-05-27 17:48:53 |
The House - Part 3 |
Thank you for your comment.
This is the last part of a three part story. The other two, being a lot more complex and somewhat darker and more sinister are still in the works and as it looks for the time being they will stay in works for quite some time longer.
But to give you a taste this part is kind of a remedy or happy ending to all the bad things that happened earlier. Why the house was built, why it seems to have soul and what events occurred in it since it was built.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-04-29 18:51:43 |
What is a psionic? |
Thank you for your input.
I guess that's what is bound to happen when one isn't fluent in English
It seems you are actually correct. A Psion actually is a person posessing Psionic powers. I will at a later point go through all my writings and correct this error.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-04-15 20:38:33 |
My little latina - ch. 2 |
Thank you for your comment. There will be more stories since I'm working on a bunch of them. Unfortunately my writing time is somewhat limited and since some of my stories are actually becoming more complex they are taking longer to write now than before.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-04-15 20:34:59 |
My little latina - ch1 |
Have fun... :-)
But remember to bring along some patience since it is over 600 pages if I remember correctly.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-04-07 17:05:38 |
The House - Part 3 |
Thank you for your kind words.
Hopefully I will be able to keep up the good work in the stories I'm working on.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-02-27 16:18:54 |
The Barfly - ch. 1, rewrite |
Why thank you, for your enlightening comments.
Don't forget that me being a novice writer has got to affect the quality of my work. If I thought I was perfect I wouldn't give two bits of what you all think of my writing and probably turn off the comments option.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-02-26 18:26:31 |
My little latina - ch. 2 |
Thank you for your comments...
Although I know four languages, Spanish is not one of them. The only Spanish I know is "No habla Espanol". Despite this handicap of mine I do agree with you that it would make the story more realistic. But then again this webpage does not display the special Spanish characters correctly. I once tried to write the Spanish word "Senor" including the tilde n and all that was displayed on the web was "Sen". The site cut off the tilde character and the rest of the word after the tilde character.
I have started a rewrite on the first two chapters and I have started work on chapters three and four so I will take your other comments into consideration.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-02-26 18:25:29 |
My little latina - ch. 2 |
Thank you for your comments...
Although I know four languages, Spanish is not one of them. The only Spanish I know is "No habla Espanol". Despite this handicap of mine I do agree with you that it would make the story more realistic. But then again this webpage does not display the special Spanish characters correctly. I once tried to write the Spanish word "Senor" including the tilde n and all that was displayed on the web was "Sen". The site cut off the tilde character and the rest of the word after the tilde character.
I have started a rewrite on the first two chapters and I have started work on chapters three and four so I will take your other comments into consideration.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2009-01-22 01:57:42 |
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Thank you for your comment.
You are right and you are wrong. I have given this some thought, after reading your comment, and the difference in writing, you are mentioning, would in the real world depend on a persons character and origin. In a story, things like this depend on the writers style and how he imagins his character. Since I'm still defining my style, things like this will continue to pop up. I would suspect though that you might see both types in my stories depending on the character of the story and the persons in it.
Kind regards
J. Baily |
| 2009-01-07 16:52:36 |
The House - Part 3 |
You are so very welcome.
And I wish you all, all the best for the new year.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-11-04 02:05:33 |
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Thank you both for your kind words.
If you click on my login name at the top you will gain access to my other stories. But I would like to warn you that the only story I consider finished at this time is "The House - Part 3". The other stories are subject to rewrites, since they are actually my first writing experiments and will be replaced by final versions at some later stage.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-06-18 10:14:23 |
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Thank you kindly for your reply.
I think you have a few very valid points and as a comment, yours is a gem.
To mention Stephen King was more to clarify the direction i was taking with this story since one of the comments I got was rather hefty and in no context with the story's content. There is not a single scene in this story that has not been written into some other story or been displayed in one or the other movie or TV show. Compared to some of the things out there this story is rather tame IMHO.
This first version of the story is merely an idea I jotted down in anger over an, to say the least, sometimes imperfect school system. I know it sounds farfetched but it will be explained in more detail in a later version.
I will see if and when I finish a rewrite that contains more detail but as a rant towards our sometimes imperfect schoolsystem this felt like enough.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-06-16 12:15:19 |
The Barfly - ch. 1, rewrite |
Well Martina, you got me there. :-)
If you read the story "Camp" you will find out that a psionic is a lot worse a phenomeon than God since a psionic has to bear the burden of human psych and is therefore imperfect to say the least.
Technically an unstable psionic is worse than an atomic bomb so using this phenomenon in my stories allows me almost unlimited freedom in the direction of Science fiction and human interaction.
In my first reply I was merely thinking in scope of the stories I have published so far. Since I'm still learning and practicing how to actually write stories I will reserve the complicated stuff until later. I don't think it is wise to jump into the deep end of the pool until I'm a bit more proficient on writing.
If you like a closer view on psionics take a look at my posting "What is a psionic". There I explain some of the things related to the phenomenon.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-06-15 17:30:49 |
The Barfly - ch. 1, rewrite |
Thank you Martina, for your comment.
I never would have thought being halfways considerate and decent towards a female of the human species might be interperated as a synonym of being gay. WOW
Amazing how some people have to keep reminding us that we evolved from apes.
I never thought of comparing a Psionic to God. I think the Psionics are more about being able to do whatever you want without putting others into hams way.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-06-03 03:35:43 |
My little latina - ch1 |
What a sad little person you are.
Kind regards
J.B |
| 2008-06-03 03:34:18 |
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Oh, and about going to hell...
I'm not sure they would want me down there.
Have a nice day...
J. Bailey |
| 2008-06-02 14:56:11 |
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Thank you for your comment since it actually prooves a point.
I'm capable of writing evil and obnoxious stories that call forth the worst in people.
However...
I think it would help if you actually read my stories before you comment on them. As I have stated in my comments this story is an experiment on whether I'm capable of writing an evil story of horror.
I have by now, rewritten the story to clarify a few things but the intention of this story is still to portrait the battle between good an evil and that doing evil things leads to evil consequences.
If anyone has further comments regarding this story please don't hesitate to post them before I publish the rewrite.
And yes this is pure fiction.
I'm no Stephen King but who can blame me for trying. :-)
Kind regar |
| 2008-05-31 04:01:30 |
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In the shower we washed off all the jizz before going to the bakery for fresh bread. We then had a nice breakfast.
Needless to say we went early to bed that evening.
J.B. |
| 2008-05-29 18:26:08 |
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Translation please...
J.B. |
| 2008-05-29 16:03:06 |
My little latina - ch1 |
Welcome to the club...
I suspect that most of us are quite happy in our "sadness".
J. B. |
| 2008-05-28 16:35:28 |
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Thank you for the comment. It is greatfully accepted.
I never intended this story to be anybody's "sweetheart". It is a study in horror and nothing else. It has annoyed me for a long time that in the original story Peaches is left standing naked in the woods and this story is a speculation on what might have happened to her. Once I get a few more comments that actually make sense, like this one, I will see about a rewrite.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-28 02:24:03 |
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Peter I liked your story and the twist in the ending couldn't have been more sneaky. You simply get a positive vote from me.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-27 15:26:57 |
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I'm sorry I can't oblige, since in this story I only wrote an outline of what actually happened one morning quite a few years ago.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-26 02:48:45 |
The Barfly - ch. 2, rewrite |
Happy you liked my story...
Funny that you mention Fantasy. I'm actually working on an angle where I hint at certain things and then leave it up to the readers imagination to fill into the gaps.
I think this might be appropriate since different readers have different views on what should happen at different places in a story.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-25 05:27:26 |
My little latina - ch1 |
For those of you that are turned on and/or like the sex to start immediately I have put a short story up for validation. It is named "Morning sex" and should be out in three or four days.
Enjoy
J.B. |
| 2008-05-25 03:28:43 |
My little latina - ch1 |
I think I have a revenge motive, lets see what happens in chapter 3.
J.B. |
| 2008-05-23 12:17:59 |
The Barfly - ch. 2, rewrite |
The original intention with this story was to write for once about a nasty psionic but I fell for the girls bad experience and he fell completely for the girls. Suddenly all nastyness was gone and nothing but sweetness left. So I added a grain of nastiness with the ending since he was actually creating a new business on mind control and slavery.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-23 09:11:55 |
My little latina - ch. 2 |
Thank you all for your really kind comments.
Chapter 3 is in the works but it will take some time since it is a bit more complicated then the first two.
"its good could be better though"
You forgot to tell me what is wrong with it and what needs to be done better.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-23 09:07:46 |
My little latina - ch1 |
Thank you all for your kind words. :-)
Well chapter two is out.
Perhaps the genre should have been science fiction but I think not since there is no science involved but rather a mutation of the human mind. I will see about the graphics when I start serious work on chapter three. Psionics are more a natural phenomenon like f.ex. X-Men
About "Where the power came from". There is an explanation in a document stored in my profile. It's called "What is a psionic?"
I don't quite understand what you meen with "revenge motive" though. Enlighten me if you should read this.
Kind regards
J. Bailey
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| 2008-05-23 08:52:06 |
What is a psionic? |
A psionic's influence on a persons mind can be very subtle or very complex. It can also be very brutal and destroying.
In the case of Cassandra in the house she had been through a rough time and once his stimulation of her brain had removed her feelings of hate, depression, uselesness there was little left but love and vulnerability and as she saw him as a saviour and kind person all her love was pointed at him like an exploding bomb. So it only took her some hours to fall in love with him and it was a love that lasted them for a lifetime.
So he actually never "made" her love him but rather tought her to be sensitive, happy about little things and took away her bad feelings.
Hope this helps a bit in understanding why I still think it's a romance.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-23 08:41:29 |
What is a psionic? |
Yo, duuude. :-)
You talk way to fast and not being fluent in English makes me wonder if there is a dictionary available to translate "rofl, lmao, lol, kek... " and other such short phrases you throw at me. ;-)
I do agree with you on the chapter issue. As I have said in another comment I reckoned that most people here had read the story "Camp". I have since found out that this was a wrong assumption. For anyone that has read Camp my stories are logical. For those that have not my stories may sound unlogical.
In an environment controlled by a psionic love can come very fast due to his abilities and even without the psionic using any force and/or coercion.
A little modification and stimulation is all that is needed.
To be continued... |
| 2008-05-23 08:30:58 |
The House - Part 3 |
Thank you all for your kind words.
I met my wife actually in a restaurant. Never seen her before but now we have been together for some 19 years. I don't believe in complicated relations what again seems to reflect onto my stories. Either there is love or there is no love. The psionics ability is my tool to achieve in a few lines what might otherwise take a few pages to achieve.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-22 06:31:35 |
My little latina - ch. 2 |
Just wondering...
What is considered gay about a man having sex with a woman in a halfways sensual way?
J.B. |
| 2008-05-21 01:49:28 |
The House - Part 3 |
Go to my profile and there you will find somebackground information on Psionics.
It is called "What is a Psionic"
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-19 09:51:41 |
The House - Part 3 |
And another typo.
"Inclination" should of course have been "Idea"
I seem to be in the mood for typos today.
I appologize...
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-19 08:37:02 |
The Barfly - ch. 1, rewrite |
Woooops.
Those pescy little typos.
In addition to chapter two of "The Barfly" chapters one and two of "My little Latina" are pending validation.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-19 08:30:43 |
The House - Part 3 |
"ooh i loved that story my pussy is sooo wet and hot".
Now how is a writer to respond to a statement like that? ;-)
I have given the matter some thought and reached the following conclusion:
If you are a jerk trying to embarrass me I say "Grow up."
But if you are actually a woman and the story did have the described effect on you then you have given me the greatest gift of all. Being a man means I don't have the slightest inclination on what makes a woman hot. My only tools available are my feelings and my imagination. If those tools sufficed to have this effect I'll probably walk on a pink cloud for what is left of this day.
Especially since it would mean I'm on the right path with my stories. Porn accepted by both genders. Can't be wrong... :-)
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-19 08:23:30 |
The House - Part 3 |
The flow is actually something I try to keep up when writing. When the flow is missing it is my hounest opinion that I have failed.
Yes the ending was ment to be romantic and if you are under the impression it was, then it means I have succeded to end the story as intended.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-19 04:27:11 |
The Barfly - ch. 1, rewrite |
Glad you liked my storie.
Chapter two is waiting for validation so it won't be long.
And as a treat, I hope, chapters 1 and 2 of the story "The Barfly" is also pending validation.
530 867... To you I would like to extend an opinion of Dr. Ruth.
"I don't believe in one night stands. A man can not be a good lover to a woman until the woman has tought him what she likes and enjoys".
I wish you all a prosperous week.
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-17 18:22:31 |
The House - Part 3 |
Thank you all for your comments. I'm running the whole idea of writing my own stories on schoolbook english. English is by far not my first language so I'm greatful for all the help I get from you people. You are right about "himself", I must have been quite tired when I wrote this story. Actually as I read it over after it was validated I found out there are quite a few other typos.
Kind regards
J.B. |
| 2008-05-17 15:45:16 |
The Barfly - ch. 1, rewrite |
"hahaha, psychics..."
Just in case you missed it; the category is "Fiction" and by using the fictional concept of "Psionics" it is possible to get a smooth romantic flow into the story.
I somehow got bored of incest, kiddysex and nailing 10 year olds pussy lips and fingers to a piece of wood. Not to mention some other niceties that seem so frequent on this list.
Since there are relatively few writers providing stories that I enjoy to read I decided to try to add to the flora available by writing my own.
And if it takes a bit of science fiction to get the wanted result...
So be it.
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-12 19:39:19 |
What is a psionic? |
Thank you kindly for your higly enlightening comment.
J. B. |
| 2008-05-12 10:23:33 |
What is a psionic? |
There is something I don't understand...
Why are people voting on a posting that is not a story but background information?
J. B. |
| 2008-05-12 05:44:23 |
The House - Part 3 |
Larry.
I get your point. My problem is that I assumed wrongly that most people had at one time or another read "Camp" and that there was no need to elaborate further on the concept of Psionics. I have since then discovered that my assumption was false and have therefore posted some background information on the concept.
If you are interested you can access this information through my profile.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-12 04:20:59 |
What is a psionic? |
Thank you for your comment.
I'm just an amateur writer and just posted my first stories. Although I understand your sentiment regarding a followup on Camp, I would like to see a seaquel too, I'm not the original author and writing a sequel would require me to actualy build on Micheal's Ideas and in fact "steal" his characters.
Also I'm still practicing as you may be able to see from the stories I'm trying to write and post at this time and for that reason alone I feel completely incompetent to take on such a task.
Would be nice though if the original author saw pitty on us. :-)
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-12 03:49:11 |
The House - Part 3 |
Now that might be an idea for another dimension... :-)
J. B. |
| 2008-05-08 15:19:50 |
Gayle's young wet pussy |
I think you should repost the story but before you do so you need to read the story over and add missing words and in general add all the text that is missing.
Kind regards
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-08 03:27:47 |
The House - Part 3 |
bajo155
How can you comment on a story you have not read?
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-08 03:18:15 |
The House - Part 3 |
This part alone is about 24 pages.
We have a part that tells us about the demise of the previous owner
We have a part that tells us why he became what he was
We have a part of things the house had to experience prior to that
We have the introduction that tells us why "The House" became what it was
And we have the option of a spin off that gives us more episodes from the life of Paul and Caz
If you still think the ending is odd let me know.
J. Bailey |
| 2008-05-08 03:15:30 |
The House - Part 3 |
You must not forget that this is the ending of this part. And as this part is actually a teaser I wrote as a Valentinesday story the ending is logical. I wrote it as an introduction and happy ending to the rather gruesome story of the events that happened in "The House" from the day it was built. And since this is the first story I have ever written, let alone in English, it is a test to see if anyone likes my writing and if anyone is interested in me writing more.
J. Baily
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| 2008-04-29 18:37:20 |
Her |
Why does a story have to be long? A short story like this one, written in this manner can almost qualify as a poem or lyric. I think this is a wonderful insight into the twisted mind of a sexual predator, showing us how he lures himself into believing that his actions are in the victims best interest. It is not the number of words that decide wether you have a story, but rather what you manage to say with the words you have laid down.
Keep it up.
J. Bailey |