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Story title |
Comment |
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| 2009-10-29 13:03:43 |
tina rides david |
I had some difficulties reading this, everything just ran together. But what I could manage to read was a good start and would have liked to read the whole thing. Also agree with everyone else, qoates and paragraphs would do wonders. |
| 2009-06-28 18:20:25 |
Lisa raped and drowned |
Without paragraphs this was a hard read. Sorry couldn't read the whole thing. |
| 2009-06-28 18:17:18 |
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Hey hun, this was a good story.
~BR |
| 2009-05-31 06:44:02 |
Boy's Locker Room |
I had trouble following the story due to the lack of paragraphs. But then again as you were writing from a very young perspective it fits. This seemed to have a good story line and a great introduction.
~BR |
| 2009-05-26 22:20:43 |
Blind Date |
This leaves much to think about ...
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| 2009-05-26 18:40:34 |
He Touches Me |
this made me go aaawwww, she is in love
~BR |
| 2009-05-25 16:50:33 |
Ana's on the Prowl |
Good story Minty. Aside from some minor gramatical errors this was a good start.
~BR |
| 2008-11-09 11:36:01 |
My Story |
Doesn't look like my comment to you posted, I liked this poem. Simple words but what a powerful confession. |
| 2008-11-09 11:33:25 |
My Story |
wow! speechless! such simple words but so powerful a confession. Although I can relate to the words I cannot become one with your story. I likeed it. I'd like see more of your words. I hope you have grown stronger from that one experience. |
| 2008-10-25 09:52:08 |
HOW I MADE MY SISTER-IN-LAW A WHORE |
This is a good begining. There are some gramatical errors but still readable. I'd like to see more advanced writing, the story line is great. |
| 2008-09-27 14:08:40 |
Jessica in Jail - Part Two |
WoW lolly ... I only wish I had read this story earlier. Fantastic Story, especially loved the DP. |
| 2008-09-27 14:07:59 |
Jessica in Jail - Part Two |
WoW lolly ... I only wish I had read this story earlier. Fantastic Story, especially loved the DP. |
| 2008-09-19 20:53:59 |
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sorry thriller I had trouble reading it ... wasn't sure where the sonnets began or ended and it seemed to run together. Try again ... Read up on Andrew Dice Clay for Dirty Nursery Rymes, it will help with setting one of your own up. |
| 2008-09-19 17:31:33 |
His Loss |
I love it! There is so much truth in this. So many men do not realize how they push us to women not realizing that we would most likely love women much more and for the same reasons that they love us. |
| 2008-09-18 21:24:21 |
Jessica In Jail - Part One |
Looking forward to read part 2. This is really good! |
| 2008-09-15 14:19:11 |
Nightclub Sex with Drugged Wife |
Public and shared sex is so hot! However, I did get stuck in a couple of placed with the grammar but overall I think its good. Thank you for sharing this one. |
| 2008-09-04 16:42:22 |
Cumcaine Girl |
I tried to post a comment to this story a long time ago ... I just absolutely loved it! I wish more writers would push the buttons and hold the bar higher. Love your style Chagrin! ~BR |