James School, The Beggining
||This might be a good story but because of the horrible grammar, I didn't last two minutes. Spell check and editor.
Babysitting Betsy Wetsy
||The dialogue in this story is atrocious.
The Amulet part 2
||This story doesn't go anywhere. Just one fuck scene after the other. What's the point?
My homeless stepdaughter Part 1
||Don't switch from 1st person to 3rd person mid-story like that, it's jarring. Just stay with 3rd.